走路— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be direct and concise: start with a clear topic sentence stating whether you walk a lot, then give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Correct grammar (avoid 'hope' and use 'do' or 'yes') and use relevant vocabulary like 'refreshing', 'healthier', 'exercise'. Keep to 2–4 sentences.

範例: Yes, I walk a lot, especially for short trips and exercise. I find walking refreshing and a good way to stay physically fit, and it also saves money compared with driving. For these reasons I usually choose to walk when possible.

建議: Answer the question clearly and avoid confusing phrases. Say 'yes' or 'no' and follow with specific details about frequency and activities. Remove unrelated questions and correct tense and number (e.g., 'two or three times a week'). Use linking words like 'usually' or 'often'.

範例: Yes, I often went outside as a child to walk with my parents. We usually walked two or three times a week, often to visit the market or nearby parks, which I enjoyed because it felt like a family outing.

建議: Start with a clear topic sentence and give two specific reasons with linking words. Use accurate collocations (e.g., 'breathe fresh air', 'feel refreshed') and avoid repetition. Provide an example or result to make it specific.

範例: People like to walk in parks because they can breathe fresh air and feel refreshed after being indoors. In addition, walking in green spaces reduces stress and improves fitness, so many people go there to relax and exercise.

建議: Answer directly naming the place, then give 2–3 specific reasons using linking words like 'because' and 'also'. Avoid repetition and fix grammar (e.g., 'the ground is well maintained', 'the environment is fresh').

範例: If I had the chance, I'd take a long walk in Kachimoon Park near my home. The park is large with well-maintained paths, friendly people, and a fresh environment, which makes it ideal for a relaxing long walk.

建議: Give a clear past-tense answer: say when and where you went, who you were with, and one detail about the walk. Keep sentences simple and coherent, using linking words like 'because' or 'so'. Correct tense and remove confusing fragments.

範例: Lately I went for a walk with a friend last weekend. We walked around the neighborhood for about an hour because he had finished work early, and it was a nice chance to chat and get some fresh air.

× That's absolutely, I hope a lot because I feel work refreshing and I prefer most of the time to work rather than bike or car because walking it makes you physically fit and which create benefits for you in your future life.

✓ That's absolutely right; I hope so. I walk a lot because I find it refreshing, and I prefer walking most of the time to biking or driving because walking makes you physically fit and creates benefits for your future life.

The sentence uses adverbs and adjectives incorrectly and has awkward phrasing. 'That's absolutely' is incomplete; add 'right' or 'so'. 'I feel work refreshing' is incorrect word order and word choice; use 'I find it refreshing' or 'walking is refreshing'. 'Prefer most of the time to work rather than bike or car' mixes verbs and nouns incorrectly; use 'I prefer walking most of the time to biking or driving.' 'Walking it makes you' has an extra pronoun 'it' and 'which create' has a subject-verb disagreement; use 'walking makes you' and 'creates benefits'. Suggestion: simplify clauses, use correct verb forms and appropriate adverbs/adjectives, and ensure subject-verb agreement.

× Yes, I did often go outside to work with my parents when I was a child. Will you? And I remember being a little things. Usually we went to two or three times twice a week.

✓ Yes, I often went outside to walk with my parents when I was a child. I remember small things about those times. Usually we went two or three times, or twice a week.

The original mixes present and past forms and uses wrong verbs: 'did often go' is unnecessary auxiliary in positive past statements; use 'I often went'. 'Go outside to work with my parents' likely meant 'walk with my parents'. 'Will you?' is irrelevant and should be removed. 'I remember being a little things' is ungrammatical; use 'I remember small things' or 'I was little and I remember...' 'Usually we went to two or three times twice a week' duplicates quantifiers and uses wrong preposition 'to'; correct to 'we went two or three times' or 'twice a week'. Suggestions: use simple past consistently, choose correct verbs (walk vs work), and avoid redundant quantifiers.

× I believe that people like to walk in the park because they feel refreshing and they feel confident and they like to nail a fresh air which is beneficial for their mental health and also they walk in the park so they get good physical health.

✓ I believe people like to walk in the park because they feel refreshed and more confident, and they enjoy fresh air, which is beneficial for their mental health. Walking in the park also improves their physical health.

'They feel refreshing' wrongly uses active adjective; people feel 'refreshed'. 'Like to nail a fresh air' is incorrect verb choice and article use; use 'enjoy fresh air'. The sentence is long and repetitive; break into clearer clauses. 'So they get good physical health' is informal; use 'improves their physical health'. Suggestion: use appropriate adjective forms (refreshed, not refreshing), correct verb collocations (enjoy fresh air), and concise sentence structure.

× If I had a chance to get along, walk, so I choose it. My area park, which is nearby my home name is Kachimoon Park, because this park is very big and the ground is very good and the people are very friendly and environment environment is mostly fresh and refreshing.

✓ If I had the chance to take a long walk, I would choose the park in my area, which is near my home. Its name is Kachimoon Park. This park is very large, the paths are in good condition, the people are friendly, and the environment is mostly fresh and pleasant.

The original has poor sentence structure and incorrect verb forms: 'If I had a chance to get along, walk, so I choose it' mixes phrases; use conditional 'If I had the chance... I would choose'. 'My area park, which is nearby my home name is...' is ungrammatical; reorder to 'the park in my area, which is near my home; its name is...'. Repeated word 'environment environment' is an error. 'Very good' and 'refreshing' are vague; specify 'paths are in good condition' and 'environment... pleasant'. Suggestion: use correct conditional structure (If + past, would + base), clear noun phrases, and avoid repetition.

× I can't go for work late most of the time but one thing I remembering I went a walk with my friends lately live with my one friend who do late work so I went with him to for work and for him I go.

✓ I can't go for walks late most of the time, but I remember recently going for a walk with a friend who works late, so I went with him.

The sentence mixes tenses and has many word choice errors. 'I can't go for work late' should be 'I can't go for walks late' or 'I can't go out late'. 'One thing I remembering' wrongly uses present participle; use past 'I remember' or 'I remember recently'. 'I went a walk' is incorrect article and verb form; use 'going for a walk' or 'I went for a walk'. 'Live with my one friend who do late work' should be 'I live with a friend who works late' if intended, but context suggests 'a friend who works late'—use present simple 'works'. The final phrase 'so I went with him to for work and for him I go' is unclear and redundant; simplify to 'so I went with him.' Suggestion: maintain consistent tense, correct verb forms, and simplify sentence structure.