走路— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Make the response more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, fix grammar (e.g. "it's more convenient"), avoid repetition, and add one specific detail using a linking word (e.g. "However, on weekends I walk for 30–40 minutes to stay fit"). Keep it under five sentences.

範例: No, I don't walk much during the week because I have a hectic schedule and usually use my car since it's more convenient and faster. However, on weekends I try to walk for about 30 minutes in the park to keep fit and clear my mind.

建議: Use correct tense and subject-verb agreement, and be specific. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give brief supporting reasons using linking words (e.g. "because" and "also"). Avoid extra words and keep sentences grammatical.

範例: No, I rarely walked around as a child because my neighborhood felt unsafe for unsupervised children, and my parents were often too busy to take me outside.

建議: Be more fluent and precise: avoid hesitations and filler words, use correct grammar and linking expressions (e.g. "for example", "such as"). Provide two specific reasons and examples in up to five sentences.

範例: People like walking in parks because parks are peaceful and offer fresh air. For example, many people exercise there, such as jogging or doing yoga, and others spend quality time with family or have picnics.

建議: Remove hesitations and be specific about details. Start with the main idea, then add two concrete reasons using linking words (e.g. "because" and "and"). Keep it to three sentences max and finish the thought.

範例: If I had the chance, I'd take a long walk along a sandy beach because I could enjoy the breathtaking sea views and the fresh, salty air. I would also find the sound of the waves very relaxing and good for clearing my mind.

建議: Be concise, correct grammar, and give a specific time frame and purpose. Use linking words (e.g. "so" or "while") correctly and avoid fillers. Say how often or how long to enrich the answer.

範例: I walked to the supermarket last month; it's about a 15-minute walk from my house. I combined grocery shopping with exercise, which helps me stay active.

× To be honest, no.

✓ To be honest, no, I don't.

The original short answer lacks a verb and does not match conversational English patterns. This is a sentence without a verb or incomplete response (fits 'Present tense issue' because the speaker is talking about a general habit). Use a complete negative present-tense clause like 'I don't' to express a habitual action.

× It is because I have a hectic schedule so I tend to use my private car because it more convenient and faster.

✓ It is because I have a hectic schedule, so I tend to use my private car because it is more convenient and faster.

Missing verb 'is' before 'more convenient' is required to complete the adjective complement. This is an issue with the present participle/present linking verb: the sentence needs the present form of 'to be' to link the subject to the adjective. Add 'it is' and punctuation for clarity.

× However, on the weekend I try to walk a lot because it can help me to stay in shape.

✓ However, on the weekend I try to walk a lot because it helps me stay in shape.

Use simple present 'helps' for habitual or general truth instead of modal 'can help' which weakens the statement. Also, omit 'to' after 'help' when followed by the base verb in this structure: 'help me stay.'

× When I was a child, I rarely go around because in my neighborhood it is unsafe for children to walk around without supervise their parents and at the time my parents has a busy schedule.

✓ When I was a child, I rarely went out because in my neighborhood it was unsafe for children to walk around without their parents supervising them, and at that time my parents had a busy schedule.

Multiple past-tense errors: 'rarely go' should be past 'rarely went'; 'it is' should be 'it was' to match past context; 'supervise their parents' is incorrect word order and pronoun use — use 'their parents supervising them' or 'being supervised by their parents'; 'my parents has' should be 'my parents had' for plural subject past tense. Also add 'at that time' for clarity.

× I think this is because park is a tranquil place.

✓ I think this is because the park is a tranquil place.

The noun 'park' needs the definite article 'the' when referring to parks in general context or a specific type/place. Using 'the park' is correct here.

× They can, uh, sitting or do activities in this place, for example, uh, they can exercise and also spending time with their family while, uh, with their chi chi.

✓ They can sit or do activities in this place; for example, they can exercise and also spend time with their family while with their children.

Mixed verb forms: use base form after 'can' ('sit' not 'sitting'). After 'can' use base verbs consistently: 'exercise' and 'spend' (not 'spending'). 'Chi chi' appears to be wrong word choice; replace with 'children.' Also improve punctuation for clarity.

× If I had a chance, I would like to walk in a long uh, beach because umm, I can see the breathtaking view, enjoy the, uh, fresh air.

✓ If I had the chance, I would like to walk on a long beach because I could see the breathtaking view and enjoy the fresh air.

Use 'the chance' or 'a chance' — 'the chance' is more natural with conditional 'if I had the chance.' Preposition with 'beach' is 'on a beach' for walking along it, and 'a long beach' needs an article. Change modal 'can' to conditional 'could' to match the hypothetical 'If I had...'. Also remove extra commas and filler words.

× I can also, umm, I can also.

✓ I can also relax there and take photos.

The original is repetitive and incomplete. Provide a complete clause to finish the thought. This fixes sentence structure by supplying an object and verbs that make sense in context.

× I went to the supermarket, uh, last month, uh, it is uh, close to my house, around 15 minutes.

✓ I went to the supermarket last month; it is close to my house, about 15 minutes away.

The past action 'I went' is correct, but punctuation and wording are awkward. 'It is close' is acceptable in present tense when describing current proximity, but add 'away' for clarity and use 'about' for approximation. Use a semicolon or separate sentences to avoid a run-on.

× So I go there for buy groceries while exercise.

✓ So I went there to buy groceries while exercising.

Use 'to buy' (infinitive) not 'for buy.' Tense should match past: 'went.' Use the gerund 'exercising' after 'while' to show simultaneous action. This corrects preposition/verb form errors and aligns tense.

× Uh, it's good for me to stay active.

✓ It's good for me to stay active.

Remove filler 'Uh' in spoken transcript when producing a corrected written sentence. The sentence is otherwise acceptable present tense. Keep concise for clarity.