钥匙— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be accurate and clear: correct mistakes (kids → keys, rooms → room), give a concise topic sentence, then one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Keep within 3–4 sentences and avoid repetition. Pronunciation and grammar need attention (verb forms, articles, prepositions).

範例: Yes, I usually carry several keys with me because I have a motorbike and a small room. For example, I keep house and bike keys on the same ring, which I carry in my bag. However, this is annoying because I often misplace the ring, so I try to attach a bright keychain to make them easier to find.

建議: Organize answer with a clear topic sentence, then give specific details and one concise solution. Use linking words (for example, however) and correct tense and plurality (key → keys, recommend → recommended). Avoid filler phrases.

範例: Yes, I often lose my keys, which is very frustrating. For example, I sometimes misplace the whole bunch when I'm in a hurry. However, a friend recommended I make duplicates and keep a spare at home, which has helped reduce stress.

建議: Start with a direct answer, then explain with specific details and a linking word (because, so). Correct grammar (I just moved in, room card), avoid repetition, and finish with a short concluding remark. Mention a typical consequence and a practical solution.

範例: Yes, sometimes I do. I recently moved into a dormitory and use a room card, which is more convenient than keys, but I occasionally lose it. When that happens, I usually ask the receptionist to reactivate or scan a temporary card, so I try to keep the card in a designated pocket to avoid losing it again.

建議: Give a clear topic sentence (Yes/No) and one or two specific reasons using linking words (because, although). Fix grammar (interrupt → disturb; depend on others), avoid vague moral statements, and offer an alternative solution (spare with trusted person or use key safe).

範例: No, I don't think it's a good idea to leave keys with a neighbour because it might disturb them and they may not be available when you need them. Instead, I prefer to keep a spare key in a secure lockbox or leave a duplicate with a very trusted family member.

× Yes, I always bring a lot of kids with me because now I already have my own rooms and my own motorbikes as well so I have to bring those keys with me every time and I think it's really annoying since because I always get lost off putting it.

✓ Yes, I always bring a lot of keys with me because now I already have my own rooms and my own motorbikes, so I have to carry those keys with me all the time, and I think it's really annoying because I always lose them when putting things away.

The student used 'kids' instead of 'keys' (vocabulary error) which changes meaning; this is not a listed ID but affects grammar and coherence. 'Bring' is acceptable but 'carry' or 'bring with me' and 'all the time' is more natural. 'Since because' is redundant; use 'because'. 'I always get lost off putting it' is ungrammatical; corrected to 'I always lose them when putting things away'. Suggestion: use correct noun ('keys'), avoid redundant conjunctions, and use clear verbs for losing or misplacing objects.

× Yes, I often lose my key.

✓ Yes, I often lose my keys.

Plural is required because the context refers to multiple keys; this is a singular/plural issue (ID 1). Use 'keys' to match 'a bunch of keys' mentioned later. Suggestion: keep consistent number for countable nouns.

× But sometimes I also lost that bunch of keys.

✓ But sometimes I also lose that bunch of keys.

The surrounding context uses present tense ('I often lose', 'this is really frustrating'), so 'lost' (past) is inconsistent. Use present simple 'lose' to describe habitual actions (ID 6 Present tense issue). Suggestion: maintain consistent tense for habits: use present simple.

× And I just got a one recommendation from my friend.

✓ And I just got one recommendation from my friend.

The phrase 'a one recommendation' wrongly combines indefinite article and numeral; should be 'one recommendation' or 'a recommendation' (ID 12 Pronoun/errors with determiners). Suggestion: use either 'one' without 'a' or 'a' without 'one'.

× They recommend me to duplicate the key, so this is also a good way.

✓ They recommended that I duplicate the key, so this is also a good idea.

'Recommend me to' is not standard; use 'recommended that I' or 'recommended duplicating the key'. Also 'this is also a good way' is awkward; use 'good idea' (ID 12 Pronoun/verb pattern error). Suggestion: use correct reporting verb patterns: 'recommend (that) someone do' or 'recommend doing something'.

× Yes, I do like currently I just move into a dormitory, so I use a a room card.

✓ Yes, I do. Currently I just moved into a dormitory, so I use a room card.

Tense and auxiliary issues: 'I do like' is odd here; likely meant 'I do' as affirmation. 'I just move into' should be past simple 'I just moved into' when referring to a recent completed action (ID 5 Past tense issue / ID 6 Present tense issue). Also double 'a a' is typo. Suggestion: separate clauses, use correct tense for recent past.

× It's I think it's more convenient than using the keys, but I still lose it.

✓ I think it's more convenient than using keys, but I still lose it.

Redundant 'It's I think it's' should be 'I think it's'. Article 'the keys' could be 'using keys' or 'using the keys' depending on meaning; keep 'it' referring to 'room card' which is singular and correct. This mainly fixes sentence structure and article usage (ID 22 Article errors / ID 26 Sentence structure errors). Suggestion: avoid repetition and ensure pronoun 'it' clearly refers to the preceding noun.

× So I just still didn't know how to deal with this kind of problem.

✓ So I still don't know how to deal with this kind of problem.

Mixed tenses: 'didn't know' is past, but context is present. Use present simple 'don't know' for current state. Also word order 'just still' is awkward; use 'still' (ID 26 Sentence structure errors and ID 6 Present tense issue). Suggestion: use 'still don't' for ongoing situations.

× Sometimes I lose it, so I just ask the receptionist to help me to scan it for me.

✓ Sometimes I lose it, so I just ask the receptionist to scan it for me.

Redundant 'help me to scan it for me' repeats purpose. Use 'ask someone to do something' or 'ask for help' (ID 12 Incorrect use of pronouns/phrases). Suggestion: simplify to 'ask the receptionist to scan it for me'.

× No I don't think it's a good one because it can be interrupted them and annoy them as well because they all have also have their own things to do.

✓ No, I don't think it's a good idea because it can disturb or annoy them, and they also have their own things to do.

'Interrupted them' is incorrect verb form; use 'disturb' or 'interrupt' without object 'them' in that placement. 'a good one' is less natural than 'a good idea'. Duplicate 'have also have' is an error. Problems are pronoun and verb choice and redundancy (ID 12 Incorrect use of pronouns / ID 16 Incorrect conjunction use). Suggestion: use correct verbs 'disturb/annoy' and concise phrasing.

× So umm in order not to interrupting our neighbors we have to keep it ourselves because we just learn how to be independent and ourselves not only depend on.

✓ So, in order not to interrupt our neighbors, we have to keep it ourselves because we should learn to be independent and not depend on others.

After 'in order not to' use base verb 'interrupt', not '-ing' form (ID 8 Verb + -ing form). 'learn how to be independent and ourselves not only depend on' is ungrammatical; rephrase to 'learn to be independent and not depend on others'. Suggestion: use 'in order not to + base verb' and 'learn to' + verb; add 'others' for clarity.