走路— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Speak more directly and use correct tense and word forms. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid filler sounds (um, uh) and repeat words.

範例: Yes, I walk a lot in the mornings. I walk for about 30 minutes every day because it helps me build strength and gives me energy for the day.

建議: Use past tense consistently and correct grammar. Give a clear statement about frequency and a specific reason or example. Use linking words like 'but' correctly.

範例: Yes, I often walked outside when I was a child, but my family usually did not allow me to go far alone. For example, I walked around our street with my cousins on weekends.

建議: Avoid repetition; give a direct topic sentence and then add a specific reason or example with linking words. Use plural/singular agreement and more varied vocabulary (e.g., 'cleaner', 'relaxing').

範例: People like walking in parks because they are cleaner and more peaceful than busy streets. Also, parks have fresh air and trees, which makes walking more relaxing.

建議: Be concise and use conditional properly. Start with a clear conditional sentence and add a specific reason or detail. Reduce fillers and avoid repeating the same point.

範例: If I had the chance, I would take a long walk around my old school because it has a large playing field and many memories for me. Walking there would be peaceful and nostalgic.

建議: Use past tense for recent actions and give one or two specific details (when, how often, what you like about the place). Keep sentences short and accurate.

範例: Lately I went for a walk at the large field near my hometown. I usually walk there in the evenings because it is quiet and has plenty of space to exercise.

× I work a lot in morning because uh, uh, I want to more strong and uh, energy.

✓ I work a lot in the morning because I want to be stronger and have more energy.

The sentence has present tense usage but misses articles and correct verb forms. 'in morning' should be 'in the morning' (article). 'I want to more strong' is incorrect; use the infinitive 'to be' plus comparative adjective 'stronger'. 'and uh, energy' needs a verb 'have' to link the noun 'energy'. Suggestion: include appropriate articles and use 'to be' with comparative adjectives and active verbs to express possession.

× So that's why in the morning I am going to walk a lot every day.

✓ So that's why in the morning I walk a lot every day.

Using 'am going to walk' suggests future intention; context indicates a habitual action, so simple present 'I walk' is correct. Also 'every day' expresses habitual frequency. Suggestion: use simple present for routines and habits.

× Yes, I happen to go to the walk, uh, when I were a children, umm, but my family not to permission to go to the wall because I am a child.

✓ Yes, I used to go for walks when I was a child, but my family did not give me permission to go to the wall because I was a child.

Multiple past tense errors: 'I happen to go' should be 'I used to go' for past habitual action. 'when I were a children' has subject-verb and number errors; correct is 'when I was a child'. 'my family not to permission' is ungrammatical; correct past negative is 'my family did not give me permission'. 'go to the wall' likely intended 'go to the mall' or 'go to the wall' unclear; kept 'go to the wall' but grammatically 'to the wall' is okay if context. Suggestion: use past simple for past events, ensure subject-verb agreement and proper negation forms.

× Because the park is clean compared to other things and places.

✓ Because the park is cleaner compared to other places.

Use comparative adjective 'cleaner' when comparing. 'other things and places' is wordy and awkward; 'other places' suffices. Also maintain simple present for general facts. Suggestion: use comparative forms (-er) and concise comparison phrases.

× Yeah, that's why people going to like, walk in parks, because parks is clean compared to other places.

✓ Yeah, that's why people like to walk in parks, because parks are cleaner compared to other places.

'people going to like, walk' is incorrect verb form; use 'people like to walk' for general preference. 'parks is clean' has subject-verb agreement error; plural 'parks' requires 'are' and comparative 'cleaner'. Suggestion: use correct infinitive 'like to' and match plural subjects with 'are'.

× Uh, I would like to take a long walk, uh, if I had a chance, umm, I am going to the my old school.

✓ I would like to take a long walk if I had the chance; I would go to my old school.

The sentence mixes conditional 'would like' with incorrect future and article use. Use second conditional: 'I would go' or 'I would like to go' for hypothetical situations. 'the my old school' has extra article 'the' before 'my', remove 'the'. Suggestion: keep conditional forms consistent and avoid redundant articles before possessive pronouns.

× It has a big ground.

✓ It has a big playground.

'Ground' is not the usual noun in English for a school's outdoor area; 'playground' or 'field' is more natural. If 'ground' is intended as 'school ground' use 'school grounds' or 'playground'. Suggestion: choose natural collocations (playground, sports field, school grounds).

× Uh, uh yeah in future. Uh, I have a chance. I am going to the walk in school.

✓ In the future, if I have the chance, I will go for a walk at school.

Mixes tenses and uses incorrect constructions. 'In future' should be 'in the future'. 'I have a chance' needs 'if' for condition. For a conditional future use 'will' after the condition: 'if I have the chance, I will go'. 'to the walk in school' is ungrammatical; use 'go for a walk at school' or 'walk on the school grounds'. Suggestion: use correct conditional structure and natural prepositions for places.

× Uh, I am going to the ground, uh, near my hometown.

✓ I go to the ground near my hometown.

Context asks 'Where did you go for a walk lately?' which is past; however original uses present progressive incorrectly. For recent past say 'I went to the ground near my hometown.' If keeping present habitual, use 'I go'. Suggestion: match tense to question; use past simple 'I went' for a recent action.

× It is a big round that I go for a walk lately.

✓ It is a big ground where I went for a walk recently.

Sentence has wrong word choice and tense: 'big round' likely 'big ground' or 'large field'. 'that I go for a walk lately' mixes relative clause with present tense and 'lately' (which fits present perfect). Better: 'It is a large field where I went for a walk recently.' Suggestion: use correct noun for place, match tense to adverb ('recently' with past simple or present perfect), and use 'where' for location clauses.