食物— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more direct and concise: start with a clear topic sentence stating your favourite or that you don’t have one, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid fillers like “That’s a great question.” Also correct minor grammar (use consistent verb forms) and reduce redundancy.

範例: I don't have a single favourite food because I'm not a picky eater, but I especially enjoy sweet desserts. For example, I often choose cakes or ice cream after meals, although I avoid very spicy dishes because they upset my stomach.

建議: Good clear topic and a specific example. Improve coherence by using past simple consistently and one linking phrase to connect ideas. Slightly limit repetition and choose precise vocabulary (e.g., ‘any type of noodle’).

範例: When I was young, I loved noodles of all kinds. In particular, I often ate Japanese soba and ramen because my family cooked them regularly, and I liked how comforting they felt on cold days.

建議: Avoid overgeneralizing (e.g., “everyone in the world”) and make your answer personal. Use linking words (e.g., ‘for example’, ‘in summer’) and provide a concrete seasonal example to support your point.

範例: Yes, I change what I eat with the seasons. For example, in summer I eat more fresh fruits like watermelon and salads, while in winter I prefer warm soups and stews to stay warm.

建議: Be clearer and more natural: state directly whether your favourite has changed, then give a brief reason or example. Use slightly longer supporting detail (1–2 sentences) and avoid vague phrasing like ‘specific choice of food.’

範例: No, my favourite food hasn't changed — I still love noodles. For instance, I still choose ramen or soba whenever I can because they remind me of home and are very comforting.

× I don't have a favorite food in general because I am not a picky eater, but I do favor some things like sweet things will always have my heart.

✓ I don't have a favorite food in general because I am not a picky eater, but I do favor some things; sweet things will always have my heart.

The original sentence mixes clauses without proper punctuation or conjunction, causing a run-on and awkward coordination. Use a semicolon or conjunction to link the related independent clauses, and remove the repeated noun 'things' for conciseness. Also 'sweet things will always have my heart' is stylistically acceptable but benefits from clearer separation. Suggestion: Use a semicolon or 'and' to join the clauses and avoid repeating 'things' (e.g., 'I do favor some sweet foods; they will always have my heart.').

× I don't really like spicy.

✓ I don't really like spicy food.

'Spicy' is an adjective and needs a noun to modify. In casual speech 'spicy' alone can be understood, but grammatically it requires a noun (spicy food/dishes). Suggestion: add the noun 'food' or 'dishes' to complete the phrase.

× I have always liked noodles when I was young.

✓ I always liked noodles when I was young.

The sentence mixes present perfect 'have always liked' with a past time reference 'when I was young', which is inconsistent. Use simple past 'always liked' to match the past time frame. Suggestion: use past tense for habits in the past ('I always liked...').

× It doesn't matter what country it is from, if it is a noodle, I'm eating it.

✓ It didn't matter what country it was from; if it was a noodle, I ate it.

Again, the student mixes present tense ('doesn't matter', 'is') with a past-time context introduced earlier ('when I was young'). To be consistent, change verbs to past tense. Also use a semicolon or conjunction to avoid a run-on. Suggestion: keep tense consistent for past descriptions.

× I especially like this soba ramen from Japan.

✓ I especially liked this soba ramen from Japan.

Because the surrounding context refers to past preferences, use past tense 'liked' rather than present 'like'. Also 'soba ramen' mixes two noodle types (soba and ramen); if the student means a specific Japanese noodle dish, name it correctly (either 'soba' or 'ramen'). Suggestion: choose the correct dish name and match the past tense.

× When seasons change from summer to winter, from spring to fall, fruits and things that are popular tend to change in each season.

✓ When the seasons change, the fruits and popular foods tend to change with each season.

The original sentence is wordy and awkwardly structured. 'From summer to winter, from spring to fall' is redundant; use 'the seasons' or 'each season'. Also 'fruits and things that are popular' is informal—specify 'fruits and other popular foods'. Suggestion: simplify and clarify the structure to make it natural and concise.

× No, I've always had a specific choice of food.

✓ No, I always had a specific choice of food.

The answer is about whether the favorite food changed since childhood, a past-to-present comparison. The student should use simple past 'always had' to refer to the past habit or 'have always had' if emphasizing continuity to the present. Given the next sentence 'I liked it then, I liked it now', better phrasing is 'No, I've always had a particular favorite; I liked it then and I like it now.' Suggestion: choose either present perfect to show continuity ('I've always had') or align tense across sentences.

× I liked it then, I liked it now.

✓ I liked it then; I like it now.

The second clause should be in present tense ('I like it now') to show continuity from past to present. Also use proper punctuation (semicolon or conjunction) rather than a comma splice. Suggestion: use 'I liked it then; I like it now.' or 'I liked it then and I like it now.'