食物— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Give a clear, concise topic sentence stating your favourite food, then add one or two specific supporting reasons using linking words. Avoid filler words and unclear phrases. Use accurate vocabulary (e.g., ‘salad’, ‘vegetables’, ‘snacks’) and correct grammar: keep answers to 2–4 sentences.

範例: My favourite food is salads and other healthy vegetable dishes. I enjoy them because they make me feel energetic and are easy to prepare, especially with a simple dressing. For example, I often mix spinach, tomatoes and avocado for a quick lunch.

建議: Start with a direct statement about what you liked as a child, then give specific examples and a reason, using linking words like ‘for example’ or ‘because’. Avoid repetition and unclear words. Use correct plural forms and simple past tense when talking about the past.

範例: When I was young, I mainly liked junk food. For example, I often ate sweets and potato chips because they tasted good and were easy to get. However, as I grew older I began to prefer healthier options.

建議: Answer the question directly (Yes or No), then explain briefly with a clear reason and a specific example if possible. Use simple, grammatical sentences and linking words like ‘because’ or ‘however’. Avoid vague expressions and run-on sentences.

範例: No, I usually do not change what I eat throughout the year. Because I prefer simple, healthy meals all year, I tend to eat the same kinds of salads and steamed vegetables even in different seasons.

建議: Give a clear yes/no or direct statement about change, then explain when and why with a specific detail. Use correct tense and vocabulary (e.g., ‘favourite food’, ‘instant noodles’, ‘until I was six’). Keep it concise and avoid filler sounds.

範例: My favourite food has changed since childhood. As a child I loved instant noodles because they were tasty and quick to make, but now I prefer healthier meals like salads because I care more about nutrition.

× Ask for me, I prefer eating the healthy food just like umm or salad or sometimes I like eating cones and then sometimes I eat like green vegetable.

✓ For me, I prefer eating healthy food, such as salad, and sometimes I like eating corn and green vegetables.

The sentence used incorrect pronoun phrase 'Ask for me' and inconsistent noun forms ('cones', 'green vegetable'). Replace 'Ask for me' with 'For me'. Use uncountable 'healthy food' without 'the', use 'such as' to introduce examples, change 'cones' to 'corn' (or 'cones' -> 'corn on the cob' if intended) and pluralize 'vegetable' to 'vegetables'. Also remove filler words and improve word order for clarity.

× There are so much enjoyable and they are so delicious for me.

✓ They are so enjoyable and delicious to me.

'So much' is incorrect with countable plural subject; use adjective phrase 'so enjoyable' and 'delicious to me'. Use 'they' to refer back to plural nouns and avoid redundant words.

× We always trying.

✓ We are always trying.

Missing auxiliary verb 'are' for present continuous. Use 'We are always trying' or 'We always try' depending on intended meaning. Present continuous requires 'be' + verb-ing.

× This is really, really like a hero like that.

✓ This is really, really great, like a hero.

Phrase 'like a hero like that' is awkward and unclear. Replace with a clear adjective 'great' and a simile 'like a hero'. Remove duplicate 'like' and unnecessary filler.

× Oh Dang, sorry I already have an answer because when I was a kid, uh when I was a kid, I just only prefer eating a junk food like maybe Jelly or maybe like some snack.

✓ Oh, sorry. I already have an answer: when I was a kid, I only preferred eating junk food, like jelly or snacks.

Tense inconsistency: 'prefer' should be past 'preferred' to match 'when I was a kid'. Remove extra 'a' before uncountable 'junk food' and simplify repetition. Use commas and colons for clarity.

× There's so much like maybe candy beers.

✓ There were many candies and sweets.

'There's' (there is) is singular and present; use plural past 'There were' to match past context. 'So much' with countable nouns is wrong; use 'many'. 'Candy beers' is unclear; likely 'candies' or 'candy bars/sweets' is appropriate.

× Everyone in their childhood they are lively to eat Zenfu mini fat food because there is a delicate one.

✓ Everyone in their childhood was eager to eat junk food because it tasted good.

Pronoun repetition 'Everyone... they' is redundant; use singular agreement 'Everyone... was'. 'Lively to eat' is unnatural; use 'eager to eat'. Replace unclear terms 'Zenfu mini fat food' and 'delicate one' with 'junk food' and 'tasted good' for clarity.

× We was.

✓ We were.

Subject 'We' requires plural past verb 'were', not 'was'.

× No, I at first as I know that I didn't change my force my eating standing records as I am in memories.

✓ No. As far as I know, I haven't changed my eating habits over the years.

Original is ungrammatical and unclear. Use idiomatic expression 'As far as I know' and 'haven't changed my eating habits' to convey meaning. Use present perfect 'haven't changed' to indicate from past to present.

× So I think we are allowed the entire life of the lives eating lifestyle is right.

✓ So I think we keep the same eating lifestyle throughout our lives.

Original phrasing is ungrammatical. Use present simple 'keep' for habitual action and 'throughout our lives' for duration. Avoid unnecessary words 'allowed' and 'the entire life of the lives'.

× So I think I didn't change.

✓ So I think I haven't changed.

Use present perfect 'haven't changed' to indicate a change (or lack of it) from past to present, rather than simple past 'didn't change', which suggests a completed past action.

× I think I haven't changed my favorite vocal because when I was a kid I loved eating like a ramen, maybe instant noodle.

✓ I think my favorite food hasn't changed because when I was a kid I loved eating ramen, like instant noodles.

'Favorite vocal' is incorrect word choice -> 'favorite food'. Use present perfect passive structure 'hasn't changed' or 'my favorite food hasn't changed'. 'A ramen' is wrong; 'ramen' is uncountable or 'a bowl of ramen'. Use plural 'noodles' for 'instant noodles'.

× So I think they're so delicious.

✓ So I think it's so delicious.

Pronoun disagreement: 'they're' refers to plural, but 'ramen' (singular/uncountable) takes 'it' or refer to 'noodles' as 'they'. Choose consistent noun-pronoun pairing: 'ramen... it's delicious' or 'instant noodles... they're delicious'.

× Uh, until I was 6.

✓ Until I was six years old.

Use full form 'six years old' for clarity; 'until' suggests duration—ensure preceding clause reflects that (e.g., 'I liked it until I was six'). Also add context to complete sentence if needed.