走路— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Clarify awkward words and correct collocations (e.g. “short car trips”), avoid incorrect word choices (e.g. “dread”→“stress”), and keep answers concise (max 3–4 sentences). Add a clear topic sentence and one or two specific reasons with linking words.

範例: Yes, I walk quite a lot. I prefer walking for short car trips because it saves me money and reduces stress. For example, I often walk to work or nearby shops, which keeps me fit and clears my mind.

建議: Good structure and clear details. Improve by using concise linking words and one stronger supporting detail or a brief example to make it more vivid. Also correct slight redundancy (e.g. “often” and “about two or three times” together).

範例: Yes, I did. I loved walking outside when the weather was nice, and my parents often took me to the local park to exercise two or three times a week after work. These walks were a chance for us to relax and play together.

建議: Good use of structure (listing reasons). Fix grammar (subject-verb agreement: “parks give”), be more specific (e.g. “well-maintained paths, fewer cars”), and use linking phrase for conclusion to sound natural.

範例: There are several reasons people like walking in parks. First, parks give fresh, clean air and a pleasant environment. Second, they usually have well-maintained paths, so people feel safer than walking beside busy roads.

建議: Correct vocabulary and phrasing: use ‘mountainous countryside’ with articles, fix noun forms (e.g. ‘walking along a trail’), and avoid unclear words (“Wallace” likely intended “valleys” or “vistas”). Be concise and add a specific detail about the type of photos you’d take.

範例: I would love to take a long walk in the mountainous countryside because I enjoy landscape photography. Walking along a trail with wide valley views would give me many opportunities to take dramatic sunrise and panoramic photos.

建議: Fix collocation and word choice: use ‘a long row/line of trees’ or ‘lots of trees’, correct grammar (‘the place feels peaceful and fresh’), and avoid extra adjectives. Be specific about one or two sensory details to strengthen the answer.

範例: Last week I went for a walk in the nearby park. I love it because there are lots of tall trees and colourful flowerbeds, which make the place feel peaceful and fresh.

× Yes, I walk quite a lot because I prefer walking to short car or **** tips.

✓ Yes, I walk quite a lot because I prefer walking to short car or taxi trips.

The original sentence uses 'short car or **** tips' which appears to be a typo and misuses a noun form. Replace with 'taxi trips' (a noun phrase) to correctly name the alternative mode of transport. Also ensure consistent noun phrases after 'prefer walking to'. Use clear, correct nouns (e.g., 'taxi trips') to convey meaning.

× It helps me save money and reduce dread.

✓ It helps me save money and reduce stress.

The word 'dread' is an incorrect choice here; 'stress' or 'anxiety' better fits the intended meaning. Use vocabulary that matches the context: walking reduces stress rather than 'dread' which implies intense fear.

× For example, I often walk to work or nearby shops which also keeps me fit and clears my mind.

✓ For example, I often walk to work or to nearby shops, which also keeps me fit and clears my mind.

A missing preposition and punctuation make the sentence slightly awkward. Add 'to' before 'nearby shops' for parallel structure with 'walk to work', and insert a comma before the nonrestrictive clause 'which also keeps me fit...' to improve clarity.

× My parents also often took me to the local park to exercise about two or three times a week after we finished work.

✓ My parents also often took me to the local park to exercise about two or three times a week after they finished work.

The clause 'after we finished work' creates a logical mismatch because the parents took the child after the parents' workday. Using 'they' clarifies whose work ended. Maintain past tense consistency ('took', 'finished').

× There are several reasons why people love walking in the park.

✓ There are several reasons why people love walking in parks.

The original 'in the park' is not incorrect grammatically but may be less natural when speaking generally. Changing to 'in parks' matches the general statement about people and avoids implying a specific park.

× First, the park always give us fresh air.

✓ First, the park always gives us fresh air.

Subject-verb agreement error: 'the park' is singular and requires the singular verb 'gives' rather than 'give'.

× Second, it provides a lane for walking so people do not worry about their safety compared to walking alongside the road.

✓ Second, it provides a lane for walking, so people do not worry about their safety compared with walking alongside the road.

'Compared to' is often used for similarity; 'compared with' or 'compared to walking along the road' is more appropriate for contrast here. Also add a comma before 'so' to separate clauses. 'Alongside the road' could be simplified to 'along the road'.

× I would love to take a long walk in a mountainous countryside because I enjoy landscape photography.

✓ I would love to take a long walk in mountainous countryside because I enjoy landscape photography.

The phrase 'a mountainous countryside' is unidiomatic; 'mountainous countryside' (no article) or 'a mountainous countryside area' is more natural. Keep noun form consistent when speaking generally.

× Walking along trail with wide views of Wallace would give me opportunities to get to take photos.

✓ Walking along a trail with wide views of the valley would give me opportunities to take photos.

Multiple issues: missing article 'a' before 'trail', unclear proper noun 'Wallace' likely incorrect for 'valley', and redundant phrasing 'opportunities to get to take photos' is awkward. Simplify to 'opportunities to take photos'. Ensure correct nouns and articles.

× Last week I went for a walk in the nearby local park.

✓ Last week I went for a walk in the nearby local park.

This sentence is grammatically correct in past tense; no change needed. Keep past tense 'went' for a completed action.

× I love walking there because the park has a long load of trees and many kinds of colourful flowers which make place feel peaceful and fleshed.

✓ I love walking there because the park has a long line of trees and many kinds of colourful flowers which make the place feel peaceful and fresh.

Several word choice and collocation errors: 'long load of trees' should be 'long line of trees'; add 'the' before 'place'; 'fleshed' is incorrect, likely intended 'fresh'. These corrections fix collocation and word choice to convey the intended meaning.