钥匙— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise at the start and correct small grammatical slips. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repeating the examiner's words and keep within 3–4 sentences.

範例: No, I don't carry many keys because my building has an electronic lock. Therefore, I usually only take a couple of small keys, such as those for my bike lock and mailbox.

建議: Use correct tense and clearer sentence structure. Start with a direct statement, then explain the situation briefly and a consequence or lesson learned. Use linking words like 'so' or 'because' to connect ideas and avoid repetition.

範例: Yes, I lost my key once when I was in primary school. I had to wait for my mother at the building entrance, so since then I always remember to take my physical key.

建議: Avoid absolute words like 'always' unless true; make sentences grammatically correct and concise. Provide one reason and one brief result, using linking words such as 'because' and 'so'.

範例: Sometimes I forget my keys because I haven't formed the habit of checking them before leaving. As a result, my family often has to let me in.

建議: Use clearer vocabulary (e.g., 'housekeeper' or 'neighbor') and organize reasons logically. Start with a direct opinion, then give 1–2 specific reasons and a brief comparison if needed. Avoid awkward phrasing and run-on sentences.

範例: No, I wouldn't. In Hong Kong I don't usually have a close relationship with neighbours or housekeepers, so I wouldn't feel comfortable leaving my key with them.

× A lot of keys with you.

✓ Do you always carry a lot of keys with you?

This fragment lacks a verb and subject appropriate for the context. The examiner's question was rephrased as a statement fragment by the student. To correct, provide a full interrogative sentence with auxiliary 'do' and verb 'carry' to match the original question form. Suggestion: Include the subject and a verb and use the correct question structure (Do + subject + verb).

× I only take small keys occasionally, for example for my bike lock or the mailbox.

✓ I only take small keys occasionally, for example for my bike lock or my mailbox.

The noun phrases are fine but parallel possessive usage is inconsistent: 'my bike lock' but 'the mailbox' creates a mismatch in reference. Use 'my mailbox' to match possession. Suggestion: Maintain consistent possessives when listing items belonging to you.

× Yes I did lost my key before and and the time I was a primary student so I waited my mom at the entrance of my flat and that makes me always remember that I have to bring that physical key so I don't have.

✓ Yes, I lost my key once when I was a primary school student. I waited for my mom at the entrance of my flat, and that experience always reminds me that I must bring a physical key.

Errors: 'did lost' incorrectly uses auxiliary 'did' with past form; use simple past 'lost'. 'and and the time' is unclear and ungrammatical; rewrite to indicate timing. 'waited my mom' needs preposition 'for'. 'that makes me always remember' should be present simple 'always reminds me' to express a habitual result. 'so I don't have' is incomplete; clarify meaning. Suggestion: Use simple past for a completed event, include correct prepositions, and use present simple for habitual reminders.

× Yes, I always forget my keys and lock myself up because I didn't cultivate a habit that I should always carry a key because I rely on my family to open the door for me.

✓ Yes, I often forget my keys and lock myself out because I haven't cultivated the habit of always carrying a key; I rely on my family to open the door for me.

Errors: 'always forget' is acceptable but 'lock myself up' is incorrect collocation — correct verb is 'lock myself out'. 'didn't cultivate a habit that I should always carry a key' mixes past simple with modal structure; better to use present perfect 'haven't cultivated' and noun phrase 'the habit of always carrying a key'. Suggestion: Use correct collocations (lock out), present perfect for past actions affecting the present, and 'habit of + -ing' construction.

× No, I don't think it's a good idea to leave my key with my labor.

✓ No, I don't think it's a good idea to leave my key with the domestic helper.

The word 'labor' is incorrect in this context; in Hong Kong the common term is 'domestic helper' or 'household helper'. Also 'with' is acceptable but 'to leave my key with someone' is fine. Suggestion: Use appropriate noun 'domestic helper' for clarity and cultural accuracy.

× So first of all, in Hong Kong, we don't always communicate with the labor and not like the oversea families.

✓ First of all, in Hong Kong we don't have the same level of communication with domestic helpers as overseas families do.

Sentence is ungrammatical: 'we don't always communicate with the labor and not like the oversea families' mixes structures. Rewrite to compare properly using 'as ... do' and correct noun forms: 'overseas families'. Suggestion: Use comparative structure 'not the same as' or 'we don't ... as ... do' and correct adjective 'overseas'.

× They live in an individual house and they have a good communication and relationship with them, but we are not, so we don't trust them.

✓ They live in detached houses and have good communication and relationships with their helpers, but we do not, so we don't trust them.

Problems: 'individual house' is awkward — 'detached house' or 'individual houses' is better. 'a good communication' is uncountable; use 'good communication' without article and plural 'relationships' is natural. 'with them' is ambiguous; clarify 'with their helpers'. 'we are not' is incomplete — better 'we do not'. Suggestion: Use appropriate nouns ('detached house'), uncountable usage for 'communication', and clearer subject references.