走路— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and natural. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add one or two clear supporting details using linking words. Correct grammar (e.g. 'gym' not 'gymnasium' in casual speech) and avoid redundancy.

範例: No, I don't walk much. I usually go to the gym every morning and use the treadmill for cardiovascular exercise, which replaces outdoor walking for me.

建議: Use past simple consistently and make sentences fluent and slightly more detailed. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific examples and link them. Avoid filler words like 'yeah, that's it.'

範例: Yes, I did. When I was a child I played outside often; for example, every evening I would play football with my friends and cousins in the neighborhood park.

建議: Focus on one clear reason per sentence and use linking words (because, for example, and). Remove irrelevant comparisons (treadmill) unless explained. Correct grammar and be specific about benefits.

範例: People like walking in parks because of the fresh air and natural scenery, which helps reduce stress. For example, my parents walk in the park every morning to relax and exercise.

建議: Give a single clear location and support it with specific reasons and examples. Use natural conditional phrasing ('If I had the chance, I would...') and linking words to connect ideas. Avoid repetitive phrases.

範例: If I had the chance, I would take a long walk in a large riverside park because I could enjoy the scenery and fresh air. I would also like observing people exercising, jogging, or painting along the riverbank.

建議: Answer directly with a simple past or present perfect if referring to recent time, and avoid repeating. Use one or two specific details about timing and routine, and correct verb forms.

範例: Lately I haven't walked outside much; instead, I have been going to the gym every morning. After breakfast I do 30–40 minutes on the treadmill as part of my cardio routine.

× No, basically I don't walk a lot, but every day in the morning I go to gymnasium and I use treadmill and so many exercises.

✓ No, basically I don't walk a lot, but every morning I go to the gym and use the treadmill and do many exercises.

Use simple present for habitual actions (every morning). Add definite article 'the' with 'gym' and 'treadmill'. Use 'do many exercises' instead of 'so many exercises' to make a grammatically correct verb phrase and natural collocation.

× Yes. In my childhood, when I get time, I always used to play in outside.

✓ Yes. In my childhood, when I had time, I always used to play outside.

When referring to past habits, use past tense 'had' instead of 'get'. Remove unnecessary preposition 'in' before 'outside'; correct phrase is 'play outside'.

× So I in every evening I used to go to outside play with my friends and my cousins.

✓ So every evening I used to go outside to play with my friends and my cousins.

Wrong word order and prepositions: 'in every evening' should be 'every evening'. Use 'go outside to play' not 'go to outside play'.

× I think people love to work in parks because the nature and the fresh air.

✓ I think people love to walk in parks because of nature and the fresh air.

Context requires 'walk' not 'work'. Use 'because of' with nouns ('because the nature' is incorrect). 'Nature' and 'the fresh air' are natural objects of 'because of'.

× Also people can use treadmill in their home.

✓ Also people can use a treadmill at home.

Use article 'a' before 'treadmill' and preposition 'at' with 'home' (not 'in their home' in this context). 'At home' is the natural expression.

× But most of the people in our country also my parents, they love to walk in the park.

✓ But most people in our country, including my parents, love to walk in the park.

Simplify phrase 'most of the people' to 'most people'; combine clause 'also my parents' into 'including my parents'; remove redundant pronoun 'they'.

× They can enjoy the fresh air. Also.

✓ They can enjoy the fresh air.

Fragment 'Also.' is unnecessary and creates a sentence fragment. Combine ideas into one complete sentence.

× Every morning my parents go to the park and they are walking.

✓ Every morning my parents go to the park and walk.

Use simple present 'walk' for habitual actions. 'They are walking' suggests an ongoing action now, which conflicts with habitual context.

× When I get any chance of walking, I must go to any park.

✓ When I get a chance to walk, I must go to a park.

Use 'a chance' not 'any chance' for a singular opportunity. Use infinitive 'to walk' after 'chance' and 'a park' for a single place.

× I can enjoy the natural places and also the fresh air.

✓ I can enjoy natural places and the fresh air.

Drop unnecessary article 'the' before 'natural places' unless referring to specific places. Maintain present modal 'can' for possibility.

× I can see people what are doing in the park.

✓ I can see what people are doing in the park.

Incorrect use of 'what' placement. Correct word order is 'see what people are doing' or 'see people doing'.

× Also I can see various type of people doing their activities, their cardio.

✓ Also I can see various types of people doing activities, such as cardio exercises.

Use plural 'types' after 'various'. 'Their cardio' is unnatural; specify 'cardio exercises' or 'cardio workouts'. Remove redundant 'their' before 'activities'.

× Also some of people who are watching nature, also painting.

✓ Some people are watching nature or painting.

Fix word order and remove extra 'also'. Use 'some people are' and parallel verbs 'watching' and 'painting'.

× As I mentioned before, I basically go to gym every day.

✓ As I mentioned before, I basically go to the gym every day.

Add definite article 'the' before 'gym'. Present tense 'go' is acceptable for habitual action; include 'the'.

× Every every morning I woke up and I take my breakfast and go to gym and I use treadmill and I I make my cardio and make my daily activities there.

✓ Every morning I wake up, have my breakfast, go to the gym, use the treadmill, do my cardio, and do my daily exercises there.

Maintain present simple for habitual routine ('wake up', 'have', 'go', 'use', 'do'). Remove duplicate 'every', correct verb forms ('have breakfast' not 'take my breakfast'), add articles and parallel verb structure. Remove duplicated 'I'.