走路— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Ответ не ясен и содержит много грамматических ошибок. Сформулируйте тему сразу, используйте связующие слова и конкретные причины. Например: скажите, как часто вы гуляете, зачем это делаете и какой эффект это имеет на здоровье и настроении. Упражняйтесь в простых предложениях и избегайте повторов.

範例: Yes, I walk almost every day because it helps me stay energetic and motivated. For example, a 30-minute walk before work clears my mind and improves my focus. Also, walking is good for my health since it keeps me active and reduces stress.

建議: Ответ нечеткий и содержит лишние слова и повторы. Начните с короткого утверждения о привычках в детстве, затем добавьте подробности и примеры, используя связующие слова (for example, and then). Сократите количество перечислений и говорите последовательно.

範例: Yes, I often went outside as a child. I usually woke up at seven, had breakfast quickly and then went to the local gardens to meet my friends. We walked around, rode bikes and sometimes played football or video games later in the day.

建議: Ответ бессвязный и содержит неточные утверждения (например, «play video games» в парке). Дайте ясную тему, затем объясните 2–3 конкретных причины с примерами. Используйте связки (because, for example, also) и корректную лексику (relaxing, have a picnic, socialize).

範例: People like walking in parks because they offer a peaceful and relaxing atmosphere. For example, parks have trees and open spaces where you can unwind and exercise. Also, parks are great for socializing — you can have a picnic or chat with friends while enjoying nature.

建議: Ответ понятен, но содержит повторы и грамматические ошибки. Начните с прямого утверждения о месте, затем объясните, почему и приведите конкретную деталь (activities). Используйте более естественные фразы и правильные времена.

範例: I would take a long walk along the sea coast because it relaxes me. For example, walking by the beach with the sound of waves helps me clear my mind, and I often swim or sit and read a book which makes me feel refreshed and motivated.

建議: Ответ смешивает времена и содержит запутанные фразы. Начните с простого предложения в прошедшем времени о недавней прогулке, затем добавьте детали: с кем вы были, что делали и какие эмоции испытывали. Используйте связки и конкретные слова (plants, bike ride, relaxed).

範例: Last week I went for a walk in our local gardens with my family. We rode bikes and explored the plants and trees there. Seeing the natural scenery made me feel relaxed and gave me creative inspiration.

× Yes, I work a lot because it gives me some motivation and energetic and everyday.

✓ Yes, I walk a lot because it gives me motivation and energy every day.

The student used 'work' instead of 'walk' (word choice) and 'energetic' (adjective) instead of the noun 'energy'. 'Everyday' should be 'every day' as two words when meaning 'each day'. Use simple present 'gives' correctly; maintain noun 'motivation' and 'energy'. Suggestion: use correct verb for action and pair nouns/adjectives correctly (motivation and energy).

× Also it's useful for my health which can I spend the and work in study, you know?

✓ Also it's useful for my health; I can spend time outdoors and it helps me focus on study, you know?

Original has incorrect relative clause and word order. 'Which can I spend the and work in study' is ungrammatical. Use two clear clauses: state usefulness for health, then explain ability to spend time and effect on studying. Suggestion: break into shorter sentences and use correct verb phrases like 'spend time outdoors' and 'helps me focus on study'.

× Good answers when I was child my day is happen every day.

✓ When I was a child, my day went like this every day.

Mixes past and present. For past habits use simple past: 'when I was a child' and 'my day went' or 'my days were the same'. Also missing article 'a' before 'child'. Suggestion: use past tense consistently for childhood routines and include articles: 'a child'.

× I get up 7:00 having breakfast fastly and recently go to the uh our gardens and meet my friend and walk around the garden and for example, uh, ride a bike for example and play video game, play football.

✓ I got up at 7:00, had breakfast quickly, then went to our garden, met my friends, walked around, rode a bike, played video games and played football.

Multiple problems: tense should be past for childhood habits ('got up', 'had', 'went'), adverb 'fastly' is incorrect — use 'quickly', word order and repetition 'for example' unnecessary. Also use plural 'friends' and correct verb forms 'rode', 'played'. Suggestion: use past tense consistently, correct adverbs, and list activities clearly without repetition.

× Because, uh, the park have them some the difficult, uh, another of types because, uh, the park, you cannot relax this atmosphere.

✓ Because the park offers different experiences and its atmosphere helps you relax.

Original has incorrect verb 'have them some the difficult' and wrong article use 'this atmosphere'. Use 'the park offers' or 'has' and 'its atmosphere' to refer correctly. Suggestion: simplify to 'the park offers different experiences' and use possessive 'its' for 'atmosphere'.

× It's more, uh, relaxer than other place.

✓ It's more relaxing than other places.

'Relaxer' is not correct; use the adjective 'relaxing'. Also use plural 'places' after 'other' or 'than other places'. Suggestion: use correct adjective form and plural when comparing general category.

× You can swim, you can play video games. You cannot talk about with your friend. You cannot picnics and.

✓ You can swim and play video games. You can talk with your friends and have picnics.

'You cannot talk about with your friend' and 'You cannot picnics' are wrong. Use positive statements 'You can talk with your friends' and verb phrase 'have picnics'. Suggestion: use correct verb collocations: 'have a picnic' or 'have picnics'.

× I prefer to go to the your favorite place.

✓ I prefer to go to my favorite place.

'The your' is ungrammatical — cannot combine definite article with possessive pronoun. Use 'my favorite place'. Suggestion: use either 'the' or a possessive pronoun, not both.

× My, my favorite place, for example, is the sea. Uh, when I go to the sea, I'm so relaxed.

✓ My favorite place, for example, is the sea. When I go to the sea, I feel very relaxed.

'I'm so relaxed' is understandable but 'I feel very relaxed' is more natural. Maintain simple present for habitual truth. Suggestion: use 'feel' for states and avoid filler repetition.

× I prefer to go to swim them and umm, I resume and more motivation and energetic everyday and also I like it.

✓ I prefer to go swimming there, and I feel more motivated and energetic every day; I really like it.

Use gerund 'go swimming' not 'go to swim'. 'Them' is wrong; use 'there'. 'I resume' is incorrect — likely meant 'I feel' or 'I become'. Use nouns 'motivated' and 'energetic' correctly and 'every day' two words. Suggestion: use 'go swimming' and 'feel more motivated and energetic'.

× I will get, uh, in our gardens and last week with my family and I ride a bike, go to there, uh, and I see home the train, some of the plants, natural plants, which I receive the, uh, some emotion and a creative motivation.

✓ Last week I went to our garden with my family. I rode a bike, saw small trains and many plants; I felt emotional and creatively motivated.

Original mixes future 'I will get' with past 'last week' and has incorrect word order and articles. Use past tense for a past event: 'Last week I went', 'I rode', 'I saw'. 'See home the train' unclear; simplified to 'saw small trains' if intended. 'Receive some emotion' is unnatural — use 'felt emotional'. Suggestion: keep tense consistent and use natural expressions like 'felt creatively motivated'.

× I'm so relaxed. I am, uh, enjoyable.

✓ I felt very relaxed and happy.

'I am enjoyable' is incorrect; 'enjoyable' describes something that gives enjoyment, not a person's feeling. Use 'happy' or 'enjoying myself'. Also maintain past tense 'felt' for a past visit. Suggestion: use 'felt relaxed' and 'felt happy' or 'I enjoyed it'.