钥匙— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is clear and relevant, but a bit long and slightly repetitive. Start with a concise topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail. Avoid conditional phrasing that makes the sentence wordy. Also vary vocabulary (e.g., “spare” and “backup”) and use one linking word to connect ideas.

範例: I usually carry just one set of house keys. However, I keep a backup set at my office so I can get back in if I ever forget them at home.

建議: The answer communicates the point but contains grammatical errors, redundancy and awkward phrasing. Use a clear topic sentence, correct tense and avoid repeating the same idea twice. Add one specific example or frequency to support your claim and a linking word to make it coherent.

範例: Yes, I lose my keys quite frequently because I'm rather forgetful. Therefore, I keep a spare key in my office so I can use it when I can’t find the original.

建議: Good specific detail (twice this year), but the answer has hesitations, small grammar mistakes and slight repetition. Remove filler words, fix tense, and make the sentence flow with a linking word. Keep it short and precise.

範例: Yes. This year I’ve locked myself out twice, but luckily I keep a spare key at my office so I can get back into my house quickly.

建議: The answer expresses a clear opinion but is repetitive and contains unclear phrasing. Begin with a direct topic sentence stating your stance, then give one clear reason and a contrasting concession using a linking word (e.g., “however”). Avoid saying the same point twice.

範例: I wouldn’t leave my keys with a neighbour because I don’t feel comfortable with that level of trust. However, if someone has a very close and trustworthy relationship with their neighbour, it could be acceptable.

× No, I only have one set of house keys in my bag, and I keep a spare set in my office so that if ever I forget the keys at home, I can still get home without any trouble.

✓ No, I only have one set of house keys in my bag, and I keep a spare set at my office so that if I ever forget the keys at home, I can still get home without any trouble.

Use of preposition: 'in my office' is acceptable but 'at my office' is more natural when referring to leaving a spare set at a workplace. Also word order: 'if ever I forget' is awkward; use 'if I ever forget'. Suggestion: use 'at my office' and 'if I ever forget' for more natural phrasing.

× All the time I often lose my keys because I'm quite forgetful and sometimes misplaced things without noticing.

✓ I often lose my keys because I'm quite forgetful and sometimes misplace things without noticing.

Redundant/time adverb issue and verb tense form: 'All the time I often' is redundant; choose one adverb. 'misplaced' is past tense but the intended meaning is habitual, so use base form 'misplace'. Suggestion: keep consistent present simple for habits: 'I often lose' and 'I sometimes misplace'.

× So to avoid the problems I always keep a spare key in my office so I can use it if I can find the original.

✓ So to avoid problems, I always keep a spare key at my office so I can use it if I can't find the original.

Logical contradiction and modal error: original sentence says 'if I can find the original' but intention is 'if I can't find'. Also 'the problems' is unnecessary; use 'problems'. Suggestion: correct the conditional to 'if I can't find the original' and use 'at my office' for place.

× Yes, in fact in for this year I I already forgot my keys and locked myself out twice, but fortunately I have a spare key in my office so that I can reopen my, uh, house again.

✓ Yes, in fact this year I have already forgotten my keys and locked myself out twice, but fortunately I have a spare key at my office so that I can get back into my house.

Tense and auxiliary usage: 'I already forgot' (simple past) is awkward with 'this year' which often uses present perfect 'have forgotten'. Remove duplicated 'I'. 'reopen my house' is unnatural; use 'get back into my house' or 'enter my house'. Also change 'in my office' to 'at my office' for naturalness.

× In my opinion, I will never leave my keys to my neighbor, but we have a different opinion and situation.

✓ In my opinion, I would never leave my keys with my neighbor, but others may have different opinions and situations.

Incorrect verb/modal and preposition: 'will never' is strong future; 'would never' or 'will never' both possible but 'would never' is more idiomatic for expressing preference. 'leave my keys to my neighbor' is wrong preposition; use 'leave my keys with my neighbor'. Also 'we have a different opinion and situation' is unclear; better 'others may have different opinions and situations'. Suggestion: use 'with' for giving custody and rephrase second clause for clarity.

× So as long as maybe you are well acquainted with your neighbor and comfortable with it so you may allow it, but for me I will never try it.

✓ If you are well acquainted with your neighbor and comfortable with it, you may allow it, but I would never do so.

Modal and sentence structure: 'So as long as maybe' is redundant and awkward; use conditional 'If'. 'so you may allow it' is acceptable but better 'you may allow it'. End clause 'I will never try it' is informal; 'I would never do so' is clearer. Suggestion: use simple conditional and consistent modal 'may' for permission and 'would' for personal preference.