阅读— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答は肯定しているが、文法や語順が不自然で意味が曖昧です。まずは簡潔な主題文を言い、その後に具体的な理由を1〜2つの短い文で付け加えてください。接続詞（because, so, because of this, for example）を使って論理をはっきりさせ、同じ語（special）を繰り返さないように注意しましょう。発音や流暢さも改善するとより自然に聞こえます。

範例: Yes, I do. I enjoy reading because it helps me relax and immerse myself in a different world. For example, reading fiction creates a calm atmosphere that lets me forget daily stress.

建議: 意図は伝わるが、多くの語彙と文法の誤り（“paper a paper diesel devices”, “forget on my house”）があるため不明瞭です。選択をはっきり述べ、その理由を2つ程度、簡潔で正しい英文で説明してください。語彙（device, carry, leave at home）を正しく使い、接続詞（because, so）で理由をつなぎましょう。

範例: I prefer reading on a screen because e-books are portable and I can carry them on my phone or tablet. Also, digital books are easier to organize, so I rarely leave them at home.

建議: 核心は『公式な書類は注意深く読む』という点ですが、文が断片的で不完全です。まず質問に直接答え（When: official/important documents; When not: casual texts/emails）、次に短い理由を示してください。語彙（official documents, application forms, casual messages）を使い、接続詞（when, because, whereas）で対比を作ると良いです。

範例: I need to read carefully when I deal with official documents, such as government forms or legal papers, because small mistakes can cause problems. In contrast, I don’t read carefully when browsing social media or casual messages.

建議: 意見はスキャニングを好むということのようですが、表現が断片的で意味不明な語（“delta”, “equals graph”）があります。まず明確に好みを述べ、理由を2つほど具体的に述べてください。対比や例（e.g., when searching for facts vs when studying）を入れると説得力が増します。短く簡潔に話す練習をしましょう。

範例: I usually prefer scanning because it lets me find specific information quickly, especially when I’m answering questions or checking facts. However, for studying or understanding complex ideas, I use detailed reading.

× Yes, of course reading something provides me something special feeling for me and make me come as reading books special environment is such a.

✓ Yes, of course. Reading something gives me a special feeling and makes me want to be in the special environment that reading books creates.

The original sentence has multiple structure problems: missing articles, incorrect verb forms, and awkward clause order. Use 'gives' (present simple) for habitual feeling and 'makes' for causing desire (subject-verb agreement). Add the article 'a' before 'special feeling' and reorder the clause to 'makes me want to be in the special environment that reading books creates' for clarity. Improve by breaking into two clauses and using clear relative clause. Grammar problem type's ID:26

× Definitely on screen because I can bring paper a paper diesel devices anywhere and if I work out.

✓ Definitely on a screen because I can take my electronic device anywhere, even when I work out.

The original has wrong word order and word choice: 'bring paper a paper diesel devices' is incorrect. Use 'take my electronic device' or 'my device' and include the article 'a' before 'screen'. 'Even when I work out' expresses concession. Improve by using correct noun phrase and logical connector. Grammar problem type's ID:13

× There is no risk to forget on my house.

✓ There is no risk of forgetting it at my house.

Use 'risk of' followed by gerund ('forgetting') and preposition 'at' for location. The original 'forget on my house' is incorrect preposition and verb form. Use pronoun 'it' to refer to the device/book. Grammar problem type's ID:11

× Especially, and when we read the, uh, more official documents like the application documents to the police or government and besides.

✓ Especially when we read more official documents, such as application forms for the police or government, we need to read carefully.

The original is fragmented and contains filler words and misplaced conjunctions. Remove 'and besides' and 'uh', place 'especially' correctly at the start, and complete the main clause 'we need to read carefully' to answer the question. Use 'such as' for examples and 'application forms' as the correct noun phrase. Grammar problem type's ID:26

× Scanning for reading is superior than the delta.

✓ Scanning is better than detailed reading.

Use 'better than' for comparisons, not 'superior than'. Also 'detailed reading' is the standard term, not 'the delta'. Simplify to 'Scanning is better than detailed reading.' Grammar problem type's ID:25

× Reading equals graph.

✓ Detailed reading is more thorough and focuses on understanding the full content, not on a quick scan.

'Reading equals graph' is meaningless and ungrammatical. Replace with a clear explanation contrasting detailed reading and scanning. Keep tense appropriate (present simple) and clarify purpose. Grammar problem type's ID:26

× The point of document is paramount.

✓ The purpose of the document is paramount.

Use 'purpose' instead of 'point' for clarity and add the article 'the' before 'document' is acceptable but better 'the document' with 'purpose'. The original lacked clarity; correct noun choice improves meaning. Grammar problem type's ID:26

× Besides there are the need to answer quickly to others is very important, very.

✓ Also, the need to answer others quickly is very important.

The original has redundant words and incorrect word order: 'there are the need' is ungrammatical. Use 'the need to answer others quickly' and end with 'is very important.' Remove extra 'very'. Grammar problem type's ID:26