钥匙— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give two brief, specific reasons using linking words. Avoid hesitation sounds and incomplete phrases.

範例: Yes, I usually carry several keys. For example, I have a key for my bedroom and another for the apartment door, and I also carry an electronic key card to enter the building.

建議: Organize your answer: give a direct response, then one or two specific details about what happened. Use correct vocabulary (e.g. "lost" not "ask the key from the conscious") and clear reason/result language.

範例: Yes, I once lost my apartment key and key card. It was a serious problem because I had to report it to the building management and to the police, and I needed to arrange a replacement key.

建議: Use correct tense and clearer sequence: state frequency, then explain what usually happens and why. Use linking words (e.g. "but", "so") and avoid vague phrases.

範例: Yes, I often forget my keys, but fortunately I live with several housemates. So if I lock myself out, I usually go to a nearby place to collect the spare key from them.

建議: Answer directly, then give one or two specific conditions that make it acceptable. Use complete sentences and link ideas logically.

範例: Yes, I think it can be a good idea to leave a key with a neighbour, provided they are trustworthy. For instance, I keep a spare with a close friend who lives nearby and is reliable.

× I always bring uh, lots of keys with me because other key that I have to bring is for my room and another one for apartment.

✓ I always bring lots of keys with me because another key I have to bring is for my room and another one is for the apartment.

The student used 'other key' incorrectly; 'other' should be 'another' before a singular countable noun. Also 'for apartment' needs the definite article 'the' to specify a particular apartment. Suggestion: use 'another key' for one more item and include 'the' when referring to a specific apartment.

× And another thing is the key card for in for going inside to the apartment and the.

✓ And another thing is the key card for going into the apartment.

The phrase 'for in for going inside to' is ungrammatical. Use the infinitive or gerund 'for going' followed by the correct preposition 'into' to indicate movement inside. Remove the trailing 'and the' which is incomplete. Suggestion: simplify to 'the key card for going into the apartment.'

× I have lost my my keys one time.

✓ I lost my keys once.

The student mixed present perfect 'have lost' with a time expression 'one time' that usually requires simple past 'lost' or 'once'. In conversational past completed events, use simple past. Also remove duplicate 'my'. Suggestion: say 'I lost my keys once.'

× That is the apartment key with the key card.

✓ That was the apartment key and the key card.

Context describes a past event, so tense should be past ('was'). Also 'with' can be clearer as 'and' to indicate two items: the apartment key and the key card. Suggestion: match tense and enumerate items clearly.

× That is really big thing in Australia because if you lost the key you have to ask the key from the conscious really hard.

✓ That was a really big problem in Australia because if you lose the key you have to go through a difficult process to get a replacement.

Multiple errors: tense inconsistency ('is' vs past event), awkward noun phrase 'big thing' should be 'big problem', and 'ask the key from the conscious really hard' is ungrammatical and unclear. Rephrase to 'go through a difficult process to get a replacement.' Suggestion: use clear nouns ('problem') and standard verbs ('go through a process', 'get a replacement').

× So you have to tell the police as well.

✓ So you had to tell the police as well.

The student describes a past incident, so use past tense 'had to' instead of present 'have to'. Suggestion: maintain past tense for events already mentioned.

× Yes I do often forgot my keys unlock myself also, but luckily that I have a lot of housemate so if I forgot my key I have to go to pick my key up in the city really near my apartment.

✓ Yes, I often forget my keys and lock myself out, but luckily I have many housemates, so if I forget my key I can pick it up from one of them; they live very near my apartment.

Multiple issues: 'do often forgot' mixes auxiliary present 'do' with past 'forgot'—should be 'often forget' for present habit. 'unlock myself' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'lock myself out' for being unable to enter. 'a lot of housemate' needs plural 'housemates' and 'a lot of' can be 'many'. 'go to pick my key up in the city really near my apartment' is awkward; clarify that you pick it up from a housemate who lives near your apartment. Suggestion: use consistent present tense for habits and correct collocations like 'lock myself out' and plural nouns.

× That is my lucky.

✓ That's my good luck.

'My lucky' is not correct English; use 'my luck' or the phrase 'that's my good luck' or 'that's lucky for me.' Suggestion: use 'that's lucky' or 'that's my good luck' depending on intended meaning.

× Yes I do because I also live a key with my neighbor as well.

✓ Yes I do because I also leave a key with my neighbor.

The student wrote 'live a key' instead of 'leave a key' (wrong verb). Also 'as well' is redundant with 'because I also'; simplify to 'I also leave a key with my neighbor.' Suggestion: use the correct verb 'leave' for placing an item with someone.

× But the most important to consider is that you have to. That neighbor should be reliable.

✓ But the most important thing to consider is that the neighbor should be reliable.

Sentence fragments: 'you have to.' is incomplete. Replace with 'thing' after 'important' to make a noun phrase and combine sentences: 'the neighbor should be reliable.' Suggestion: avoid sentence fragments and complete the idea: 'the most important thing to consider is that the neighbor should be reliable.'

× I live with my friend.

✓ I live with my friends.

Earlier the student referenced 'a lot of housemate' indicating multiple housemates; if they meant multiple people, use plural 'friends' or 'housemates'. If they meant a single friend, keep singular but ensure consistency. Suggestion: ensure pronoun/noun number matches earlier reference; likely 'friends' or 'housemates' is intended.