走路— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and correct word choice: replace 'working' with 'walking' or 'walking a lot' and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific reasons with a linking word. Keep within 3–4 sentences.

範例: Yes, I walk a lot. I prefer walking when I travel because it lets me discover new neighborhoods and see details I would miss on public transport. For example, on my last trip I found a small café and a mural that I would never have noticed otherwise.

建議: Remove hesitations and combine ideas into a clear short answer: start with a direct topic sentence, then give two specific activities as supporting details using linking words such as 'for example' or 'we often'.

範例: Yes, I spent most of my childhood outdoors. For example, my friends and I often ran around, climbed trees and explored the neighborhood, so walking and playing outside were part of our daily routine.

建議: Avoid filler words and be more structured: give a topic sentence, then two clear reasons connected by linking words (such as 'because' and 'for instance'). Use precise vocabulary like 'relax', 'fresh air', 'greenery'. Limit to 2–3 sentences.

範例: People like walking in parks because they offer fresh air and a peaceful environment. For instance, being surrounded by trees and flowers helps many people relax and escape the noise of the city.

建議: Reduce hesitations and be slightly more descriptive: give a clear topic sentence then one specific detail explaining why you prefer that place, using linking words like 'because' and an example or imagined activity.

範例: I would like to take a long walk along the seashore because I love the sound of the waves and the sea breeze. For example, I imagine walking barefoot on the sand while watching the sunset and listening to the water.

建議: Avoid fillers and be specific: state where you walked, then give two precise details about the area using linking words like 'because' or 'for example'. Keep to 2–3 concise sentences.

範例: Recently I walked around my neighborhood. It has several pleasant parks, a lake and interesting architecture, so I often enjoy strolling there to relax and take photos.

× I love working and especially when I travel, I prefer walking instead of using public transport.

✓ I love walking and, especially when I travel, I prefer walking instead of using public transport.

The speaker used 'working' which changes the meaning; context indicates they mean walking. Use the gerund 'walking' consistently for the activity. Also add commas for clarity. Suggestion: choose the correct gerund that matches intended activity and punctuate pauses.

× Did you often go outside to have a walk when you were a child?

✓ Did you often go outside for a walk when you were a child?

The verb tense 'Did you... when you were a child' is correct, but the prepositional phrase 'to have a walk' is unnatural in English. Use the idiomatic 'for a walk'. Suggestion: use common collocations like 'go for a walk'.

× I believe that all my childhood was outside with my friends.

✓ I believe I spent all my childhood outside with my friends.

The original sentence uses 'all my childhood was outside' which is awkward. Use a verb phrase 'spent ... childhood' to express living/time experience. Suggestion: use 'spend' with periods of life: 'I spent my childhood...'.

× We ran, climbed trees and, uh, did uh, a lot of, uh, different activities.

✓ We ran, climbed trees, and did a lot of different activities.

This is mainly punctuation and filler removal. Use consistent verb forms in a list and include comma before 'and' for clarity. Remove fillers 'uh' that interrupt flow. Suggestion: keep parallel verbs and clean hesitations.

× So, yeah. And walking as well.

✓ So yeah, we walked a lot, including long walks.

'Walking as well' is a fragment and ambiguous pronoun reference. Provide a full clause that connects to previous sentence. Suggestion: express the activity in a complete sentence: 'We also walked a lot.'.

× Umm, I think a lot of people enjoy walking, uh, uh, enjoy, uh, fresh air, uh, enjoy nature when uh, you're surrounded by green beautiful trees, flowers and just enjoy this.

✓ I think a lot of people enjoy walking because they enjoy the fresh air and nature when they are surrounded by beautiful green trees and flowers.

Original has repetition and fragmented structure with fillers. Use subordinating conjunction 'because' to link reasons, use consistent subject 'they' instead of mixing 'you', and order adjectives 'beautiful green trees'. Remove repetitive 'enjoy'. Suggestion: make a concise sentence with parallel elements and correct pronoun use.

× I like walking on the shores.

✓ I like walking along the shore.

'On the shores' is awkward; use 'along the shore' or 'on the shore' for idiomatic English. 'Shore' singular is fine and more natural. Suggestion: use 'along the shore' or 'on the shore' depending on context.

× Uh, I love sea and uh, sound of waves.

✓ I love the sea and the sound of the waves.

Missing definite articles: 'the sea' and 'the sound of the waves' are the correct noun phrases. Also plural 'waves' is natural. Suggestion: use 'the' with specific natural features and include 'the' before 'sound'.

× So probably I, I would like to spend, uh, a long walk along the sea.

✓ So probably I would like to take a long walk along the sea.

'Spend a long walk' is unidiomatic; use 'take a long walk' or 'go for a long walk'. Remove duplicate 'I' and fillers. Suggestion: use standard collocation 'take/go for a walk'.

× Where did you go for a walk lately?

✓ Where have you gone for a walk lately?

The question uses 'lately', which pairs better with the present perfect 'have you gone' to ask about recent experiences. Using simple past 'did you go' is acceptable but present perfect is more natural with 'lately'. Suggestion: use present perfect for recent, unspecified times: 'Have you gone... lately?'."},{