走路— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct common errors (e.g., "depend about" → "depends on", "work a lot" → unclear: use "walk a lot" or "work a lot" appropriately). Try to avoid filler sounds (uh, um) and keep answer within 3–4 sentences.

範例: Yes, I walk quite often. It depends on the weather: if it is very hot I prefer to stay at home, but when it's cool I usually go for a walk around my neighborhood for 30–40 minutes.

建議: Use past tense consistently and give one or two specific examples to make the answer more vivid. Begin with a clear past-time topic sentence, use linking words (for example, sometimes), and avoid fillers. Replace vague phrases like "walk a lot" with specific activities or frequency.

範例: Yes, I often went outside when I was a child. For example, when I felt bored I would walk to the nearby park or ride my bicycle for an hour with friends.

建議: Give a clear reason and support it with specific details. Use correct vocabulary ("plants", "clean air", "peaceful atmosphere") and linking words (for example, because, so). Avoid repetition and fillers. Keep to 2–3 sentences maximum.

範例: People like walking in parks because the plants and trees create fresh air and a peaceful atmosphere. For example, parks are quieter than city streets, so walking there helps people relax and enjoy nature.

建議: Use conditional structure correctly and choose precise vocabulary ("park" instead of "bark"). Start with a clear conditional sentence, then give a reason and a detail about the setting. Avoid repetition and fillers.

範例: If I had the chance, I would like to take a long walk in a quiet park. I prefer peaceful places because walking there helps me think and clear my mind for an hour or two.

建議: Use past tense clearly and give concise, specific details (location, duration, how you felt). Avoid filler words and correct verb choice ("I walked", not "I went to walk"). Keep to 2–3 sentences and link ideas with words like "although" or "but".

範例: Recently I walked along the seaside, which was a beautiful place. Although it was quite hot, I enjoyed the walk and stayed there for about 15 to 20 minutes.

× Yes, uh, I often work a lot, uh, but it's depend about the weather, uh, on the day, if it's high temperature, no, I often like to stay at home if I don't have any plan.

✓ Yes, I often walk a lot, but it depends on the weather. If the temperature is high, I like to stay at home if I don't have any plans.

The student used incorrect verbs and tenses: 'work a lot' should be 'walk a lot' to answer the question; 'it's depend' is wrong because 'depend' requires third person singular agreement 'depends'; 'about the weather, uh, on the day' is awkward and should be 'on the weather' or 'on the day' removed; 'high temperature' needs article or 'the temperature is high'; 'plan' should be plural 'plans'. Suggestion: use simple present with correct subject-verb agreement and plural form where needed.

× Yes uh, as I remember, I usually go outside when I feel boring at home uh and walk a lot Sometime I go and take my bike and bicycle umm, that's it. So.

✓ Yes, as I remember, I usually went outside when I felt bored at home and walked a lot. Sometimes I would go and take my bike. That's it.

Question asked about childhood (past), so verbs should be in past tense. 'go' -> 'went', 'feel boring' -> 'felt bored' (boring describes things, bored describes feelings), 'walk a lot' -> 'walked a lot'. 'Sometime' -> 'Sometimes'. Also 'take my bike and bicycle' is redundant; 'take my bike' suffices. Suggestion: match tense to time frame and use correct adjective for feelings.

× So a lot of people, uh, they often to walk, uh, at spark in the park. Sorry, umm, I think in my opinion, because the park has like a lot of plans and the plans make the weather more colder and nice.

✓ A lot of people often walk in parks. I think this is because parks have many plants, which make the air cooler and nicer.

Several preposition and word choice errors: 'they often to walk' should be 'they often walk' (no 'to'); 'at spark in the park' is unclear — likely meant 'in parks' or 'in the park'; 'in my opinion' is redundant after 'I think'; 'plans' should be 'plants'; 'make the weather more colder' is incorrect: 'colder' already comparative, so use 'cooler' or 'make the air cooler' and avoid 'more colder'. Suggestion: use correct prepositions ('walk in'), correct nouns ('plants'), and correct comparative forms.

× If I have a chance to take a long walk, uh, I will prefer to walk some bark, but uh, a quiet bark because I like, like, uh, to think when I was walking, umm, that's it.

✓ If I had the chance to take a long walk, I would prefer to walk in a quiet park because I like to think while I am walking.

This conditional needs second conditional structure: 'If I had... I would prefer...' not 'If I have... I will prefer'. 'walk some bark' should be 'walk in a park'; 'bark' -> 'park'. 'to think when I was walking' mixes tenses; use 'to think while I am walking' or 'while I'm walking'. Suggestion: use correct conditional form for hypothetical situations and proper nouns/word forms.

× Umm, I went to walk, uh, near the, the sea, which is uh, amazing place, but uh, it's quite hot there, but I enjoy it also, umm, and I work for maybe 15 minute, 20 minutes, so.

✓ I went for a walk near the sea, which is an amazing place. It was quite hot there, but I enjoyed it. I walked for maybe 15 or 20 minutes.

Use correct collocations and past tense consistency: 'went to walk' -> 'went for a walk'; 'the sea, which is uh, amazing place' needs article 'an amazing place'; since event is past, 'it's quite hot' should be 'it was quite hot' and 'I enjoy it' -> 'I enjoyed it'. 'I work for maybe 15 minute' should be 'I walked for maybe 15 or 20 minutes' with plural 'minutes'. Suggestion: keep past tense throughout when describing past events and use correct verbs for activities.