钥匙— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Make the answer more concise and fully address the question with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two supporting details. Correct grammar (tense and articles) and avoid repetition. Use linking words to connect ideas (e.g., "however", "but").

範例: Not really. In my village people usually don’t lock their homes, so I rarely carry many keys. However, I run a small hotel in my hometown and I always take the hotel keys with me after closing at night.

建議: Answer the question directly with a clear past-tense sentence. Avoid unclear words and repetition. Give one specific detail about when or how you lost them and the outcome. Use linking words like "but" or "so" to make the story coherent.

範例: Yes, I once lost the keys to my hotel a few years ago and I felt very anxious at first. Fortunately, we searched everywhere and found them where my grandmother had kept them, so in the end I relaxed.

建議: Start with a clear topic sentence stating frequency (e.g., "Sometimes"). Use correct verbs and vocabulary ("forget" not "forgot the cage"). Give a specific reason and use a linking word to connect cause and effect.

範例: Sometimes I do. When I'm in a hurry to bring things like meat to the market, I can be careless and forget my keys, so I occasionally lock myself out.

建議: Answer the question directly with your opinion (yes/no) and give clear reasons. Avoid confusing statements (e.g., "give my kids to neighbors") and irrelevant details. Use appropriate linking words ("because", "so") and correct vocabulary ("neighbors", "trust").

範例: Yes, I think it can be a good idea if you trust them. I often leave keys with a close neighbour because they are part of my extended family and I know they will look after my home when I am busy.

× So basically I'm from village and our people don't use keys indoors or like their homes.

✓ So basically I'm from a village and our people don't use keys indoors or for their homes.

Missing article 'a' before singular countable noun 'village' is a singular/plural/article issue; also 'like their homes' is incorrect preposition use—change to 'for their homes' to indicate purpose.

× But I have a small hotel in my hometown that we used to lock in night so I only I only get to bring keys in after closing the hotels.

✓ But I have a small hotel in my hometown that we used to lock at night, so I only bring keys in after closing the hotel.

'In night' is wrong preposition/phrase; correct is 'at night'. 'I only I only get to bring keys in' has duplication and unnatural phrasing; simplify to 'I only bring keys in'. 'Hotels' should be singular 'hotel' to agree with 'a small hotel'. This fixes article and plural errors.

× So yeah, I had lost my keys when I was squid not like home keys or I just lost my my hotel ski that I was very like nervous and very, very angry on myself.

✓ So yeah, I lost my keys when I was a kid; not my home keys, but I lost my hotel keys, and I was very nervous and angry with myself.

Using past perfect 'had lost' is unnecessary; simple past 'lost' fits. 'Squid' is a miswording for 'kid'. 'My my hotel ski' corrected to 'my hotel keys'. Preposition 'angry on' is incorrect; use 'angry with'. This fixes past tense and preposition/pronoun errors.

× But we we found all over other place.

✓ But we found them in other places.

Doubling 'we' is redundancy. 'Found all over other place' is ungrammatical; use object 'them' and plural 'places' or 'in other places'. This corrects sentence structure and plurality.

× But our grandma is already kept. So I was very relaxed.

✓ But our grandmother had already kept them, so I was very relieved.

'Is already kept' is incorrect tense and voice; 'had already kept them' or 'had already secured them' fits past reference. 'Relaxed' is unnatural here; 'relieved' conveys the intended meaning. This addresses tense and word choice errors.

× So yeah, sometimes I forgot the cage and lock myself because I sometimes I get hurry to go bring the things like meats and I get very like rapid.

✓ So yeah, sometimes I forget the keys and lock myself out because I sometimes hurry to bring things like meat and become very rushed.

Mixing past 'forgot' with present context; use present simple 'forget' for habitual actions. 'The cage' is wrong noun; use 'the keys'. 'Get hurry' should be 'hurry'. 'Meats' should be 'meat' (uncountable). 'Rapid' is wrong adjective; use 'rushed'. This fixes tense, word choice, and pluralization.

× So I forgot some sometimes the cage and lock myself out.

✓ So sometimes I forget the keys and lock myself out.

Incorrect word order and tense: use present simple 'forget' for habitual action and correct noun 'keys'. Remove extra words for clarity.

× So yeah, whenever I get hurry or busy with some works, I probably give my kids to neighbors because I believe my neighbor should is like my families.

✓ So yeah, whenever I am in a hurry or busy with work, I usually give my keys to neighbors because I consider my neighbors like family.

'Get hurry' is incorrect; use 'am in a hurry'. 'Some works' should be 'work'. 'Probably' is better as 'usually' for habitual action. 'Give my kids to neighbors' is incorrect and likely meant 'give my keys'. 'Should is like my families' is ungrammatical; change to 'consider my neighbors like family'. This addresses modal/adverb choice and noun errors.

× They are very close to me and our family.

✓ They are very close to me and my family.

Using 'our family' implies the neighbors share the same family; 'my family' is more appropriate. This fixes pronoun reference.

× And I whenever I'm going out with someone I gave kiss to my neighborhood.

✓ And whenever I go out, I give a key to my neighbor.

Sentence is confused: 'gave kiss to my neighborhood' is wrong. Likely intended 'give a key to my neighbor'—use present simple 'go' and 'give' for habitual action, singular 'neighbor', and correct object 'a key'. This corrects reflexive/word choice and tense errors.