走路— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise, avoid repetition, and use clearer sentence structure. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Correct grammar (e.g., "that is why", "bones", "muscles loosen").

範例: Yes, I walk a lot because I work as a physiotherapist and I promote physical activity. For example, walking strengthens bones and muscles, and it also helps loosen tight muscles and maintain flexibility.

建議: Answer directly with a clear past tense sentence, avoid repetition, and add a specific detail or brief example using linking words. Fix tense errors and article use (e.g., "this kind of profession", "the park").

範例: Yes, I often went for walks as a child, and that influenced my career choice. For instance, I used to walk to the nearby park with my mother almost every afternoon.

建議: Organize your answer: start with a topic sentence, then give two clear reasons with linking words and specific examples. Reduce repetition and correct word choice ("work" → "walk", "refresh" → "refreshed").

範例: People enjoy walking in parks because the environment is pleasant and the exercise is accessible. For example, parks offer fresh air and safe paths, so both elderly people and young adults can walk there in the morning or evening to stay healthy and feel refreshed.

建議: Give a concise direct answer and one or two specific reasons using linking words. Avoid hesitation and repetitive phrases; use correct conditional and future forms ("I would prefer").

範例: If I had the chance, I would take a long walk in a park with a proper jogging track. For instance, in Dubai many parks have soft, red tracks that are comfortable to walk or jog on, which makes the experience relaxing.

建議: Use past or present simple clearly and avoid filler sounds. Give a direct topic sentence about routine, then add a specific detail about the route using linking words. Remove repeated hesitations and clarify "dead end" description.

範例: I walk every evening with my husband near our building. We usually walk along the two parallel roads that end in a dead end, which makes the route quiet and safe, especially when the weather is nice.

× Yes I work a lot as I am a physiotherapist and I promote exercise and exercise a lot and walking a lot.

✓ Yes, I work a lot as I am a physiotherapist and I promote exercise; I exercise and walk a lot.

The original sentence misuses 'walking' in a parallel structure and lacks commas; use base verbs 'exercise' and 'walk' to match 'promote' and 'work', and add punctuation for clarity. Use parallel verb forms when listing activities. Grammar problem type ID:10

× That why I prefer to walk because it strengthens our bone and muscles.

✓ That's why I prefer to walk because it strengthens our bones and muscles.

Use contraction 'That's' and plural nouns 'bones' and 'muscles' because humans have multiple bones and muscles. This fixes singular/plural agreement. Grammar problem type ID:1

× Tightened muscles are are loose and maintain our flexibility.

✓ When muscles tighten, they become stiff; keeping them relaxed helps maintain our flexibility.

Original sentence is ungrammatical and redundant ('are are') and uses contradictory words 'tightened' and 'loose'. Rephrase to state cause and effect clearly: tightened muscles become stiff, and relaxed muscles help flexibility. Grammar problem type ID:26

× Yes, since childhood I prefer to walk, that's why I choose the this kind of profession ahead also.

✓ Since childhood I have preferred to walk; that's why I chose this kind of profession later.

Use present perfect 'have preferred' to express a past-to-present state starting in childhood, and simple past 'chose' for a decision made later. Remove extra article 'the' before 'this'. Grammar problem type ID:6

× And in childhood also love to walk and I usually go to the park for walking with my mother.

✓ As a child I also loved to walk, and I usually went to the park to walk with my mother.

Maintain consistent past tense when talking about childhood. Add subject 'I' before 'loved' and use 'went' for past habitual action. Use 'to walk' rather than 'for walking'. Grammar problem type ID:26

× People like to work in parks because it's a good type of exercise even for very good exercise for the elderly people, elderly people because they need it the most and the young people also many people walk in the children, adults and older adults go for the walk in the evening or in the morning in the park and it's very good for the health also it's. Many benefits and it's it keeps you fresh, refresh and keeps you healthy as well.

✓ People like to walk in parks because it's good exercise, especially for elderly people who need it most. Young people, children, adults and older adults often walk in parks in the morning or evening. Walking has many health benefits: it refreshes you and helps keep you healthy.

Use 'walk' not 'work'. Remove repetition and awkward phrases. Break into sentences for clarity. Use correct noun order and articles. 'Refresh' should be 'refreshes you' to fit subject-verb agreement and intended meaning. Grammar problem type ID:26

× If I had a chance to for A to go for a long walk, I will prefer a park with a good jogging track.

✓ If I had the chance to go for a long walk, I would prefer a park with a good jogging track.

This is a second conditional; use 'would' in the result clause after 'if I had'. Remove extraneous words 'to for A'. Grammar problem type ID:7

× Now in like I'm in Dubai and there is a park in all parks.

✓ Now I live in Dubai, and there are many parks here.

Original is ungrammatical and unclear. Use 'I live' and 'there are many parks' to convey meaning correctly. Grammar problem type ID:26

× They have a the proper jogging track and the floor of that jogging track is very soft for The Walking and it's painted red and walking on that's is very, very comfy and like jogging.

✓ They have proper jogging tracks with soft surfaces suitable for walking; the tracks are painted red, and walking or jogging on them feels very comfortable.

Remove extra articles, standardize plural 'tracks' if plural context, use 'surface' instead of 'floor', and replace 'comfy' with 'comfortable' and correct verb forms 'feels'. Grammar problem type ID:13

× Direct tech is also very comfy and while jogging it's it feel very relaxing.

✓ The jogging track is also very comfortable, and while jogging it feels very relaxing.

Use correct article 'the' before 'jogging track', correct noun 'track' instead of 'tech', and fix subject-verb agreement: 'it feels'. Remove extra 'it'. Grammar problem type ID:22

× I go for a walk daily in the evening with my husband.

✓ I go for a walk daily in the evening with my husband.

Sentence is acceptable in present simple for habitual action; no grammatical change needed. (No change applied) Grammar problem type ID:6

× Uh, that is the area near our building. The, there are two roads, Uh, uh, uh, blind. There's a blind end of the two roads. That's why they, uh, I love to walk there every evening and when the, uh, even, uh, when the weather is very beautiful.

✓ That is the area near our building. There are two roads that end in a blind end, so I love to walk there every evening, especially when the weather is beautiful.

Remove fillers and disfluencies, clarify 'blind end' (dead end), and combine clauses for fluency. Use 'especially' to indicate preference during good weather. Grammar problem type ID:26