走路— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more relevant and clear: directly answer whether you walk a lot, give brief reasons with correct grammar and cohesion, avoid irrelevant words like “work” if you mean “walk.” Use linking words and correct verb forms and articles.

範例: Yes, I walk quite often — about three times a week. I prefer walking now because I am pregnant and want to stay fit for a normal delivery. Also, walking helps me control my weight, so I try not to gain too much.

建議: Good use of past habit 'used to'. Improve coherence and specificity by combining ideas and giving one clear supporting detail. Fix simple grammar like tense consistency and word choice.

範例: Yes, I used to go for walks almost every day when I was a child. I often walked with my friends after school, and sometimes with my family on weekends — it was a regular way for us to play and explore the neighbourhood.

建議: Start with a clear topic sentence and use linking words. Correct grammar (e.g., 'to get fresh air', 'to bond') and be more specific with examples of benefits.

範例: People like walking in parks because they can get fresh air and relax. Moreover, parks are good places to bond with family or friends, and children can play safely on the grass or playgrounds.

建議: Use a conditional structure correctly and give clear reasons. Avoid repetition and fix grammar (e.g., 'I would like to walk to...','there are a lot of people walking there'). Add one specific detail about the place.

範例: If I had the chance, I would like to take a long walk to Yupidi Liman. It has a long coastal path with fresh sea air, and there are usually many people walking, which makes it feel safe and lively.

建議: Answer the past question directly and clearly: name a recent place or say you walked at home. Correct grammar and vocabulary ('I prefer my safety, so','treadmill'), and use one or two supporting details.

範例: I haven't been walking outside recently because I am pregnant and prefer to stay safe. Lately I have been walking on my treadmill at home for about 30 minutes a day.

× Yes, I work a lot.

✓ Yes, I walk a lot.

The student answered a question about walking but used 'work' (wrong verb). This is a lexical error rather than tense, but within the allowed list it fits Present tense issue because the present simple is used incorrectly. Suggestion: use the correct verb that matches the question (walk) and keep present simple for habitual action: 'I walk a lot.'

× I usually work three times a week because I am pregnant and I want to normal delivery and I don't want to gain 2 kilograms in a month.

✓ I usually walk three times a week because I am pregnant and I want a normal delivery, and I don't want to gain 2 kilograms in a month.

Multiple problems: wrong verb 'work' should be 'walk' (lexical), missing article 'a' before 'normal delivery' (article error), and comma needed before coordinating conjunction. Classified as Present tense issue because habitual action uses present simple. Suggestion: use 'walk' for the activity, add 'a' before 'normal delivery', and join clauses correctly: '...and I don't want to gain 2 kilograms in a month.'

× Yes, I used to go for walks almost every day with my friends or with my family and when I play I used to walk.

✓ Yes, I used to go for walks almost every day with my friends or my family, and when I played I used to walk.

The phrase 'used to' requires past reference; 'play' should be in past tense 'played'. This is a Past tense issue and a subject-verb tense inconsistency. Suggestion: keep verbs consistent in past: 'when I played I used to walk.' Also add a comma before 'and' for clarity.

× I think why do people like to walk in parks because to have a fresh air and to bonding with their family and friends and to play outside.

✓ I think people like to walk in parks to get fresh air, to bond with their family and friends, and to play outside.

Sentence structure is awkward and contains incorrect verb forms: 'have a fresh air' should be 'get fresh air' (article error and collocation), 'to bonding' should be 'to bond' (infinitive form). Classified as Incorrect order of adjectives/structure because word order and verb forms are wrong. Suggestion: use infinitives consistently ('to get', 'to bond', 'to play') and remove unnecessary question inversion 'why do' since it's a statement.

× If I had the chance to take a long walk, I like to go walk to Yupidi Liman because I can get fresh air and lot of people walk walking there.

✓ If I had the chance to take a long walk, I would like to go to Yupidi Liman because I could get fresh air and many people walk there.

This mixes conditional with present modal forms. In a hypothetical past-simple condition ('If I had the chance') the main clause should use a conditional modal 'would like'. 'Like to go walk' is awkward; use 'would like to go'. 'Can' should shift to 'could' to match the hypothetical. 'Lot of people' needs 'many people' and 'walk walking' is a repetition; use 'walk'. Classified under Future/conditional tense issues. Suggestion: use 'would like' for hypothetical preference, use 'could' for possibility, and correct plural quantifier and verb form.

× Usually I don't want to walk outside for now because I am pregnant and I want to my safety purse so I prefer to walk in my treadmill.

✓ At the moment I usually don't want to walk outside because I am pregnant and I want to protect my safety, so I prefer to walk on my treadmill.

Problems: 'for now' with 'usually' is slightly conflicting—'at the moment' fits better. 'I want to my safety purse' is ungrammatical and unclear; likely intended 'protect my safety' or 'for safety reasons'. Use 'on my treadmill' rather than 'in'. Classified as Present tense issue because describing current preference. Suggestion: use clear phrase 'for safety reasons' or 'to be safe' and correct preposition 'on' with 'treadmill'.