走路— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Make the answer more concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and correct articles and word order (e.g., “good for our mental and physical health”).

範例: Yes, I walk a lot; I go for a walk every morning and evening. Moreover, walking helps my fitness and reduces stress, so it keeps me healthier and more energetic throughout the day.

建議: Give a clear past-tense topic sentence and one specific supporting detail. Use linking words like “because” correctly and avoid unsure phrasing. Mention a concrete memory or activity to make it more vivid.

範例: Yes, I often walked outside as a child because I enjoyed playing in the park. For example, I used to practice juggling and explore the playground, which made time outside very fun.

建議: Give a direct topic sentence and then one or two clear, specific reasons with linking words like “because” and “therefore.” Use correct verb forms and simplify phrasing for clarity.

範例: People like walking in parks because the natural surroundings are calming. Therefore, many visit parks to relax, get fresh air, and reduce stress after a busy day.

建議: Answer directly and specify a place, then give reasons using linking words. Mention sensory details (e.g., sunset, scenery) to make the response more vivid and specific.

範例: I would like to take a long walk along the coast because I could watch the sunset and enjoy the sea breeze. This quiet scenery would help me relax and clear my mind.

建議: Use past tense for a recent action and give one or two specific details. Avoid fillers like “umm” and correct sentence structure. Mention who you went with or a particular activity to add detail.

範例: Recently I went for a walk in the park near my home because it is close and convenient. I often have picnics there at the weekend and sometimes play games with friends, which makes the walks more enjoyable.

× Yes, I like to walk a lot, so that I also walk every morning and every evening.

✓ Yes, I like to walk a lot, so I walk every morning and every evening.

Remove the unnecessary conjunction 'so that' because it implies purpose; use 'so' or no connector to state a habitual action. Also keep simple present tense for habitual actions ('I walk').

× And walking is a good for us mental health and physical health to improve my body become a stronger and healthier.

✓ Walking is good for our mental and physical health and helps my body become stronger and healthier.

Remove article 'a' before 'good' and use possessive 'our' not 'us'. Use parallel noun phrases 'mental and physical health'. Use verb 'helps' + infinitive or 'helps my body become' for function. Maintain present tense for general truth.

× Yes, I think outside to have a walk when I am I was a child because I think it is interesting for me and it can also lead me to enjoy in the park and I like to juggle when.

✓ Yes, I used to walk outside when I was a child because I found it interesting, I enjoyed the park, and I liked to juggle there.

Use 'used to' or past tense 'walk' and 'was' for past habitual actions. Remove awkward 'I am I was'. Change 'it is interesting' to past 'I found it interesting'. Use 'enjoyed the park' and 'liked to juggle there' to complete the idea and keep past tense consistent.

× As well as nowadays people like to walking to the park because I think they like the natural area.

✓ Nowadays people like walking in the park because they enjoy natural areas.

After 'like' use base verb or -ing: 'like walking' not 'like to walking'. Use 'in the park' rather than 'to the park' when describing an activity taking place there. Use plural 'areas' and present tense 'enjoy'.

× Therefore they may choose relax so that they may go to the park to reduce their stress.

✓ Therefore they may choose to relax, so they go to the park to reduce their stress.

Insert 'to' after 'choose' before a verb. 'So that they may' is wordy; 'so they go' is simpler. Maintain pronoun 'they' and possessive 'their stress' correctly.

× Yes, I'd like to take a long walk and I can see the sunset and see some new environment and also it can make me feel relaxed.

✓ I'd like to take a long walk where I can see the sunset and new scenery; it would also make me feel relaxed.

Use 'where I can see' to specify location. 'Some new environment' is unnatural; use 'new scenery'. Use conditional 'would' to express the result of a hypothetical desire.

× Umm I will choose go to the park and near my home because umm it is so close and it is convenient to go here and for walking and I can also in the weekend I can have a picnic and play with other in there.

✓ I would choose to go to the park near my home because it is very close and convenient for walking, and on the weekend I can have a picnic and play with others there.

Use conditional 'would' for hypothetical choice. Insert 'to' after 'choose'. Use 'near my home' as adjective phrase. Use 'convenient for walking'. 'On the weekend' is correct, and use 'others' not 'other', 'there' at end. Maintain consistent verb forms.