走路— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is natural, relevant and includes specific details (step count, reasons). To improve, shorten slightly to avoid redundancy, correct minor grammar (e.g. 'when the weather is good') and use one linking phrase to connect ideas. Keep within 3–4 sentences.

範例: I walk quite a lot because most places I need—like the supermarket, gym and my workplace—are within walking distance. When the weather is good, walking is my preferred way to get around, and I average about 7,000–8,000 steps a day.

建議: Content is relevant but coherence and grammar need work. Remove unclear phrases ('snack of eats', 'My FA family'), fix tense and sentence structure, and use a linking word to connect ideas. Be specific with one clear example of activities to strengthen the answer.

範例: Yes, I did. I spent most afternoons outdoors, wandering the neighbourhood and exploring with friends. My family encouraged outdoor play instead of watching TV, and I clearly remember long walks we took to the park.

建議: Good structure with reasons, but grammar and word choice need polishing (plural/singular agreement and vocabulary). Use linking words (first, moreover) and give one specific example of park features. Keep sentences concise and avoid fragments.

範例: There are a few reasons. First, parks offer a peaceful escape from city noise, with fresh air and pleasant views. Moreover, well-maintained paths and lighting make people feel safe and relaxed while walking.

建議: The idea is clear, but many words are incorrect ('head', 'Clave', 'Off Island', 'incredibly climbing', 'coastal war'). Use correct place names or general terms (coast, beach), correct verb forms, and provide a brief reason. Limit to 2–3 concise sentences.

範例: If I could, I would take a long walk along a New Zealand beach. I love the sound of the waves and the open sky, which feel much more refreshing and timeless than walking in the city.

建議: Answer gives specifics but contains many errors (working/ walking, 'small part', 'a few tree', 'down tower', 'sucked indoor'). Fix word choice and tense, use linking words for chronology (recently, last weekend), and be concise. Mention one clear detail about the place to add concreteness.

範例: Recently I often walked in a small park near my apartment; it has a circular path and a few trees, so it's convenient. Last weekend I took a longer walk along the riverbank, and the perfect weather made it especially refreshing.

× Yes, I walk quite a lot, mainly because I live within walking distance of most places I need to go like the supermarket, the gym and even my workplace, so it's my preferred way to get around, especially when weather is good.

✓ Yes, I walk quite a lot, mainly because I live within walking distance of most places I need to go, like the supermarket, the gym and even my workplace, so it's my preferred way to get around, especially when the weather is good.

Missing definite article 'the' before 'weather' and punctuation clarity. The sentence also benefits from a comma before 'like' to separate examples. Suggestion: add 'the' before 'weather' and insert a comma before 'like' to improve flow and grammatical correctness.

× Did you often go outside to have a walk when you were a child?

✓ Did you often go outside to take a walk when you were a child?

The phrase 'have a walk' is unnatural in this context; 'take a walk' is the correct collocation in English when asking about walking as an activity. No tense change needed because the question uses past simple correctly.

× Not necessarily just walking for the snack of eats, but more like wandering around with my friends and exploring the neighborhood.

✓ Not necessarily just walking to get snacks, but more like wandering around with my friends and exploring the neighborhood.

Phrase 'walking for the snack of eats' is ungrammatical and awkward. Use 'walking to get snacks' or 'walking to get something to eat'. This fixes word choice and collocation, keeping the -ing form 'walking' correct as a gerund/verb form in the clause.

× My FA family always encouraged me to play outside rather than stay indoor watching TV and remember going on a long walk.

✓ My family always encouraged me to play outside rather than stay indoors watching TV, and I remember going on long walks.

'FA' is unclear and likely incorrect; remove it. 'Indoor' should be 'indoors' (adverb) and parallelism requires 'going on long walks' or 'a long walk' with 'remember I went'—here rewritten for clarity and grammatical parallel structure.

× I think there's a few reasons.

✓ I think there are a few reasons.

'There is' with plural 'a few reasons' causes subject-verb disagreement. Use 'there are' for plural nouns. This corrects subject-verb agreement and improves grammatical accuracy.

× First of all, park offers a break from the noise and the stress of city life.

✓ First of all, parks offer a break from the noise and the stress of city life.

'Park' should be plural 'parks' or preceded by an article 'the park'. Context implies general statement, so plural noun 'parks' is appropriate. This fixes article/number usage.

× They like a little green escape.

✓ They provide a little green escape.

Pronoun 'they' refers to 'parks' but 'like' is incorrect verb choice. Use 'provide' or 'offer' since parks give an escape. This corrects pronoun reference and verb selection.

× Walking these feels much more relaxing than walking around a busy St.

✓ Walking there feels much more relaxing than walking around a busy street.

'These' is incorrect demonstrative for singular location; 'there' or 'in parks' fits. 'St.' should be written as 'street' in this context. This fixes demonstrative choice and abbreviation clarity.

× Also part usually have nice views, fresh air and often a sense of safety so people feel comfortable.

✓ Also, parks usually have nice views, fresh air and often a sense of safety, so people feel comfortable.

Missing subject 'parks' causes unclear pronoun reference. 'Part' is incorrect. Use 'parks' as subject and adjust verb to agree ('have'). Add commas for clarity.

× If I had the chance, I would like to take a long walk along the head somewhere like the Clave or Off Island or the beach of New Zealand.

✓ If I had the chance, I would like to take a long walk somewhere like Cape Clave, Off Island, or on a beach in New Zealand.

Phrase 'along the head' is unclear; likely intended 'somewhere like Cape Clave'. Use parallel prepositions and correct place name forms: 'on a beach in New Zealand'. This preserves the conditional tense and corrects place-name and preposition usage.

× I've always find the sound of waves and the open sky incredibly climbing.

✓ I've always found the sound of waves and the open sky incredibly calming.

Present perfect 'I've always' requires past participle 'found' not base 'find'. 'Climbing' is incorrect word; 'calming' fits meaning. This corrects verb form and word choice.

× Unlike walking in the city, a coastal war feels both refreshing and timeless.

✓ Unlike walking in the city, a coastal walk feels both refreshing and timeless.

'War' is a typo for 'walk'. Use 'coastal walk' to mean walking by the coast. This fixes a lexical error making the sentence coherent.

× Lately I have been working quite often in a small part near my apartment.

✓ Lately I have been walking quite often in a small park near my apartment.

'Working' is incorrect meaning; likely 'walking'. 'Part' is a typo for 'park'. This keeps present perfect continuous tense appropriate for recent repeated actions and corrects vocabulary.

× It's nothing fancy, just a few tree or circular path, but it's very convenient.

✓ It's nothing fancy, just a few trees and a circular path, but it's very convenient.

'Noun number' and conjunction errors: 'tree' should be plural 'trees', 'or' should be 'and' to list both features, and include article 'a' before 'circular path'. This corrects number and coordination.

× Last weekend I also took a long walk along the riverbank down tower and the weather was perfect and it feels great to get some fresh air after being sucked indoor for most of the week.

✓ Last weekend I also took a long walk along the riverbank down by the tower; the weather was perfect and it felt great to get some fresh air after being stuck indoors for most of the week.

Mixed tenses and several errors: 'down tower' -> 'down by the tower'; 'feels' should be past 'felt' to match past timeframe; 'sucked indoor' -> 'stuck indoors' (correct verb and adverb). Use semicolon or period to separate clauses. This corrects past tense consistency, vocabulary and adverb form.