走路— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Make the response grammatically correct, more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words. Avoid repetition and incorrect verb forms (use ‘I enjoy walking alone’ not ‘I really keen on walk’).

範例: Yes, I walk quite a lot. I enjoy walking alone because it helps me think and relax, and I often explore the streets around my neighbourhood for exercise and fresh air.

建議: Use correct past tense and clear structure: state whether you walked often, then give a specific reason and a brief detail. Avoid unclear phrases like ‘real weight’ and ‘go to work with my mother’ if not relevant.

範例: Not really. When I was a child I was quite heavy, so my mother often encouraged me to walk, but I disliked it and usually stayed with my family rather than joining long walks.

建議: Organise the answer: give a clear topic sentence about why people like parks, then provide two specific reasons linked with words like ‘because’ or ‘for example.’ Be concise and avoid contradictory statements.

範例: People like walking in parks because they are safe and peaceful. For example, parks provide open space for children and older people to exercise, and many people enjoy picnics or social activities there.

建議: Clarify the location (it seems you meant a beach or forest, not ‘bathroom’) and use conditional form correctly. Start with a clear topic sentence and give specific reasons using linking words. Correct vocabulary is essential (e.g., ‘forest’, ‘beach’, ‘seaside’).

範例: If I had the chance, I would take a long walk in the forest near my summer home because the fresh air and tall trees are relaxing, and walking there would be good for my health.

建議: Answer in past tense and be concise. Start with a clear statement of where you went, then add one or two specific details (who you met, what you did) using linking words like ‘because’ or ‘and’. Avoid filler words.

範例: Recently I walked in my neighbourhood park because it has a large walking area. I often meet old friends there and sometimes we chat and plan future walks together.

× 'I really keen on walk alone because I can imaginate something and I can have a good time with the alone.'

✓ 'I am really keen on walking alone because I can imagine things and have a good time by myself.'

'keen on' must be followed by a gerund (verb+ -ing), so 'walk' becomes 'walking'. 'Imaginate' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'imagine' and should match plurality/context: 'things' is more natural. 'with the alone' is ungrammatical; use 'by myself' or 'alone'. Also add the missing copula 'am' after 'I'. Use concise parallel structure for 'can imagine things and have a good time by myself.'

× 'So I walk alone in my neighborhoods.'

✓ 'So I walk alone in my neighborhood.'

'neighborhood' as a general habitual location is singular and more natural in English; 'neighborhoods' would imply multiple distinct areas. The present simple 'walk' is correct for habitual actions, so only noun form needed correction.

× 'When I was a child, I have a real weight, so I spend my time with my family and my mother push me go for the walk and it's I usually go to work with my mother, but I really hate to walk when I was a child.'

✓ 'When I was a child, I had a lot of weight, so I spent my time with my family. My mother pushed me to go for walks and I usually went out with her, but I really hated walking when I was a child.'

'When I was a child' sets the past time frame, so verbs must be in past tense: 'have' -> 'had', 'spend' -> 'spent', 'push' -> 'pushed', 'go' -> 'went', 'hate' -> 'hated'. Use 'a lot of weight' or 'was overweight' for clarity. 'Push me go for the walk' requires 'pushed me to go for walks' (infinitive with to). 'Usually go to work with my mother' seems intended as 'went out with my mother' so adjusted for clarity. 'Hated walking' uses gerund after 'hate' in past context.

× 'Uh, in my opinion, parks are more safe area for the old people and children have spent time there a or young people and do something and have a picnic and at this area for only for activities for the old people.'

✓ 'In my opinion, parks are safer areas for elderly people and children to spend time. Young people can do activities there, have picnics, and the area is useful for people of all ages.'

Use comparative 'safer' not 'more safe'. 'Area' should be plural or 'areas' when speaking generally. 'Old people' is better as 'elderly people'. Use infinitive 'to spend time' rather than 'have spent time'. Remove extraneous words ('a or', 'at this area'). Clarify sentence structure into several coordinated clauses. 'Only for activities for the old people' was unclear; revised to indicate inclusivity or specific use as intended.

× 'I would you like to walk in the bathroom because I really love there and have a summer home there and a there's a a big force for the walk and we have a time with nature and I have a more healthy for the people.'

✓ 'I would like to take a walk in the countryside because I really love it there. I have a summer home there, and there is a big forest for walking. We can spend time in nature, and it is healthier for people.'

The original has many lexical errors: 'would you like' should be 'I would like' for the student's preference; 'bathroom' is wrong word—likely 'beach' or 'countryside'; I chose 'countryside' and 'forest' to make sense. Use conditional 'I would like' and modal 'can' for activities ('we can spend time'). 'There is' corrects 'a there's a a'. 'More healthy for the people' -> 'healthier for people' (comparative adjective). Maintain future/conditional consistency.

× 'Umm, it's my neighborhoods, yeah, because, uh, there's a, a huge walking park and I can see my old friends in there and some the sometimes we have a, a chatting together and have a plan for the walk.'

✓ 'Umm, it's my neighborhood, because there is a huge walking park and I can see my old friends there. Sometimes we chat together and make plans for a walk.'

'It's my neighborhoods' -> 'it's my neighborhood' (singular); 'there's' is fine but remove extra fillers. 'I can see my old friends in there' -> 'there' not 'in there'. Use present simple for habitual actions: 'we chat' and 'make plans' instead of 'we have a chatting' which is ungrammatical; use noun 'a chat' or verb 'chat'. 'Have a plan for the walk' -> 'make plans for a walk' is natural. Past tense not necessary here because the question asked 'Where did you go for a walk lately?' — present perfect/simple past could be used, but keeping present simple is acceptable if referring to habitual location; if referencing a recent past, use 'I went to my neighborhood because there is...' or 'I went to the neighborhood because there was...'. For simplicity and clarity, present habitual phrasing was applied.