走路— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct tense and grammar, and avoid vague words like “blends.” Use one linking phrase to add a specific reason or example.

範例: I don't walk a lot, but I enjoy walking when I have free time because it lets me enjoy the scenery and fresh air. For example, I often walk along the riverbank near my home to relax and look at the city views.

建議: Use past tense consistently and provide clearer, specific details. Begin with a direct answer, then give one or two specific supporting details (where, who with, what you did). Avoid repetition and correct word choice.

範例: Yes, I often walked outside as a child. My family lived in a housing compound, so I usually walked to school and played with neighborhood children in the compound courtyard after classes.

建議: Clarify vocabulary and avoid mispronounced or wrong words (e.g. “Dracula exercise”). Give a clear reason and one specific example of benefits. Use linking words (for example, because) to connect ideas.

範例: People like walking in parks because it is a convenient way to exercise and relax. For example, many people walk in the early morning to improve their health and enjoy fresh air and green surroundings.

建議: Answer directly using a conditional form, then give specific features that make it attractive. Avoid repeating words and filler sounds. Keep to 2–4 sentences max.

範例: If I had the chance, I would take a long walk in the nearby circular park. It has flower beds, tall trees and a playground, which makes it a peaceful place to relax and enjoy nature.

建議: Use simple past clearly and be specific about timing (e.g., yesterday, last weekend). Begin with a direct answer and add one specific detail about what you did there.

範例: Last weekend I went for a walk to the nearby park I mentioned and then walked through the market. I spent about an hour walking, looking at stalls and buying some fruit while enjoying the fresh air.

× I don't usually walk a lot, but I love to walk when I free and I love to see the views and the blends and the weather when I go walking.

✓ I don't usually walk a lot, but I love to walk when I am free, and I love to see the views, the plants and the weather when I go walking.

The sentence lacks the correct present continuous/copula 'am' after 'when I'; this is a present-tense state that requires 'am free'. Also 'blends' is incorrect in context and likely intended to be 'plants' or 'landscapes'. Add commas to separate ideas for clarity. Suggestion: use 'I am free' for correct present-tense expression and choose the correct noun ('plants' or 'views').

× When I was a child, I, my family and I live mostly in outdoor places in in compounds and I have to walk to school and I enjoy playing in the home house compound.

✓ When I was a child, my family and I lived mostly outdoors in compounds, and I had to walk to school and enjoyed playing in the house compound.

The sentence mixes past and present verbs. Because the time frame is 'When I was a child' all verbs should be in the past tense: 'lived' not 'live', 'had to' not 'have to', 'enjoyed' not 'enjoy'. Also 'outdoor places' is better as 'outdoors' and reduce repetition ('I, my family and I' is redundant). Suggestion: keep consistent past tense throughout the sentence and remove redundant phrases.

× I see people like to walk in parks because, uh, they are trying to have like Dracula exercise in early mornings or in the evenings, uh, to have a healthy high spot, a healthy lifestyle and to enjoy.

✓ I think people like to walk in parks because they try to exercise in the early mornings or evenings to stay healthy and enjoy themselves.

Use present simple 'think' or 'I believe' for general statements; 'they try' is present simple rather than 'are trying to have'. Remove incorrect or irrelevant word 'Dracula' and unclear phrase 'healthy high spot'. Use 'stay healthy' and 'enjoy themselves' for clarity. Suggestion: use concise present simple verbs for habitual actions and choose accurate vocabulary.

× There is a nearby park, uh, which is a circular park with beautiful flowers and a playground and trees and like flower trees, uh, and it is my recent free break place to walk when I am free.

✓ There is a nearby park that is circular, with beautiful flowers, a playground and many trees, and it is my favorite place to walk when I am free.

The sentence uses acceptable 'there is' but is wordy and has awkward phrases like 'flower trees' and 'my recent free break place'. Replace with 'many trees' and 'my favorite place' to convey meaning. Maintain present simple 'is' for description. Suggestion: simplify descriptions and use common collocations like 'favorite place' and 'when I am free'.

× Uh, I usually went to the nearby park, uh, that I mentioned before and to the market where I can go shopping and walking at the same time.

✓ I usually go to the nearby park I mentioned before and to the market, where I can shop and walk at the same time.

The original mixes past 'went' with 'usually', which requires present simple 'usually go' for habitual actions in the present. Use 'can shop' or 'shop' instead of 'go shopping' to be concise. Suggestion: use present simple for habitual routines and keep tense consistent; use concise verb forms like 'shop and walk'.