食物— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Focus on grammatical accuracy and clarity. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words, correct verb forms and articles, and organize ideas with linking words. Mention 1–2 specific dishes and why you like them (taste, texture, or occasion). Keep it under five sentences.

範例: My favourite food is Japanese cuisine. I especially enjoy sushi and sashimi because I like the fresh, delicate flavors and smooth texture. I also enjoy spicy Korean dishes like tteokbokki for their bold, comforting heat. Together these cuisines give me a nice balance of subtle and strong flavors.

建議: Provide a concise topic sentence and support it with specific examples and one reason. Correct verb tense and phrasing, remove hesitations, and avoid vague or incorrect words. Use linking words like 'because' or 'for example' to connect ideas.

範例: When I was young, I mostly ate fast food. For example, I often had fried chicken, burgers, and macaroni because I preferred tasty, convenient meals to vegetables. As a child I didn't worry about calories or healthy eating.

建議: Answer directly and clearly. Use correct grammar and sentence structure to explain whether your diet changes seasonally and why. Replace slang and fillers, and give one or two specific examples of seasonal dishes or changes in ingredients if applicable.

範例: Not really; my meals mostly depend on what my mother cooks rather than the season. However, when I cook for myself I choose lighter, seasonal vegetables in summer and heartier soups in winter. For instance, I eat cold salads in summer and pumpkin soup in autumn.

建議: Give a clear topic sentence about change and support it with reasons and specific examples. Fix grammar (tenses, articles), avoid repetition, and use linking words like 'because' and 'so' to connect ideas. Mention concrete changes in habits and a short reason (health, fitness) within 3–4 sentences.

範例: Yes, my favourite foods have changed since childhood. I used to eat a lot of fast food, but now I prefer healthier options like salads with grilled chicken because I'm trying to reduce sugar and calories. I also drink less milk tea since it contains a lot of sugar and I'm going to the gym to stay fit.

× Well, to be honest, I'm actually love the food culture of Japan.

✓ Well, to be honest, I actually love the food culture of Japan.

The student used 'I'm actually love' which mixes the auxiliary 'am' with the main verb 'love'. This is a sentence structure and verb form error. Use the simple present 'I love' or 'I actually love' to express a general preference. Suggestion: remove the unnecessary 'am' when using stative verbs like 'love'.

× I love to eat, have some sushi and also some raw of, you know, sashimi.

✓ I love to eat sushi and also raw sashimi.

The phrase 'have some sushi and also some raw of, you know, sashimi' is ungrammatical and awkward. Use parallel structure: 'eat sushi and raw sashimi' or 'have sushi and raw sashimi'. Remove filler 'of' and unnecessary 'some' before uncountable or specific items. Suggestion: use 'eat' with direct objects and keep items parallel.

× Umm uh, also I would love to the Korean ones could have a spicy food, uh, kind of like tteokbokki.

✓ Umm, I would also love Korean food that is spicy, like tteokbokki.

The original mixes pronouns and noun phrases ('the Korean ones') and incorrect modal structure. Use 'Korean food' rather than 'the Korean ones' and restructure the clause: 'Korean food that is spicy' or 'spicy Korean dishes like tteokbokki'. Suggestion: refer to food with 'food' or 'dishes' and use relative clauses for description.

× That's really make me feel like.

✓ That really makes me feel good.

Subject-verb agreement and incomplete expression: 'That's' (that is) requires the third-person singular verb 'makes'. Also 'feel like' is incomplete without an object; 'feel good' or 'feel excited' completes the idea. Suggestion: use 'makes me feel' + adjective.

× Well, definitely that was fast food, you know, because as a child I'm not think about like about healthy food and vegetable a lot.

✓ Well, definitely it was fast food, because as a child I didn't think much about healthy food and vegetables.

Mixed tenses and incorrect present-tense 'I'm not think' used for past context. For past habits use past tense 'didn't think' and correct plural 'vegetables'. Also replace 'a lot' with 'much' after negative. Suggestion: use past simple for past habits and pluralize countable nouns.

