走路— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is clear and relevant with good detail about frequency and routine. To improve, make it more concise and natural: use contractions, vary vocabulary (e.g., "short walks" instead of "short duration of walks"), and add a brief linking phrase to connect ideas. Keep within 2–4 sentences.

範例: Yes, I walk most days for about 30 to 60 minutes in total. I usually split that into several short walks throughout the day because that fits my schedule and helps me stay active.

建議: Good attempt to explain cultural reasons, but watch grammar (verb tense and number), redundancy and clarity. Start with a direct topic sentence, use past tense consistently, and give one specific supporting detail or short example. Avoid over-generalization; phrase cultural context carefully.

範例: Not really. When I was a child I spent most of my time studying at my desk, because my family and school placed a strong emphasis on academics. As a result, I rarely went out for walks.

建議: Your answer gives two clear reasons but has minor grammar errors and a misused word at the end. Use correct verb agreement ("create"), replace incorrect word "trust" with "comfort" or "tranquility", and use a linking phrase to connect points smoothly.

範例: People enjoy walking in parks because paved paths make it easy and comfortable to stroll. In addition, the trees and greenery create a peaceful atmosphere and fresh air, which helps people relax and unwind.

建議: Good idea and personal feeling, but reduce hesitations, fix word choice and sentence ending. Replace fillers like "umm", correct phrasing ("clear my mind"), and combine clauses with linking words. Keep it to two sentences with a reason and brief effect.

範例: If I could, I'd take a long walk along the coastline because watching the waves is very calming. Walking by the sea helps me clear my mind and relax.

建議: Answer is relevant but contains grammar issues and repetition. Use past simple or present perfect correctly ("I went for a walk" or "I've been walking"), avoid repeating words like "just", and provide one specific detail (e.g., a nearby park name or what you enjoy about it).

範例: Recently I went for a walk around my neighborhood because there are several trees and green areas nearby. I often stroll there to relax and unwind.

× Yes, I usually walk for about 30 minutes to one hour daily.

✓ Yes, I usually walk for about 30 minutes to one hour every day.

Using 'daily' is not incorrect but 'every day' is more natural in spoken English; this is a present tense/frequency expression issue (Type 6). Suggestion: use 'every day' to sound more natural in conversation.

× Actually I don't do it all at once.

✓ Actually I don't do it all at once.

No grammar error matching the provided types; sentence is correct as is. Included for completeness (Type 8 not applied).

× I split the time into short duration of walks throughout the day which fits my schedule better and helps me stay active.

✓ I split the time into short walks throughout the day which fit my schedule better and help me stay active.

Subject-verb agreement and nominal phrase formation: 'short duration of walks' is awkward; use 'short walks'. 'Which' refers to the plural 'short walks', so verbs should be plural: 'fit' and 'help' (Type 10 and 27). Suggestion: use correct noun phrase and match verb number to the plural subject.

× Well, not really because when I was a child I usually sit in front of the desk for reading or study because in Asian society we usually focus on our school work, so we spend a long period of time just sitting in front of the desk.

✓ Well, not really, because when I was a child I usually sat at my desk to read or study. In Asian societies we usually focused on our schoolwork, so we spent long periods of time just sitting at the desk.

Mix of tenses: the sentence describes habitual past actions so past tense 'sat', 'read', 'study' should be 'read'/'study' -> 'read' is same form but clearer as 'to read or study'; also pronoun and article corrections: 'sit in front of the desk' -> 'sat at my desk'. Plural 'Asian societies' and 'schoolwork' as one word. Agreement of tense throughout (Type 5 and 27). Suggestion: keep past tense consistently when describing childhood habits.

× People like to walk in parks because the paved paths are comfortable for walking and it's easy to stroll there.

✓ People like to walk in parks because the paved paths are comfortable to walk on and it's easy to stroll there.

Preposition choice: 'comfortable for walking' is acceptable but more natural is 'comfortable to walk on' when referring to paths (Type 11). Suggestion: use 'comfortable to walk on' for physical surfaces.

× Additionally, the trees and lush greenery creates a peaceful atmosphere and fresh air so people can relax in the trust.

✓ Additionally, the trees and lush greenery create a peaceful atmosphere and provide fresh air, so people can relax in the trust.

Subject-verb agreement: 'trees and lush greenery' is plural, so verb should be 'create' not 'creates' (Type 13 and 27). Also 'provide fresh air' is clearer than just 'fresh air'. Note: 'relax in the trust' seems semantically wrong but doesn't match listed types; 'trust' likely intended 'truss' or 'tranquility' — no correction applied beyond grammar types. Suggestion: match plural subject with plural verb and use 'provide' for clarity.

× Personally, if I had the chance, I'd like to take a long walk along the coastline because I enjoy umm, watching the sea, watching the waves come and go is very calming and walking there helps me to declare to my mind and.

✓ Personally, if I had the chance, I'd like to take a long walk along the coastline because I enjoy watching the sea; watching the waves come and go is very calming, and walking there helps me clear my mind.

Issues: unnecessary filler 'umm' removed for clarity. 'Helps me to declare to my mind and' is ungrammatical; likely intended 'helps me clear my mind' — this is a verb phrase correction and preposition/word choice (Type 11 and 26). Suggestion: use clear verbs like 'clear' and proper punctuation to separate ideas.

× Recently I got for a walk just around my place, well because there are some trees and some greeneries surrounded by place.

✓ Recently I went for a walk just around my place, because there are some trees and greenery surrounding the area.

Verb 'got for a walk' is incorrect; use past tense 'went for a walk' (Type 5). 'Greeneries' is uncountable, use 'greenery'. Preposition and word order: 'surrounding the area' is natural (Type 11). Suggestion: use 'went for a walk' and 'greenery' for natural phrasing.

× So I usually just walk around here and just relax and unwind.

✓ So I usually just walk around here and relax and unwind.

Redundant use of 'just' twice is stylistic; present simple 'usually walk' matches habitual present (Type 6). Remove duplicate 'just' for conciseness. Suggestion: avoid unnecessary repetition for clearer speech.