走路— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Câu trả lời thiếu rõ ràng, có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và từ sai (ví dụ: "Spain" không đúng, "worked" thay vì "walked"), nội dung lủng củng và quá dài so với yêu cầu. Cần trả lời trực tiếp, sử dụng một câu chủ đề rõ ràng, sửa lỗi động từ thì và từ vựng, và giữ độ dài dưới 3-4 câu. Nên nói rõ tần suất (always/often/sometimes/rarely) và nêu thời điểm cụ thể. Sử dụng liên từ đơn giản để nối ý.

範例: I don't walk very often. I sometimes go for a walk or a jog at my town stadium, and the last time I exercised there was a couple of months ago. I prefer walking on weekends when I have free time.

建議: Ý tưởng rõ ràng nhưng ngữ pháp và cấu trúc câu yếu (ví dụ: "I was saying no" và "didn't let me to get outside"). Cần trả lời trực tiếp bằng một câu chủ đề và sau đó giải thích lý do với cấu trúc ngữ pháp chính xác. Tránh dùng từ không cần thiết và sửa lỗi danh từ số nhiều/động từ như "fears" và "traffics".

範例: No, I didn't go outside often as a child. My parents were worried about safety, such as traffic and the risk of strangers, so they usually kept me at home.

建議: Ý trả lời hợp lý, nêu được lý do nhưng có lặp từ, sử dụng từ ít chính xác và phong cách nói thân mật quá mức ("you know"). Cần cô đọng, dùng từ phong phú hơn (e.g. "pleasant atmosphere", "safe from traffic"), và dùng liên từ để nối ý mạch lạc. Giữ 2-3 câu súc tích.

範例: People enjoy walking in parks because they offer a pleasant atmosphere and fresh air. Parks are also safer and quieter than busy streets, so people can relax without worrying about traffic.

建議: Câu trả lời có ý chính nhưng có lỗi ngữ pháp (thừa từ, cấu trúc lặp) và hơi dài. Nên bắt đầu bằng một câu chủ đề rõ ràng, sau đó nêu 2-3 lý do cụ thể và dùng liên từ. Tránh nói chung chung như "plenty of sites for you"; hãy cá nhân hóa và dùng từ phù hợp.

範例: If I had the chance, I would take a long walk at the stadium near my house. It is close and safe, and I can walk there alone without worrying about traffic. The stadium also has a good track that makes walking comfortable.

建議: Trả lời nêu được thông tin nhưng có lỗi thì và số nhiều ("hang out", "a running events"). Nên trả lời trực tiếp: nêu thời gian cụ thể (e.g. "a couple of months ago"), hoạt động và chi tiết ngắn gọn. Sửa thì và danh từ cho đúng, dùng liên từ để nối ý.

範例: A couple of months ago I went to the stadium with some friends to take part in a running event. We walked and ran around the track together, which was fun and good exercise.

× Actually I Spain a little period of time to walking and maybe the last time I worked or jog was about some months a couple months ago at the stadium of my town.

✓ Actually I spent a short period of time walking in Spain, and the last time I worked out or jogged was a couple of months ago at the stadium in my town.

Original sentence has multiple errors: incorrect verb choice 'Spain' used as a verb instead of 'spent' (sentence structure/word choice), unnecessary preposition 'to' before 'walking' and wrong verb form (verb + -ing should follow 'spent'), incorrect tense and verb form 'worked' for exercise (use 'worked out') and missing past tense for 'jog' (should be 'jogged'), awkward phrase 'about some months a couple months ago' (redundant quantifiers). Suggestion: use 'spent' for time, follow with 'walking' without 'to', use past simple 'jogged' or 'worked out', and choose a single clear time expression such as 'a couple of months ago'.

× I was saying no since at that time my parents didn't let me to get outside because they fears about kidnappers or maybe the vehicles, the traffics.

✓ I said no because at that time my parents didn't let me go outside because they were afraid of kidnappers or vehicles and traffic.

Problems: incorrect progressive 'was saying' — simple past 'said' is correct (past tense issue). 'Didn't let me to get' uses incorrect infinitive with 'to' after 'let' (sentence structure/pronoun usage); 'they fears' uses wrong verb form/subject-verb agreement; 'the traffics' uses incorrect countable noun/article. Suggestions: use simple past 'said', after 'let' use bare infinitive 'go', use 'were afraid of' for emotion, and use 'traffic' uncountable without 'the' when speaking generally.

× You know, Park is an appropriate and also perfect place to walk around, like, you know, the atmosphere, the environment around there and it's a big place for you to walk around without any fears, any concern about traffic.

✓ You know, the park is an appropriate and perfect place to walk, because of the atmosphere and the environment, and it's a large place where you can walk without any fear or concern about traffic.

Errors: missing definite article before 'Park' — use 'the park' (article error). Redundant adverbs 'appropriate and also perfect' (sentence structure). 'walk around' repeated — use 'walk' for variety. 'any fears' should be 'any fear' or 'any fears' is acceptable but 'any fear' sounds more natural; 'concern about traffic' better without 'the' here. Suggestions: use 'the park', avoid redundant words, and prefer consistent singular/uncountable nouns for abstract concepts.

× It's hard for me to choose because there are plenty of sites for you that that you can walk around. But with me, I think I will choose the stadium near my house because it's very near here and I can get there alone and also is a perfect place to walk.

✓ It's hard for me to choose because there are plenty of places where you can walk. For me, I would choose the stadium near my house because it's very close and I can get there alone; it's also a perfect place to walk.

Problems: 'sites for you that that you can walk around' is ungrammatical and repetitive ('that that') — sentence structure error. 'sites' is unnatural; 'places' better. 'With me' is incorrect phrase — use 'for me'. Future tense 'I will choose' is acceptable but 'I would choose' fits hypothetical preference; ensure consistency. 'very near here' should be 'very close' or 'near here'; missing subject before 'is a perfect place' — need 'it's also a perfect place'. Suggestions: remove repetition, use 'places' and 'where you can walk', use clear subject pronouns and natural collocations.

× As far as I can remember, there was maybe a couple months ago when I hang out with my friends to join a running events. I walked around in the stadium with my friends.

✓ As far as I can remember, it was maybe a couple of months ago when I hung out with my friends to join a running event. I walked around in the stadium with my friends.

Errors: incorrect clause 'there was maybe a couple months ago when' — better 'it was... ago' (sentence structure). 'hang out' should be past 'hung out' (verb in past participle/past tense issue); 'to join a running events' has infinitive misuse and plural mismatch — use 'to join a running event' or 'to participate in running events'. Suggestion: use 'hung out' for past, 'a couple of months ago' with 'of', and match singular/plural nouns ('event' or 'events') and correct tense forms.