× I was talking about like some kind of like fried and, you know, have a lot of calories.

✓ I mean foods like fried items that have a lot of calories.

Unclear phrasing and wrong verb form 'have' after 'fried' phrase. Use 'fried items that have' or 'fried foods which have' to connect noun and relative clause. Suggestion: remove filler 'like' and use clear noun phrases.

× Umm, kind of like, uh, chick fried chicken and a burger.

✓ For example, fried chicken and burgers.

Redundant and incorrect wording 'chick fried chicken' and mix of singular/plural. Use clear nouns: 'fried chicken' (uncountable or singular as dish) and 'burgers' as plural. Suggestion: avoid filler words and choose correct noun forms.

× Uh, and you know, every day I gotta borrow some in macaroni.

✓ And, you know, every day I had to eat some macaroni.

'Gotta borrow' is informal and incorrect in context; 'borrow' is wrong verb for eating. Use past 'had to eat' to match past narrative. Remove 'in'. Suggestion: choose verbs that match action (eat) and use past tense for past habits.

× Well, actually not cause that's preferred to my mom, what she cook.

✓ Well, actually no, because it depends on what my mom prefers and cooks.

Wrong conjunction 'cause' informal, wrong structure 'that's preferred to my mom' and 'what she cook' missing third-person singular 'cooks'. Use 'depends on what my mom prefers and cooks' to convey meaning. Suggestion: use 'because' and correct verb forms for third person.

× I gotta eat that food and I'm really happy with it because I have no choice, you know.

✓ I have to eat that food and I'm really happy with it because I have no choice.

'Gotta' is colloquial; replace with 'have to'. Original has acceptable grammar otherwise. Suggestion: use 'have to' in formal contexts.

× But when she upset upset scene, I'm going to at home.

✓ But when she is upset, I'm at home.

Ungrammatical phrase 'upset upset scene' and 'I'm going to at home' incorrect. Use present simple/state 'when she is upset' and 'I'm at home' or 'I stay at home'. Suggestion: simplify to 'when she is upset, I stay at home' and ensure correct verb forms.

× So I'm just, you know, cook by myself some vegetable.

✓ So I just cook some vegetables by myself.

Word order and verb form: use 'cook' with subject 'I' and plural 'vegetables'. Place adverbial phrases appropriately: 'by myself' after the verb phrase. Suggestion: maintain subject-verb order and pluralize countable nouns.

× Well, definitely, yes, 'cause I'm trying.

✓ Well, definitely yes, because I tried.

The question asks whether favourite food changed since childhood, so refer to past change: 'I tried' is unclear; better: 'Well, definitely yes, because I used to love fast food but now I prefer healthier food.' Use past reference for earlier habit and present for current. Suggestion: match tenses to time reference.

× I love fast food, but right now I really love to have some healthy food, kind of like a salad with, you know, a chicken.

✓ I used to love fast food, but now I really prefer healthy food, like a salad with chicken.

Mixing past and present without markers. Use 'used to' for past habit and 'now' with 'prefer' for current. Also 'a chicken' should be 'chicken' (uncountable) or 'a piece of chicken'. Suggestion: use 'used to' for former habits and correct noun usage.

× Also, I prefer to, you know, eat less milk tea, have less milk tea because I have a lot of sugar and gonna make me fat and because I'm I'm actually in hit the gym right now, so I need.

✓ Also, I prefer to drink less milk tea because it has a lot of sugar and can make me gain weight, and I'm actually hitting the gym right now so I need to cut down.

Multiple issues: 'eat less milk tea' wrong verb (drink), 'have less milk tea' informal, 'I have a lot of sugar' should be 'it has a lot of sugar', 'gonna make me fat' is informal and missing subject, use 'can make me gain weight', repeated 'I'm I'm actually in hit the gym' incorrect; use 'I'm actually working out at the gym' or 'I'm hitting the gym'. Suggestion: use correct verbs for beverages, refer to sugar as property of the drink, avoid colloquialisms in formal responses, and complete sentences with clear subjects and verbs.