走路— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and clear. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid confusing or irrelevant phrases (e.g. "don't want to learn because it's too Thai").

範例: Yes, I walk a lot. After work I often go to the nearby park to do brisk walking because I enjoy exercising outdoors and it helps me relax.

建議: Use past tense consistently and give a clear reason with one or two specific details. Avoid unclear words like "pay with my brother" and repetitive phrases.

範例: No, I didn't. When I was a child my parents preferred me to stay at home, so I rarely walked outside by myself. As a result, most of my activity was playing or doing small exercises at home.

建議: Begin with a clear topic sentence and then give two specific reasons linked by a connector (e.g. "because" or "so"). Make sure sentences are complete and avoid trailing fragments.

範例: I think people prefer walking in parks because the atmosphere is calmer and more pleasant. Also, parks have natural scenery and fresh air, so walking there feels relaxing and healthier than walking in busy streets.

建議: Give a direct answer and then two clear specific reasons using linking words. Correct grammar (conditionals and comparisons) and avoid awkward phrasing like "light to walking outdoor".

範例: I'd choose a long walk in a large park. Compared with treadmills, walking outdoors in a park makes me feel more energized and calm because of the fresh air and natural surroundings.

建議: Use the correct past tense and be more concise. Start with a direct past-tense topic sentence and add one specific detail about the park to support your answer.

範例: Recently I went to the public park near my house. It's quite large and peaceful, so I like going there for a relaxing walk after work.

× Yes, I usually walk a lot because I like to walk, so when I finish work I usually go to the park and spend time for walk around the park because I like to exercise but I don't want to learn because it's too Thai, so I prefer to walk.

✓ Yes, I usually walk a lot because I like walking, so when I finish work I usually go to the park and spend time walking around the park because I like to exercise, but I don't want to run because it's too tiring, so I prefer to walk.

Multiple issues: use of verb+ -ing after 'like' and after 'spend time' requires gerund form (ID 8). 'For walk' is incorrect preposition and verb form (ID 11 and 8). 'Don't want to learn' is likely wrong word choice; context suggests 'run' and 'too tiring' (adjective) rather than 'Thai' (ID 13 and 26). Suggestions: use gerunds after 'like' and 'spend time' (like walking, spend time walking), replace 'for walk' with 'walking', and correct unclear words to appropriate verbs and adjectives.

× No, when I was young, I don't have opportunity to go outside by myself.

✓ No, when I was young, I didn't have the opportunity to go outside by myself.

Mismatch of past time reference and present tense 'don't have' (ID 5). When describing past situations, use past simple 'didn't have'. Also include the article 'the' with 'opportunity' (ID 22). Suggestion: change to 'didn't have the opportunity'.

× It's mean that I have to live in my house and pay with my brother.

✓ It means that I had to stay at home and share expenses with my brother.

'It's mean' is incorrect verb form and tense; for past context use 'It meant' or better rephrase to 'It means' if general but here past, so 'It meant'. Also 'live in my house' is awkward for past restriction; 'stay at home' is natural. 'Pay with my brother' is unclear; likely 'share expenses with my brother' (ID 12 and 26). Suggestion: match tense and use clearer verbs and pronouns.

× So I don't have much opportunity to go to work outside.

✓ So I didn't have much opportunity to go outside to work.

Present tense 'don't have' conflicts with past context (ID 5). Also word order 'go outside to work' is clearer. Suggestion: use past simple 'didn't have' and adjust word order.

× But I can work walk in my house.

✓ But I could walk and exercise in my house.

Phrase 'work walk' is ungrammatical; likely intended 'work out' or 'walk' at home. Modal 'can' in past context should be 'could' (ID 5 and 8). Suggestion: use 'could' for past and use correct verb collocation like 'walk and exercise' or 'work out'.

× In my view, people prefer to walk in park because all the atmosphere is better than walking in other places.

✓ In my view, people prefer to walk in parks because the atmosphere is better than in other places.

'Walk in park' needs plural or article: 'in parks' or 'in the park' (ID 11 and 22). 'All the atmosphere' is incorrect; use 'the atmosphere' (ID 13). Also compare 'better than in other places' for clarity. Suggestion: use correct article or plural and simplify phrase to 'the atmosphere is better'.

× Because in the park is peaceful and also natural that can make.

✓ The park is peaceful and natural, which helps people relax.

Sentence fragment begins with 'Because' creating sentence structure error (ID 26). 'Also natural that can make' is ungrammatical and vague. Suggestion: avoid starting with 'Because' as a fragment and use a relative clause 'which helps' or complete clause describing effect.

× For sure is have to be at the park because of a light to walking outdoor more than walking on the machines and also the park is make me feel more energized and also feel calm because of the natural.

✓ For sure it would have to be the park because I prefer walking outdoors rather than on machines, and the park makes me feel more energized and calm because of the nature.

Multiple issues: incorrect word order and missing subject 'it would have to be' (ID 26). 'A light to walking outdoor' is meaningless; correct comparison 'prefer walking outdoors rather than on machines' (ID 16). 'The park is make me feel' needs correct verb form 'makes' (subject-verb agreement, ID 27) and 'because of the natural' should be 'because of the nature' or 'because it is natural' (ID 13 and 11). Suggestion: restructure sentence, use 'would have to be', 'prefer...rather than...', and correct verb agreement.

× I go to the park that's located close to my house.

✓ I went to the park that's located close to my house.

Question asked 'Where did you go for a walk lately?' requires past tense response; 'I go' is present simple (ID 6 and 5). Change to past simple 'I went'.

× I have public park that is very peaceful and also really big, so I think I like to go there recently.

✓ I have a public park that is very peaceful and also really big, so I have liked going there recently.

Missing indefinite article 'a' before 'public park' (ID 22). 'So I think I like to go there recently' mixes present opinion with recent past; better to use present perfect 'I have liked going there recently' or 'I have been going there recently' (ID 6 and 5). Suggestion: add 'a' and use consistent tense 'have liked' or 'have been going' for recent activity.