食物— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and avoid short fragments and hesitation. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details (e.g., types of sushi you like or when you eat it) using linking words. Reduce repetition about nationality and special days.

範例: My favourite food is sushi. I grew up in Japan, so I enjoy traditional nigiri and salmon rolls most of all. For example, I usually eat sushi for celebrations, but I also have it regularly because it’s fresh and light.

建議: Provide a clear topic sentence and give a specific example of oily foods you liked, then explain briefly why you changed your diet using a linking word. Avoid vague phrasing like 'old enough'.

範例: When I was young, I loved oily foods such as fried chicken and tempura because they tasted good and were convenient. However, as I became more health-conscious, I switched to low‑fat options like grilled fish and steamed vegetables to maintain my energy and health.

建議: Make one cohesive answer: state that you eat seasonally, then give specific examples of seasonal ingredients and how dishes change, using linking words to connect ideas. Correct grammar and avoid repetition.

範例: Yes, I eat seasonally. Because Japan has four distinct seasons, I often choose foods based on what’s fresh — for instance, I eat strawberries and bamboo shoots in spring and enjoy mackerel and sweet potatoes in autumn, which changes the dishes I prepare.

建議: Answer directly whether your favourite food changed, then explain with a specific reason and example. Avoid repetition and awkward phrasing like 'I as I said'. Use linking words to show contrast.

範例: Yes, my food preferences have changed. As a child I preferred greasy snacks, but now I prefer healthier options such as grilled fish and salads because I care more about nutrition and digestion.

× Well, when it comes to my favorite food, I would definitely say that it is sushi, a Japanese cuisine.

✓ Well, when it comes to my favorite food, I would definitely say that it is sushi, a Japanese cuisine.

No change needed for article use here. Sentence is acceptable. (No applicable error from list)

× As I am a Japanese.

✓ I am Japanese.

The phrase 'As I am a Japanese' is awkward. Use the simple predicate 'I am Japanese.' If using 'a Japanese' is necessary, it must be part of a larger clause (e.g., 'As I am a Japanese person'). Suggestion: Keep it short and direct: 'I am Japanese.'

× I've been growing up with sushi.

✓ I grew up eating sushi.

'I've been growing up with sushi' mixes present perfect progressive with an incorrect complement. To express upbringing habit, use simple past or present perfect: 'I grew up eating sushi' or 'I grew up with sushi.' Suggestion: 'I grew up eating sushi.'

× Uh, so I'd like to have one on a special day.

✓ So I'd like to have it on special occasions.

'Have one on a special day' is unclear: 'one' lacks clear reference to sushi and 'a special day' is singular. Use 'it' for sushi and 'special occasions' for recurring events. Suggestion: 'So I'd like to have it on special occasions.'

× Not a special day only, but on a daily basis hopefully.

✓ Not only on special occasions, but I hope to have it more often, even daily.

Word order and connectors are incorrect. 'Not a special day only' should be 'Not only on special occasions' and 'on a daily basis hopefully' should be repositioned. Suggestion: 'Not only on special occasions, but I hope to have it more often, even daily.'

× What kind of food did you like when you were young? -> I used to love eating oily food in my younger days, but now I am old enough to refrain from eating too much oil.

✓ I used to love eating oily food when I was younger, but now I'm careful to avoid eating too much oil.

'In my younger days' is acceptable but wordy; 'when I was younger' is more natural. 'I am old enough to refrain' is odd—use 'I'm careful to avoid' or 'I refrain from'. Suggestion: 'I used to love eating oily food when I was younger, but now I'm careful to avoid eating too much oil.'

× Therefore, I now eat more healthy food, low in calorie and high in nutrition.

✓ Therefore, I now eat healthier food that is low in calories and high in nutrients.

'More healthy' should be 'healthier' (comparative adjective). 'Low in calorie' should be 'low in calories' (plural) and 'high in nutrition' is better as 'high in nutrients.' Suggestion: 'I now eat healthier food that is low in calories and high in nutrients.'

× Yes, I do eat different foods at different times throughout the year. As in Japan there are Four Seasons throughout the year.

✓ Yes, I do eat different foods at different times throughout the year. In Japan there are four seasons throughout the year.

'As in Japan' is unnatural here; use 'In Japan'. Capitalization: 'Four Seasons' should be lowercase 'four seasons' unless referring to the hotel or band. Suggestion: 'In Japan there are four seasons throughout the year.'

× The availability of the ingredients can be different accordingly availability the foods cooked from them can be different.

✓ The availability of ingredients changes accordingly, so the foods made from them also vary.

Original sentence is ungrammatical and wordy. Use clearer clauses: 'availability of ingredients changes' and 'foods made from them vary.' Suggestion: 'The availability of ingredients changes accordingly, so the foods made from them also vary.'

× The taste of food has changed dramatically from my childhood.

✓ My taste in food has changed dramatically since my childhood.

Use 'my taste in food' to refer to personal preference. 'Has changed ... from my childhood' is awkward; use 'since my childhood.' Suggestion: 'My taste in food has changed dramatically since my childhood.'

× For example, when I was a child I as I said, I preferred more oily food, but now I eat more healthier food that is high in nutrition but low in calories.

✓ For example, when I was a child, as I said, I preferred oilier food, but now I eat healthier food that is high in nutrients and low in calories.

Remove redundant 'I as I said'. Use comparative 'oilier' not 'more oily'. 'More healthier' is incorrect (double comparative); use 'healthier'. 'High in nutrition' -> 'high in nutrients'. Use parallel conjunction 'and' for 'high... and low...'. Suggestion: 'For example, when I was a child, as I said, I preferred oilier food, but now I eat healthier food that is high in nutrients and low in calories.'