走路— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Good direct response and natural tone. To improve, make the answer more concise and correct small grammar issues (e.g., “one-day hike” not “one day hike”), add a linking phrase to connect ideas, and avoid unnecessary detail that may sound exaggerated without context. Keep to 2–4 sentences.

範例: Yes, I walk quite often because I really enjoy it. For example, I try to do a one-day hike most weekends, and my longest was 42 kilometres, which felt like a real challenge.

建議: Strong, specific content and clear reason. Improve tense consistency (use past simple: “I spent”) and tighten phrasing. Use a linking phrase to make it flow and avoid round numbers unless certain.

範例: Yes, I spent most of my childhood outdoors because we didn't have phones or computers, so we often went out to play games with friends.

建議: Good structure with reasons, but watch small errors (e.g., “a few benefits” or “there are several benefits”; “accessible form” needs article and spelling). Vary vocabulary and use linking words (Firstly, secondly, moreover) more naturally. Make details more specific (how nature helps) and avoid repetitive phrasing.

範例: There are several benefits to walking in parks. Firstly, it is an accessible form of exercise that requires no special equipment. Secondly, the sounds of birds and fresh air can calm the nervous system and reduce stress. Also, it’s a pleasant way to spend time with friends or family.

建議: Clear idea and relevant example. Improve fluency by removing filler (“I think”), correct hyphenation (“multi-day”), and add a brief reason why that route appeals. Keep to 2–3 sentences.

範例: I would like to walk the Camino de Santiago because it’s famous for its scenery and cultural sites. Although it’s a multi-day hike, I’d still consider it a long walk and I’d enjoy the chance to experience the route and meet other pilgrims.

建議: Content is specific, which is good, but there are several grammar and word-choice errors (use past simple: “I did”; article before name: “the Southwest Coast Path”; drop “work” if you meant ‘walk’; say “picturesque” without ‘a’ and fix structure). Also avoid redundancy and keep sentences concise. Provide one or two vivid details to support your comment.

範例: Recently I walked the Southwest Coast Path in the UK, which is managed by the National Trust. It was very picturesque, with dramatic cliffs and quiet coves, and the route was well maintained, so it was a truly enjoyable day.

× Yes, I think I do walk quite a lot as I really enjoy it.

✓ Yes, I think I do walk quite a lot because I really enjoy it.

Use 'because' instead of 'as' to avoid ambiguity: 'as' can imply simultaneous action or cause; 'because' clearly indicates reason, which fits spoken clarity. (Category 6)

× I try to schedule at least one day hike on the weekend and my personal record so far was 42 kilometres a day.

✓ I try to schedule at least one-day hikes on the weekend, and my personal record so far is 42 kilometres in a day.

Use plural 'hikes' after 'one-day' if referring to a habitual action. Hyphenate 'one-day' as a compound adjective. Use present perfect/simple present 'is' for an ongoing personal record rather than past 'was'. Also use 'in a day' for clarity. (Category 1)

× Did you often go outside to have a walk when you were a child?

✓ Did you often go outside for a walk when you were a child?

Change 'to have a walk' to the natural idiom 'for a walk'. The question uses simple past auxiliary 'Did', which is correct for past habits; only the prepositional phrase needed correction. (Category 5 and 11 - primary is past tense usage retained, but corrected preposition.)

× Yes, I have spent around 80% of my childhood outdoors because we didn't have phones or computers as kids, so we had to go out and play games with each other.

✓ Yes, I spent around 80% of my childhood outdoors because we didn't have phones or computers, so we had to go out and play games together.

Use simple past 'spent' when referring to a completed period (childhood). 'Have spent' is awkward here. Also 'with each other' is wordy; 'together' is more natural. (Category 6/5 — primary: Present tense issue corrected to past.)

× There are few benefits of walking in parks.

✓ There are a few benefits to walking in parks.

Use 'a few' to indicate some benefits (not 'few' which implies almost none). Use 'to' (benefits to doing something) or 'of' can be used but 'benefits to walking' is more natural. (Category 22)

× For example, it's easily accessible form of exercise which can be done everywhere.

✓ For example, it's an easily accessible form of exercise that can be done almost anywhere.

Add article 'an' before 'easily accessible form'. Use 'that' for defining relative clauses. 'Almost anywhere' sounds more natural than 'everywhere'. (Category 11)

× Secondly, sounds of nature and fresh air can help us regulate nervous systems and relieve stress.

✓ Secondly, the sounds of nature and fresh air can help us regulate our nervous systems and relieve stress.

Include definite article 'the' before 'sounds of nature'. Add possessive 'our' before 'nervous systems' to indicate whose systems are being regulated. (Category 17/12)

× And it's actually a good pastime with friends or family.

✓ It's also a good pastime with friends or family.

Beginning with 'And' is informal; 'also' is more appropriate for concise spoken/written responses. Sentence otherwise fine. (Category 26)

× I think I would like to take Camino de Santiago one day because it is one of the most famous and beautiful walks.

✓ I think I would like to walk the Camino de Santiago one day because it is one of the most famous and most beautiful routes.

Include definite article 'the' before 'Camino de Santiago' in English. 'Walk the Camino' is idiomatic. 'Walks' can be replaced with 'routes' for clarity, and repeating 'most' before 'beautiful' is optional but natural. (Category 17)

× It's actually a multi day hike but I think it still counts as a walk.

✓ It's actually a multi-day hike, but I think it still counts as a walk.

Hyphenate 'multi-day' as a compound adjective. Add a comma before 'but'. The rest is correct. (Category 8)

× One of the latest memorable work walks I have done was Southwest Coastal Path which is a part of a National Trust of the United Kingdom.

✓ One of the most recent memorable walks I have done was the South West Coast Path, which is part of the National Trust in the United Kingdom.

Use 'most recent' or 'latest' plus 'most' for clarity. Remove unclear word 'work'. Use definite article 'the' before the path name and correct name 'South West Coast Path'. 'Part of the National Trust' (no 'a'). Use commas around the clause. (Category 9/17/22)

× It is a very picturesque and there are a lot of places you can visit along the path.

✓ It is very picturesque, and there are a lot of places you can visit along the path.

Remove unnecessary article 'a' before 'very picturesque' because 'picturesque' is an adjective that doesn't take 'a' here. Add comma before 'and'. (Category 26)

× It is also a very well maintained hike so it will truly enjoyable.

✓ It is also a very well-maintained hike, so it is truly enjoyable.

Hyphenate 'well-maintained' as a compound adjective. Insert 'is' before 'truly enjoyable' to complete the clause. Add comma before 'so'. (Category 13)