走路— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and correct grammar; start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, and add one specific supporting detail. Use linking words like 'but' or 'however' correctly.

範例: No, I don't walk much at the moment because I work full time. However, when I have free time I go for a 30-minute walk a few times a week to improve my fitness and clear my mind.

建議: Begin with a clear statement about your childhood habit, correct tense and grammar, and give a specific example with linking words. Avoid filler words and repetition.

範例: When I was a child, I didn't walk for exercise, but I often walked around my neighborhood with my cousin and friends. For example, we used to explore the small park and the nearby riverbank on weekends.

建議: Use a concise topic sentence, correct singular/plural forms, and connect reasons with linking words. Give one or two specific reasons and an example to support your opinion.

範例: People like walking in parks because they are clean and peaceful. Moreover, parks usually have dedicated walking paths without traffic, so for example I can enjoy a quiet 40-minute walk beside trees and a pond.

建議: Start with a clear conditional sentence, avoid hesitations ('umm'), and give precise details (distance, features) in fluent sentences. Use linking words to explain why you prefer that place.

範例: If I had the chance to take a long walk, I would choose Romney Park because it is quite large—around two kilometers of paths—and is surrounded by a lake and trees. For that reason, it feels calm and scenic for a long stroll.

建議: Answer in past simple for a recent action, give the park name correctly, correct word order and plurals, and include one specific detail (when or how often). Keep it to 1–3 sentences.

範例: Lately I went for a walk at Sector 7 Park, a small local park near my house. I usually go there in the evenings; it has flower beds and is popular with both young people and the elderly.

× 'No, I do not walk a lot currently because I currently I'm working fully.'

✓ 'No, I do not walk a lot currently because I am currently working full time.'

'Currently I'm working fully' mixes adverbs and incorrect adjective use. Use present continuous 'I am working' for ongoing action and 'full time' as the correct adverbial phrase. Remove the duplicate 'currently.' Suggestion: say 'I am currently working full time.'

× 'I'm working full time so I don't have time for walking.'

✓ 'I'm working full time, so I don't have time to walk.'

'Time for walking' is understandable but less natural. Use the infinitive 'to walk' after 'time' for purpose. Also add a comma before the coordinating conjunction 'so.' Suggestion: 'I don't have time to walk.'

× 'However when I get time I used to go working and it's actually helps me to build my health.'

✓ 'However, when I get time I go for walks, and they actually help me improve my health.'

'Used to' expresses past habit, but the speaker means present occasional action, so use simple present 'I go for walks.' 'Go working' is incorrect collocation; use 'go for walks.' 'It's actually helps' mixes 'it' + auxiliary; use plural 'they help' to agree with 'walks.' 'Build my health' is awkward; 'improve my health' is natural. Suggestion: 'When I have time, I go for walks; they help me improve my health.'

× 'When I was child, I don't think about walking a much.'

✓ 'When I was a child, I didn't think much about walking.'

Mixed tenses: talking about the past requires past tense 'didn't think.' Missing article 'a child.' The phrase 'walking a much' is incorrect word order; use 'didn't think much about walking.' Suggestion: 'When I was a child, I didn't think much about walking.'

× 'However I used to walk with my cousin or my friends nearby my house and we go we sometimes we explore a different different places and those are in in our.'

✓ 'However, I used to walk with my cousin or friends near my house, and sometimes we explored different places nearby.'

Use 'used to' correctly for past habitual action. 'Nearby my house' should be 'near my house.' Remove duplicate words and fix word order: 'we sometimes we explore' -> 'sometimes we explored.' The sentence ended awkwardly; finish with 'nearby.' Suggestion: 'I used to walk with my cousin or friends near my house, and sometimes we explored different nearby places.'

× 'People do like to walk in parks because parks is a very neat and clean area.'

✓ 'People like to walk in parks because parks are very neat and clean areas.'

'Parks is' is subject-verb disagreement and wrong number: 'parks' plural requires 'are.' Also 'a very neat and clean area' mismatches plural 'parks'; use 'areas' or make singular: 'a park is a very neat and clean area.' Suggestion: 'People like to walk in parks because they are neat and clean.'

× 'Also parks have a walking street for individually dedicated for walking at the same time so there is no traffic or any horn.'

✓ 'Also, parks have walking paths dedicated to pedestrians, so there is no traffic or noise from horns.'

