走路— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be direct and concise: start with a clear topic sentence answering the question, then give 1–2 specific supporting details using correct grammar and linking words. Avoid repetition and unclear phrases. Correct tenses and articles (e.g., “since childhood” → “since I was a child” or “from childhood”), and plural/singular agreement (e.g., “it creates”).

範例: Yes, I walk regularly. My mother encouraged me to walk every day since I was a child, and now I find it improves both my physical fitness and mental well-being. For example, walking in the park helps me relax and breathe fresh air, which lifts my mood.

建議: Answer directly with a clear past-tense topic sentence, then give specific frequency and brief reason. Use simple past consistently and avoid repetition. Use linking words (e.g., “usually,” “because”) to connect ideas.

範例: Yes, I often went for walks with my parents when I was a child. We usually visited the local park two or three times a week because walking was a family habit and a way for us to spend time together.

建議: Provide a concise topic sentence, then list 2–3 specific, well-structured reasons using linking words (e.g., “because,” “for example,” “also”). Use correct adjectives and word forms (e.g., “green,” “clean,” “calming”) and avoid filler phrases.

範例: I think people enjoy walking in parks because of the pleasant environment. For example, parks are green and quiet, the air is cleaner thanks to trees, and the peaceful atmosphere helps people relax and reduce stress.

建議: Start with a clear conditional topic sentence using correct conditional form, then give specific reasons. Avoid unclear or contradictory statements. Use linking phrases like “because,” “I enjoy,” and correct vocabulary (e.g., “by the sea,” “fresh sea air,” “beneficial”).

範例: If I had the chance, I would take a long walk along the seafront because I enjoy the fresh sea air and wide open views. Walking by the sea relaxes me and is good for both my physical fitness and mental health.

建議: Use past tense correctly and be precise about time. Give a clear answer (place and time) then one short reason. Avoid confusing phrases like “society park” vs “community park” and incorrect time format (10:50 PM, not AM for night).

範例: Lately I have been walking in my apartment complex's park after work. I usually go there around 10:50 PM because it's convenient and quiet, so I prefer it to the larger community park.

× Yes, I do a lot of work and it's a happy since the childhood.

✓ Yes, I do a lot of walking and I've been happy since childhood.

Article and word choice errors: 'a happy' is incorrect because 'happy' is an adjective and needs a verb or adverbial phrase; 'the childhood' should be 'childhood' without 'the'. Also 'do a lot of work' does not match context; 'walking' is the intended activity. Use present perfect 'I've been' to express a state from childhood to now.

× Since the childhood my mother taught me to walk every day.

✓ Since childhood my mother has taught me to walk every day.

Tense and article issue: 'Since the childhood' should be 'Since childhood' and present perfect 'has taught' is appropriate for an action that started in the past and continues to the present. Alternatively simple past 'taught' could be used if the teaching no longer continues.

× It's create impact on my physical and also my mental health, going to park, inhaling the fresh and clean air.

✓ It has created an impact on my physical and mental health: going to the park and inhaling fresh, clean air.

Verb form and article errors: 'It's create' should be 'It has created' or 'It creates' depending on intended meaning. Use 'an impact' with article. 'My physical and also my mental health' is wordy; 'my physical and mental health' is concise. 'Going to park' needs article 'the park'. 'Fresh and clean' should not both take 'the' and should be separated by a comma.

× So it's creates a lot of benefits.

✓ So it creates a lot of benefits.

Subject-verb agreement: 'it's creates' contains two verbs; correct form is 'it creates'. Alternatively 'it has created' depending on context.

× Yes, when I was a child most of the time I go park with my parents to work every two or three times a week and it is a habit of our family to going the work since my childhood.

✓ Yes, when I was a child most of the time I went to the park with my parents to walk every two or three times a week, and it was a family habit to go for walks since my childhood.

Tense errors: use past tense 'went' and 'was' for habitual past actions. Preposition and infinitive form errors: 'go park' should be 'went to the park'; 'to work' seems to be 'to walk'; 'to going the work' is incorrect—use 'to go for walks' or 'to go walking'.

× So most of my my go work when I was a child.

✓ So most of the time I would go for walks when I was a child.

Sentence structure and word choice: original is ungrammatical and has repetition 'my my'. Rephrase to 'most of the time I would go for walks' to convey habitual past action.

× In my perspective, people like to walk in the park because of the environment.

✓ From my perspective, people like to walk in the park because of the environment.

Word choice: 'In my perspective' is nonstandard; 'From my perspective' or 'In my opinion' is correct.

× The environment is a greenly and the air is a clean because of the trees and the grass and the atmosphere is calming and peaceful.

✓ The environment is green and the air is clean because of the trees and grass, and the atmosphere is calming and peaceful.

Adjective/adverb misuse: 'greenly' is incorrect; use adjective 'green'. Remove unnecessary definite articles before uncountable nouns like 'grass'. 'Air is a clean' should be 'air is clean'.

× So these are the some reasons people prefer to walk on in parks.

✓ So these are some reasons people prefer to walk in parks.

Article and preposition errors: 'the some' is incorrect—use 'some'. 'Prefer to walk on in parks' has extra preposition 'on'—use 'walk in parks'.

× If I get the chance, I would definitely prefer to walk on around the sea because around the sea helps me to walk long walk and the air.

✓ If I got the chance, I would definitely prefer to take a long walk along the sea because being near the sea helps me walk for longer and the air is refreshing.

Conditional and preposition errors: Mixed conditional 'If I get... I would' should be 'If I got... I would' (second conditional) or 'If I get... I will'. 'Walk on around the sea' is incorrect—use 'take a long walk along the sea' or 'by the sea'. 'helps me to walk long walk' is ungrammatical; rephrase 'helps me walk for longer'.

× Often the sea is very cold so it scares.

✓ Often the sea is very cold, so it can be intimidating.

Word choice and grammar: 'scares' is transitive and needs an object; better to say 'it can be intimidating' or 'it feels cold and strong'. Add modal 'can' for possibility.

× Whose benefits on your physical and mental health.

✓ This benefits your physical and mental health.

Pronoun and sentence fragment: 'Whose' is incorrect and the phrase is a fragment. Use 'This benefits your physical and mental health' to make a complete sentence and correct pronoun.

× Most of the time I went my society park when I was a late from my work or study so it's around night time 10:50 AM.

✓ Most of the time I went to my society park when I was late from work or study, so it was around night time, about 10:50 PM.

Preposition and tense errors: 'went my society park' needs 'went to my society park'. 'When I was a late' should be 'when I was late'. Time designation '10:50 AM' conflicts with 'night time'—use '10:50 PM'. 'it's around night time' should be past 'it was'.

× So I prefer to work on my society rather than going to my community park.

✓ So I prefer to walk in my society park rather than going to the community park.

Word choice and preposition errors: 'work on my society' is incorrect—intended meaning is 'walk in my society park'. Use 'walk in' and clarify 'the community park'.