走路— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Make the answer more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar (tense and word order), avoid repetition, and limit to 2–3 sentences. Use linking words to connect ideas (e.g., "since" or "so").

範例: Yes, I walk a lot now. Since I moved to Australia two years ago I don't own a car, so I often take the bus and then walk home.

建議: Improve tense consistency and provide a brief reason with specific details. Use past tense throughout and avoid vague phrases like "don't have a time." Keep it within 2–3 sentences and add a linking word such as "because" or "so."

範例: No, I didn't. When I was a child my parents were very busy with work, so they rarely took me out; I usually stayed home and watched cartoons.

建議: Be more precise with vocabulary and correct minor errors (e.g., "grass" not "glass", "fresh air"). Start with a direct opinion and then give 1–2 specific reasons, using linking words like "because" or "for example."

範例: People like walking in parks because they offer pleasant scenery and fresh air. For example, I enjoy the green grass, trees, and flowers which make walks relaxing.

建議: Give a clear topic sentence naming the place, then add 1–2 specific reasons. Fix phrasing and remove fillers such as "in like." Use linking words like "because" and avoid repetition.

範例: I'd like to take a long walk along the river, especially at Alexander Garden. I enjoy it because the path follows the water and I can watch kayaks and birds while I walk.

建議: Make the answer grammatically correct and concise. Start with a clear past tense sentence, then add one specific detail. Combine clauses smoothly using a relative clause or conjunction.

範例: I went for a walk last week in Flagstaff Gardens, which is just five minutes from my apartment. I like it because there are often many dogs playing there.

× Yes, I do work a lot in nowadays.

✓ Yes, I work a lot nowadays.

The phrase 'do work' is unnecessary for simple present affirmation; use the simple present 'I work'. Also 'in nowadays' is incorrect; use 'nowadays' without a preposition. Suggestion: Use simple present for habitual actions (I work a lot nowadays).

× Since I moved to Australia for two years I have been walking a lot because here I have I don't have a car and I have to take the bus, take the time and after walk home.

✓ Since I moved to Australia two years ago, I have been walking a lot because I don't have a car here and I have to take the bus and then walk home.

Use 'two years ago' with a past event 'Since I moved' and present perfect continuous 'have been walking' is fine. Remove duplicated 'I have'. Use 'here' after 'car' and 'then' for sequence; 'walk home' needs 'walk' as base verb with 'then'. Suggestion: Say 'Since I moved to Australia two years ago, I have been walking a lot because I don't have a car here and I have to take the bus and then walk home.'

× No, I didn't often go outside to have a walk when I was a child because my parents don't have a time to walk me outside.

✓ No, I didn't often go outside to take walks when I was a child because my parents didn't have time to take me outside.

The sentence describes the past, so use past tense consistently: 'didn't' and 'didn't have'. 'Have a time' is incorrect; use 'have time'. Use 'take walks' or 'go for walks' and 'take me outside' for correct verb collocations. Suggestion: Use past tense for past habits: 'I didn't often go outside to take walks... my parents didn't have time to take me outside.'

× So I just stay home and watch TV, watch some cartoon.

✓ So I just stayed at home and watched TV and some cartoons.

Refers to childhood (past), so use past tense 'stayed' and 'watched'. Use plural 'cartoons' or 'a cartoon' and include preposition 'at' with 'home'. Suggestion: 'So I just stayed at home and watched TV and some cartoons.'

× I think it's because the parks have a beautiful view, like the green of the glass, the tree and the flower and also have a good air.

✓ I think it's because the parks have a beautiful view, like the green of the grass, the trees and the flowers, and they also have good air.

Use 'grass' not 'glass'. Use plural 'trees' and 'flowers' for general statements. 'Have a good air' is incorrect; say 'have good air' or 'good air quality'. Add 'they' for the second clause. Suggestion: '...the green of the grass, the trees and the flowers, and they also have good air.'

× Even me, I really enjoy to walk in the park.

✓ Even I really enjoy walking in the park.

Subject pronoun 'I' should be used instead of 'me' at sentence start. After 'enjoy' use gerund 'walking', not 'to walk'. Suggestion: 'Even I really enjoy walking in the park.'

× I would like to take a long walk when I walk in like along the river.

✓ I would like to take a long walk along the river.

Sentence is redundant and confused: 'when I walk in like along' is ungrammatical. Simplify to 'take a long walk along the river'. Suggestion: Keep it concise: 'I would like to take a long walk along the river.'

× I have my favorite place called Alexander Garden that is the garden near the river and when I walk along the river I can see the kayak.

✓ My favorite place is called Alexander Garden; it is a garden near the river, and when I walk along the river I can see kayaks.

Use 'My favorite place is called' for natural word order. Use semicolon or split clauses. 'The garden' is unclear; 'a garden' or identify it. 'Kayak' should be plural 'kayaks' unless referring to a single boat. Suggestion: 'My favorite place is called Alexander Garden. It is a garden near the river, and when I walk along the river I can see kayaks.'

× I went for a walk last week in the park near my house is called Flagstaff Garden.

✓ I went for a walk last week in the park near my house called Flagstaff Garden.

Remove extra 'is' which makes sentence ungrammatical. Use 'called Flagstaff Garden' to modify 'the park near my house'. Suggestion: 'I went for a walk last week in the park near my house called Flagstaff Garden.'

× It's just 5 minutes from my apartment and they have a lot of dogs there.

✓ It's just 5 minutes from my apartment, and there are a lot of dogs there.

Use 'there are' for existence with plural 'a lot of dogs'. 'They have' incorrectly uses 'they' without clear subject; 'there are' is correct. Suggestion: 'It's just 5 minutes from my apartment, and there are a lot of dogs there.'