走路— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Focus on clarity, grammar and conciseness. Begin with a direct topic sentence, correct verb choices and articles (e.g., 'I walk quite often' not 'work'), and avoid redundancy. Use one or two supporting details linked clearly (for example: 'because it helps me relax and gives me light exercise'). Keep to 2–3 sentences.

範例: Yes, I walk quite often. I usually go to a nearby park for about an hour because walking helps me relax and gives me some light exercise, but I take public transport when I commute to university.

建議: Answer directly and improve accuracy and vocabulary. Begin with a clear topic sentence ('Yes, I often walked as a child'), correct word choice ('on foot' is good) and avoid filler words. Provide a specific detail with a linking phrase (e.g., 'because' or 'as'), and correct verbs (enjoyed walking, not working).

範例: Yes, I often walked when I was a child. When I was in elementary school I usually walked to school because it only took 20 minutes, and I enjoyed looking around the neighborhood on the way.

建議: Make the answer more natural and reduce repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add two specific reasons with linking words ('because' and 'for example'). Fix grammar (gives, relieve stress). Use vocabulary relevant to parks (green spaces, fresh air).

範例: People like walking in parks because it helps them relax and provides light exercise. For example, being among green spaces and fresh air can refresh the mood and relieve stress from work or school.

建議: Make the conditional sentence grammatically correct and coherent. Start with 'If I had the chance' and state the place clearly ('the seaside' or a city). Avoid irrelevant fragments ('are you allowed') and combine short ideas into one or two fluent sentences. Use sensory details correctly (waves lapping, salty breeze).

範例: If I had the chance, I would take a long walk along the seaside, preferably in a city famous for its beaches. I love the ocean and would enjoy listening to waves lapping on the shore and feeling the salty breeze.

建議: Be concise and use correct tense and linking words. Begin directly ('Recently I walked to take my sister to her academy') and combine short fragments into complete sentences. Use past tense consistently ('we chatted') and link cause and effect ('so I felt relaxed').

範例: Recently I walked for about 20 minutes to take my sister to her academy. We chatted a lot about our day and upcoming plans, so the conversation left me feeling relaxed and refreshed.

× Yes, I work quite open.

✓ Yes, I walk quite often.

The student used 'work' and 'open' incorrectly. The intended meaning is that they walk often; 'often' is the correct adverb of frequency. Use the verb 'walk' rather than 'work' and the adverb 'often' rather than 'open'. Replace with 'I walk quite often.'

× I usually go for a work at the nearby park about an hour because it helps me relax and get a light exercise.

✓ I usually go for a walk at the nearby park for about an hour because it helps me relax and get some light exercise.

Incorrect article 'a work' should be 'a walk' and the preposition/time phrase should be 'for about an hour'. Also 'a light exercise' is unnatural; use 'some light exercise' (uncountable). This corrects article and noun usage and improves natural collocation.

× But when I commute to the university I usually take an transportation.

✓ But when I commute to the university I usually take transportation.

'An transportation' is incorrect because 'transportation' is uncountable in this context and does not take 'an'. Remove the article or use a countable noun like 'a bus' or 'a train'. Also a comma after the introductory clause helps: 'But when I commute to the university, I usually take transportation.'

× Did you often go outside to have a walk when you were a child?

✓ Did you often go outside to have a walk when you were a child?

This question is already grammatically acceptable; no correction needed. Past simple 'did...go' matches 'when you were a child.' Left unchanged.

× Yes, I think I walked alright when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I think I walked a lot when I was a child.

'alright' is incorrect here; 'a lot' expresses frequency. Use 'walked a lot' to mean frequent walking in childhood. 'Alright' means 'ok' and does not fit the intended meaning.

× Uh, when I was in elementary school, I usually went to school on foot because in it only took 20 minutes and I enjoyed working while looking around the neighborhood.

✓ Uh, when I was in elementary school, I usually walked to school because it only took 20 minutes and I enjoyed looking around the neighborhood.

Use 'walked to school' or 'went to school on foot' (both acceptable); 'in it only took' is incorrect—use 'it only took 20 minutes'. 'Enjoyed working while looking' is wrong: 'enjoyed looking around' or 'enjoyed walking while looking around' is correct. Choose 'walked to school... enjoyed looking around the neighborhood.'

× I think people enjoy working at the park because it helps them relax and give gives some light exercise and I think walking outdoors can refresh your mood and relieve your stress which you got at school or work, especially if you look at greenery.

✓ I think people enjoy walking in the park because it helps them relax and gives some light exercise, and I think walking outdoors can refresh your mood and relieve the stress you get at school or work, especially if you see greenery.

Multiple errors: 'working at the park' should be 'walking in the park'; 'give gives' is duplicated and should be 'gives'; 'relieve your stress which you got' is awkward—use 'relieve the stress you get'; 'look at greenery' is better as 'see greenery'. Also connect clauses with commas and 'and' appropriately.

× If I have a chance, are you allowed to take a long walk along the seaside since I was burning the sun, which is a city famous for its beautiful beaches.

✓ If I had the chance, I would take a long walk along the seaside. I love the sun and I would go to a city famous for its beautiful beaches.

The conditional sentence is mixed up. For a hypothetical situation use the second conditional: 'If I had a chance, I would...' The original also contains nonsense 'are you allowed' and 'since I was burning the sun'. Break into clearer sentences: express desire and state 'I love the sun' and reference a city separately. This corrects conditional and tense use and clarifies meaning.

× I really love ocean.

✓ I really love the ocean.

'Ocean' generally takes the definite article 'the' when referring to the sea in general: 'I love the ocean.'

× I want to enjoy walking while listening to. Waves lapping on the beach and filling the salty breeze.

✓ I want to enjoy walking while listening to the waves lapping on the beach and feeling the salty breeze.

The original contains a sentence fragment 'listening to.' and incorrect verb 'filling the salty breeze.' Use 'listening to the waves' and 'feeling the salty breeze' to form a complete, grammatically correct sentence.

× Where did you go for a walk lately?

✓ Where have you gone for a walk lately?

The use of 'lately' with present perfect is more natural: 'Where have you gone for a walk lately?' However, 'Where did you go for a walk recently?' is also acceptable. This changes tense to match adverb of time.

× Let me think about it, recently I went for a walk in order to take my sister to her Academy.

✓ Let me think... Recently I went for a walk to take my sister to her academy.

'In order to' is wordy; 'to take' is more natural. 'Academy' need not be capitalized unless it's a proper name. Insert ellipsis or pause punctuation for spoken style. Tense 'went' is fine.

× About 20 minutes umm.

✓ It lasted about 20 minutes.

As a standalone answer, use a full clause: 'It lasted about 20 minutes.' This corrects sentence fragment and clarifies meaning.

× We chat a lot about our day and upcoming plans and that conversation left me feeling relaxed and refreshed.

✓ We chatted a lot about our day and upcoming plans, and that conversation left me feeling relaxed and refreshed.

Mixing present 'chat' with past 'left' is inconsistent. Use past tense 'chatted' to match 'left'. Add a comma before 'and' to separate clauses.