走路— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and organize your answer with a clear topic sentence and one or two supporting details. Use correct verb forms and avoid repetition. Mention a typical amount and clarify whether you mean steps or meters. Use linking words like "because" and "for example" to connect ideas.

範例: Yes, I walk a lot because I work in a busy hospital. For example, I move between patient rooms all day and often walk around 20,000 steps during a typical shift.

建議: Start with a clear topic sentence and give specific details in chronological or logical order. Use past tense consistently and correct grammar for habit descriptions ("used to"). Reduce hesitations and correct subject-verb agreement.

範例: Yes, I often went for walks as a child. I used to walk to the garden with my grandmother and every day we would walk to the market because our family didn't have a car. After shopping, we always walked back home.

建議: Give a clear topic sentence and two specific reasons with linking words (for example, because, therefore). Use correct word choices ("parks" not "past") and avoid awkward phrasing. Provide an example or short consequence to enrich your answer.

範例: People like to walk in parks because parks provide open space and fresh air, especially for people who live in tall apartment buildings. For example, parks offer a quiet place to relax and exercise, so many city residents choose them to unwind.

建議: Use the conditional correctly ("If I had the chance") and keep the answer focused and natural. Avoid repetition and unclear phrases. Give one or two reasons why you prefer that place and a brief example or habit if applicable.

範例: If I had the chance, I would like to take a long walk along the beach. I enjoy walking on the sand and listening to the waves; for example, I often go to Bondi Beach when I have free time because it helps me relax.

建議: Use past tense correctly and produce a clear topic sentence with one or two specific details (name of park, activities). Fix grammar errors ("I walked", "the biggest park", "stressed"). Explain briefly why you chose that place.

範例: Yesterday I walked around the biggest park in Chiang Rai, called Singha Park. I like going there to relax because I have been feeling stressed recently, and the open space and scenery help me unwind.

× Yes I do. I do work a lot because I'm working in the hospital and then I have to walk a lot.

✓ Yes, I do. I work a lot because I work in a hospital and have to walk a lot.

The student mixed present simple and present continuous unnecessarily. Use present simple 'I work' for habitual actions and 'I work in a hospital' is the natural expression. Remove redundant 'do' auxiliary in the second clause and change 'I'm working in the hospital' to 'I work in a hospital' to indicate regular employment. (Grammar problem type ID: 6)

× I walk but every day through the patient room, room 1 to go to other room or and is in hospital is quite busy so sometime I have to walk like 20,000.

✓ I walk every day through the patient rooms, from room 1 to other rooms, and the hospital is quite busy, so sometimes I have to walk a lot.

Errors include incorrect word order and tense consistency. Use present simple 'I walk every day' for habitual action. Pluralize 'rooms' and use 'sometimes' not 'sometime.' Replace 'like 20,000' with 'a lot' unless a specific number is intended. Fix conjunctions and remove extraneous words. (Grammar problem type ID: 6)

× Yes, I did when I was a child. I have to, uh, walk to the garden with my grandmother and I have to walk to every day to the market, umm, because we don't have any car or motorbikes.

✓ Yes, I did when I was a child. I had to walk to the garden with my grandmother and I had to walk to the market every day because we didn't have a car or motorbikes.

Talking about childhood requires past tense. Change 'have to' to past 'had to' and 'don't have' to 'didn't have.' Also move 'every day' to the correct position and use singular article 'a car' for countable noun. (Grammar problem type ID: 5)

× So we going to the market and then we bought, we, we walk back to our house.

✓ So we went to the market and then bought things and walked back to our house.

Use past tense verbs for past events: 'went' and 'walked.' Remove repeated filler words and make the sentence concise. Use 'bought things' if specifics are not given. (Grammar problem type ID: 5)

× It's quite.

✓ It was quite nice.

The fragment 'It's quite.' is incomplete and unclear. In past context use 'It was quite nice' or another adjective to complete the thought. (Grammar problem type ID: 26)

× I think people like to walk in the past because that is the only place that they can enjoy in.

✓ I think people like to walk in the park because that is the only place where they can relax.

'Past' is incorrect; should be 'park.' Avoid ending with an unnecessary preposition 'in' and use 'where they can relax' for clarity. 'Relax' fits meaning better than 'enjoy in.' (Grammar problem type ID: 11)

× I mean in some city because some people live in the apartment in tall building and they don't have any place to relax.

✓ I mean in some cities, because some people live in apartments or tall buildings and don't have any place to relax.

Use plural 'cities' to match general statement. Use plural 'apartments' and 'tall buildings' and correct conjunction 'or.' Remove unnecessary article 'the' before 'apartment' and fix word order. (Grammar problem type ID: 11)

× So going to walk in the park is one of the best options for them.

✓ So going for a walk in the park is one of the best options for them.

Use the noun phrase 'going for a walk' to describe the activity. 'Going to walk' sounds like a future intention. Keep present simple for general truth. (Grammar problem type ID: 6)

× If I have a chance, I like to walk along to the beach.

✓ If I had the chance, I would like to walk along the beach.

This is a hypothetical conditional about an unreal present/future situation. Use the second conditional: 'If I had...' + 'I would like...' Also use 'along the beach' not 'to the beach' when referring to walking along the shoreline. (Grammar problem type ID: 7)

× I love walking to the beach.

✓ I love walking on the beach.

'Walk on the beach' or 'walk along the beach' is more idiomatic than 'walk to the beach' when emphasizing the activity rather than the destination. Present simple is appropriate for general likes. (Grammar problem type ID: 6)

× Every time that I have free time, I always go to Bondi Beach to walk, uh, crossroad, crossroad to Bondi to Gucci biz.

✓ Whenever I have free time, I always go to Bondi Beach for a walk.

Remove fillers and unclear phrases. 'Whenever I have free time' is more natural than 'Every time that I have free time.' Simplify to 'go to Bondi Beach for a walk.' Omit unintelligible words. (Grammar problem type ID: 26)

× That's my one of my favorite hobby.

✓ That's one of my favorite hobbies.

Use 'one of my favorite hobbies' (plural 'hobbies') and omit redundant 'my.' Use present simple to state a preference. (Grammar problem type ID: 6)

× Yesterday I just walk around the park.

✓ Yesterday I just walked around the park.

Because the action happened in the past (yesterday), use past simple 'walked' not present 'walk.' (Grammar problem type ID: 5)

× 1 is the most biggest part in Chiang Rai is called uh Sinha Park.

✓ It is the biggest park in Chiang Rai; it is called Sinha Park.

'Most biggest' is incorrect (double comparative); use 'biggest.' 'Part' should be 'park.' Clarify subject pronoun 'It' rather than '1.' (Grammar problem type ID: 13)

× I love going there to relax because recently I've been stressful.

✓ I love going there to relax because recently I've been stressed.

Use the adjective 'stressed' to describe a person's state, not 'stressful' which describes something that causes stress. 'I've been stressed' (present perfect) correctly links recent experience to the present. (Grammar problem type ID: 13)