走路— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Good brief direct answer and natural. To improve, make the response slightly longer (2–3 sentences) with a reason or brief detail using a linking word to show coherence. Avoid one-word replies and add specific detail about where or why you walk.

範例: Yes, I love walking, especially in the morning because the air is fresh and the streets are quiet. For example, I usually walk around my neighborhood park for about thirty minutes to wake up and clear my mind.

建議: The answer is unclear and contains vocabulary errors and grammar mistakes. To improve, give a simple clear topic sentence stating frequency in childhood, then add a specific detail about who you walked with or where using linking words. Use correct verbs (e.g., 'went' not 'got') and noun phrases.

範例: Yes, when I was six I often went for walks with my family. For instance, we would walk to the nearby park every weekend so I could play with my friends and spend time with my parents.

建議: The answer gives basic ideas but is vague and contains awkward phrasing. Improve by using clearer vocabulary (e.g., 'get exercise', 'improve fitness') and add linking words to expand reasons with examples. Avoid filler like 'etcetera' and aim for two to three concise sentences.

範例: People like to walk in parks because it helps them relax and get light exercise. Also, parks offer fresh air and pleasant scenery, so for example, many parents walk there to unwind while their children play.

建議: Good idea and specific place, but some grammar and word choice are incorrect ('less than the pollution'). Improve by making the comparison clear and using linking words to describe features. Keep it to two or three well-formed sentences and use correct expressions like 'less pollution' or 'low traffic'.

範例: I would love to take a long walk in Eco Park Santa Rita because there are no cars and very little pollution. Moreover, the park has beautiful trails and stunning scenery, so it would be peaceful and refreshing.

建議: The answer is confusing (walking 'in' a store) and has grammar mistakes ('having', 'hang out'). To improve, give a clear past-tense statement about where you walked, mention who you were with and what you did, and use linking words to connect ideas. Keep it concise and natural.

範例: Yesterday I went for a walk around the shopping area in my hometown with some friends. We stopped by a few shops and chatted while walking, so it was a nice, relaxed outing.

× When I was six years old, I often got a website to have a walk and bonding friends families.

✓ When I was six years old, I often went out for a walk to spend time bonding with friends and family.

This sentence contains multiple errors: 'got a website' is incorrect word choice for 'went out' or 'went to a place'; 'to have a walk' should be 'for a walk' or 'to go for a walk'; 'bonding friends families' is ungrammatical and should be 'bonding with friends and family'. Revise by choosing correct verbs and prepositions and include 'with' to indicate who you bonded with. Use 'went' (simple past) to match 'When I was six years old'. ID:26

× Because they want to relax and make more exercise and make a better field in their body and etcetera.

✓ Because they want to relax, get more exercise, and improve their physical fitness, among other reasons.

Errors include 'make more exercise' (incorrect collocation; use 'get more exercise' or 'exercise more'), 'make a better field in their body' is meaningless; likely intended 'improve their fitness' or 'improve their health'. 'Etcetera' is informal and vague here; 'among other reasons' is preferable. Keep parallel structure with verbs 'relax, get, and improve'. ID:13

× I would love to take a long walk along the Eco Park Santa Rita because there are no cars. It's less than the pollution and having a breathtaking nature.

✓ I would love to take a long walk along Eco Park Santa Rita because there are no cars, the pollution is lower, and the scenery is breathtaking.

Original has awkward comparisons and incorrect structures: 'It's less than the pollution' is ungrammatical; use 'the pollution is lower' to compare. 'Having a breathtaking nature' should be 'the scenery is breathtaking' or 'it has breathtaking nature'. Also drop the article before the park name if the official name is 'Eco Park Santa Rita'. Maintain parallelism in the list of reasons. ID:7

× Yesterday I walked in the Sorry Sorry store in my hometown and having a good time with my friends, hang out. I love walking, it's like that.

✓ Yesterday I walked to the Sorry Sorry store in my hometown and had a good time hanging out with my friends. I love walking; it's like that.

Mixes past tense and -ing forms incorrectly: after 'and' you need a past-tense verb 'had' to match 'walked', or use 'and was having' for continuous past. 'Having a good time with my friends, hang out' is ungrammatical; use 'had a good time hanging out with my friends'. The final sentence 'it's like that' is colloquial but acceptable; punctuation improved. Ensure consistent past tense when recounting past events. ID:5