Sentence structure and word choice issues: 'a walking street for individually dedicated for walking' is redundant and ungrammatical. Use 'walking paths dedicated to pedestrians.' 'Any horn' is unnatural; use 'noise from horns.' Suggestion: 'Parks have walking paths dedicated to pedestrians, so there is no traffic noise.'

× 'It's just peaceful place.'

✓ 'It's just a peaceful place.'

Missing indefinite article 'a' before singular countable noun 'peaceful place.' Suggestion: 'It's just a peaceful place.'

× 'If I had a chance to go for a long work, I would choose Romney Park because it's a big area.'

✓ 'If I had a chance to go for a long walk, I would choose Romney Park because it's a large area.'

'Long work' is incorrect collocation; should be 'long walk.' 'Big area' is acceptable but 'large area' is more natural. The sentence uses the second conditional correctly for hypothetical present/future. Suggestion: 'If I had the chance to go for a long walk, I would choose Romney Park.'

× 'It's umm, about umm, two umm, kilometer.'

✓ 'It's about two kilometers long.'

Count noun 'kilometer' needs plural 'kilometers' when more than one. Also a clearer structure is 'about two kilometers long.' Remove filler 'umm.' Suggestion: 'About two kilometers long.'

× 'Having a length of this park and also sounded by a lake, which makes this place even more aesthetic.'

✓ 'The length of the park and the fact that it is surrounded by a lake make this place even more attractive.'

'Having a length of this park' is awkward; use 'The length of the park.' 'Sounded by a lake' is incorrect preposition; use 'surrounded by a lake.' Subject-verb agreement: compound subject requires plural verb 'make.' 'Aesthetic' is awkward here; 'attractive' is more natural. Suggestion: 'The park's length and being surrounded by a lake make it more attractive.'

× 'If I had a chance to go for a long work, I would choose Romney Park because it's a big area. It's umm, about umm, two umm, kilometer. Having a length of this park and also sounded by a lake, which makes this place even more aesthetic. However, when you.'

✓ 'If I had a chance to go for a long walk, I would choose Romney Park because it is a large area. It is about two kilometers long and is surrounded by a lake, which makes it more attractive.'

Combined several previous errors: 'work'->'walk,' plural 'kilometers,' awkward clause fragments, and unfinished sentence 'However, when you.' Complete the thought and use consistent tense and structure. Suggestion: 'If I had the chance to go for a long walk, I would choose Romney Park; it is about two kilometers long and surrounded by a lake.'

× 'I used to go for a walk nearby my house.'

✓ 'I usually go for a walk near my house.'

'Used to' indicates a past habit; context asks about recent activity 'Where did you go for a walk lately?' so use present habitual 'usually' or simple past if describing a recent past. 'Nearby my house' -> 'near my house.' Suggestion: 'I usually go for a walk near my house.'

× 'It is name sector 7 parks.'

✓ 'It is called Sector 7 Park.'

Incorrect article and phrasing: use 'It is called' to name a place. Capitalize proper noun and use singular 'Park' if that is the official name. 'It is name' is ungrammatical. Suggestion: 'It is called Sector 7 Park.'

× 'It's a little park.'

✓ 'It's a small park.'

'Little' is not wrong but 'small' is the more neutral adjective for park size in this context. 'Little' can imply affection or young age. Suggestion: 'It's a small park.'

× 'However the all the younger people and elderly used to go for a walk for this park.'

✓ 'However, many young people and elderly people go for walks in this park.'

'Used to' incorrectly implies past habit; likely present general truth so use present 'go.' 'The all the younger people' is ungrammatical—use 'many young people.' 'Go for a walk for this park' incorrect preposition; use 'in this park.' Suggestion: 'Many young and elderly people go for walks in this park.'

× 'So this is sounded by lots of tourists and flowers garden and I used to go there.'

✓ 'So it is surrounded by many trees and flower beds, and I often go there.'

'Sounded by' wrong preposition; use 'surrounded by.' 'Lots of tourists and flowers garden' is mixed ideas; likely meant 'trees' or 'tourists'—I chose natural park features: 'trees and flower beds.' 'I used to go there' suggests past; if speaker still goes often, use 'I often go there.' Suggestion: 'It is surrounded by many trees and flower beds, and I often go there.'