食物— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g., “My favourite food is pizza”), avoid repetitions and filler words, and provide one or two specific reasons with a linking word. Use correct grammar for articles and verb forms.

範例: My favourite food is pizza. I especially like it because of the crispy crust and the variety of toppings, for example, fresh tomatoes and basil. Also, it’s convenient to share with friends, so it’s perfect for social meals.

建議: Open with a clear topic sentence (e.g., “As a child I liked sweets and instant noodles”), correct tense and word choice, avoid vague fillers, and give one concrete reason or short example using a linking word like 'because' or 'for example.'

範例: As a child I liked sweets and instant noodles. For example, I often ate candy and quick noodle cups because they were cheap, easy to prepare and tasted sweet — a special treat after school.

建議: This answer is generally clear but improve coherence and grammar. Use linking words to contrast seasons (e.g., 'in summer... whereas in winter...'), correct verb forms, and be more specific about examples and reasons. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

範例: In summer I usually eat lighter, refreshing foods such as salads and grilled vegetables because they are cooling and easy to prepare. In contrast, in winter I prefer warming dishes like hearty soups and stews because they keep me warm and provide extra energy.

建議: Begin with a direct statement (e.g., 'Yes, it has changed'), use correct tense and concise phrasing, and give a clear reason with a linking word. Avoid repetition and unclear words. Provide one specific contrast between past and present choices.

範例: Yes, my tastes have changed. As a child I preferred light, refreshing foods like fruit and salads, but now I eat heartier meals because I’m training and need more calories and protein to support my workouts.

× I'm not nitpicking person, so I it's all of all kind of foods, but especially in my heart is just pizza or rolly because they're very tasty and very delicious.

✓ I'm not a nitpicking person, so I like all kinds of foods, but in my heart my favourites are pizza and rolls because they're very tasty.

Errors: missing article 'a' before 'nitpicking person' (Article errors, ID 22); incorrect phrase 'it's all of all kind of foods' should be 'I like all kinds of foods' (Sentence structure issues, ID 26 and Singular/plural, ID 1); 'in my heart is just pizza or rolly' has wrong word order and 'rolly' is likely 'rolls' (Sentence structure ID 26 and Singular/plural ID 1); 'very tasty and very delicious' is redundant (Incorrect use of adjectives/adverbs ID 13). Suggestion: add the indefinite article 'a', use 'I like all kinds of foods' for plural, reorder to 'in my heart my favourites are', use the correct plural 'rolls', and avoid redundant modifiers by using one adjective like 'tasty' or 'delicious'.

× When I was a young I used to like sweets and snacks especially it's very tasty and instant noodles like Carlton, uh, I enjoyed them because they tasted very good and delicious, very easy to eat. So I always choose them as treats.

✓ When I was young I used to like sweets and snacks, especially instant noodles like Carlton. I enjoyed them because they tasted very good and were easy to eat, so I always chose them as treats.

Errors: unnecessary article 'a' in 'a young' (Article errors ID 22); 'especially it's very tasty and instant noodles' is ungrammatical and mixes clauses (Sentence structure ID 26); tense consistency: use past tense 'enjoyed' and 'chose' for past habits (Past tense issue ID 5); redundancy 'tasted very good and delicious' — use one adjective (Incorrect use of adjectives ID 13). Suggestion: remove 'a' before 'young', place 'especially instant noodles' together, keep verbs in past tense for past habits, and simplify adjectives.

× I usually eat lighter refreshing foods in summer because I feel salads and grilled vegetables that are easy to prepare.

✓ I usually eat lighter, refreshing foods in summer, such as salads and grilled vegetables, because they are easy to prepare.

Errors: 'I feel salads' is incorrect verb usage; should use 'such as' to list examples (Incorrect use of prepositions/structure ID 11 and Sentence structure ID 26); comma needed between adjectives 'lighter, refreshing' (Order of adjectives ID 18); 'that are easy to prepare' refers to examples so place after them and use 'they are'. Suggestion: use 'such as' to introduce examples, fix verb phrase to 'they are easy to prepare', and punctuate adjective pair with a comma.

× In winter I prefer heavier warming dishes such as soups or fried foods because they make me feel more comfortable and they are very delicious for me and it's also provide extra energy.

✓ In winter I prefer heavier, warming dishes such as soups or fried foods because they make me feel more comfortable, they are delicious to me, and they also provide extra energy.

Errors: 'it's also provide' is incorrect subject-verb agreement and pronoun use (Subject-verb agreement ID 27 and Incorrect use of pronouns ID 12); run-on with redundant phrases 'very delicious for me' — better 'delicious to me' (Incorrect use of adjectives/adverbs ID 13); comma usage to separate clauses (Sentence structure ID 26). Suggestion: use plural subject 'they' with verb 'provide', simplify 'delicious to me', and separate clauses with commas or conjunctions.

× Oh, definitely changed when I was a child, I always prefer used to to eat something a lighter and a refreshing foods like manufacture and maybe fruits.

✓ Oh, my tastes definitely changed since I was a child. I used to prefer lighter, refreshing foods like vegetables and maybe fruits.

Errors: missing subject in 'definitely changed' (Sentence without a verb/structure ID 23 and 26); tense inconsistency and incorrect combination 'always prefer used to to eat' — use 'used to prefer' for past habit (Past tense issue ID 5 and Sentence structure ID 26); 'a lighter and a refreshing foods' has wrong articles and plural agreement (Article errors ID 22 and Singular/plural ID 1); 'manufacture' likely incorrect word — replaced with 'vegetables'. Suggestion: provide clear subject 'my tastes', use 'used to prefer' for past habits, remove unnecessary articles, make adjectives parallel with a comma, and choose correct vocabulary.

× But today's day I'm not interested in that because I I'm training and it it's we should eat something heavier than to feel myself good.

✓ But these days I'm not interested in that because I'm training and we should eat something heavier to feel good.

Errors: 'today's day' is incorrect time expression; use 'these days' for current ongoing situation (Sentence structure ID 26); repeated 'I I'm' and 'it it's' are redundant and ungrammatical (Sentence structure ID 26); 'we should eat something heavier than to feel myself good' has wrong comparative structure and reflexive pronoun 'myself' is unnecessary (Incorrect reflexive pronoun use ID 15 and Incorrect comparison/object structure ID 19). Suggestion: use 'these days', eliminate repeated words, use 'we should eat something heavier to feel good', and avoid 'myself' here.