爱好— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be concise and correct tense; start with a clear topic sentence, then give 1–2 specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and filler sounds (uh). Also correct grammar (e.g. 'when I'm free', 'all genres', 'humanity').

範例: I enjoy playing the guitar in my free time because it helps me relax. For example, after a busy day I will play acoustic songs for about 30 minutes to unwind. In addition, learning different genres, such as folk and blues, keeps it interesting and improves my technique.

建議: Use correct tense and clearer structure: state the hobby plainly, give a reason and a specific detail. Avoid informal fillers ('you know') and correct vocabulary ('patience' not 'patient'). Keep within 3–4 sentences.

範例: When I was a child I enjoyed reading a lot. I read mainly adventure and fantasy books, often spending hours each afternoon with a new story. I think I read more then because I had more free time and fewer responsibilities.

建議: Answer directly and clearly. Use correct grammar ('I haven't kept a hobby for many years') and give a brief explanation with one specific example. Avoid vague or awkward phrases like 'playing the mobile phone'.

範例: No, I haven't kept the same hobby since childhood because my interests have changed as I grew up. For instance, I used to read a lot, but now I spend more time playing casual games on my phone rather than following a single long-term hobby.

建議: Be specific and grammatically accurate. Start with a clear topic sentence, then explain with concrete details and linking words. Avoid repetition and incorrect word choices ('network', 'patience')—use 'busy' or 'long shifts' instead.

範例: No, my family members don't share my hobbies because they are doctors and work long shifts. As a result, they have little free time; for example, my parents often work mornings and evenings, so they rarely pursue regular hobbies.

× Yes, I like playing guitar when I was free, I think it really helped me to unwind myself pretty well.

✓ Yes, I like playing the guitar when I'm free; I think it really helps me to unwind.

The original mixes past and present incorrectly and misuses verb forms. 'like playing' is present habit so time clause should be 'when I'm free' (present). 'helped' should be present 'helps' to match habitual action. Use 'the guitar' as a collocation. Remove reflexive 'myself' because 'unwind' does not require it. Suggestion: keep consistent present tense for habits and use appropriate articles and verb forms.

× And the music is the universal language of the mankind, so you can play all kinds of all genre of the music whenever you, uh, master a kind of instrument.

✓ And music is the universal language of mankind, so you can play all kinds and genres of music whenever you master an instrument.

'the music' and 'the mankind' incorrectly use the definite article; general nouns should be without 'the'. 'all kinds of all genre of the music' is redundant and ungrammatical; use 'all kinds and genres of music'. 'a kind of instrument' is awkward; 'an instrument' is natural. Also remove filler 'uh'. Suggestion: omit unnecessary 'the' for general statements and simplify noun phrases.

× So I think playing guitar really works for me.

✓ So I think playing the guitar really works for me.

Use 'the guitar' as the general reference to the instrument. 'Works for me' is acceptable present tense. Suggestion: include the definite article with musical instruments when speaking generally.

× I think reading was the hobby I used to have when I was a little younger because, you know, I lose the patient as I grow older.

✓ I think reading was the hobby I used to have when I was a little younger because, you know, I lose patience as I grow older.

'lose the patient' is incorrect; the noun should be 'patience' without 'the'. Use 'lose patience' to express decreasing tolerance. Tenses 'was the hobby I used to have when I was a little younger' are acceptable together. Suggestion: use uncountable noun 'patience' and avoid 'the' before it.

× As a I, as a child, I really devote plenty of time to reading because I have no other things to do and I have so much free time when I was younger.

✓ As a child, I really devoted plenty of time to reading because I had nothing else to do and I had so much free time when I was younger.

The sentence mixes present 'devote'/'have' with past-time markers 'as a child' and 'when I was younger'. Use past tense 'devoted' and 'had' to match the time frame. 'no other things to do' is better as 'nothing else to do'. Suggestion: maintain consistent past tense for past habits and use natural expressions like 'nothing else'.

× No, actually I think because my personality really changed a lot between the when I was younger to when I was at this age.

✓ No, actually I think my personality has really changed a lot from when I was younger to now.

Original uses awkward 'between the when' and mixes tenses. Use present perfect 'has really changed' to describe change up to the present. 'from when I was younger to now' is a concise way to indicate the span. Suggestion: avoid redundant words and use correct tense for changes over time.

× So I think I haven't keep a hobby for so much year.

✓ So I think I haven't kept a hobby for so many years.

'haven't keep' is incorrect verb form; use past participle 'kept' after 'have'. 'so much year' is ungrammatical; use 'so many years' for countable plural. Suggestion: use present perfect 'haven't kept' to show continuation and 'many years' for plural duration.

× If you have to say one, there must be playing the mobile phone probably.

✓ If I had to pick one, it would probably be using my mobile phone.

Original sentence misuses 'have to say one' and 'playing the mobile phone'. Use 'had to pick one' or 'If I had to say one' and 'using my mobile phone' or 'playing on my phone'. 'There must be' is awkward here; 'it would probably be' is natural. Suggestion: rephrase to a conditional and use 'using' for activities with phones.

× No, my family member is always occupied with network because they are a doctor, so they don't have so much free time to cultivate a hobby.

✓ No, my family members are always busy with work because they are doctors, so they don't have much free time to cultivate a hobby.

'my family member is' should be plural 'family members are' if referring to multiple people. 'occupied with network' is unclear; 'busy with work' is appropriate for doctors. 'they are a doctor' mismatches number; use 'doctors'. 'so much free time' is better as 'much free time'. Suggestion: ensure subject and verb/plural forms agree and use clear nouns for occupations.

× They tend to have the, uh, morning and morning and afternoon time occupied and evening time on duty because they have so much patience to deal with.

✓ They tend to have their mornings and afternoons occupied and be on duty in the evenings because they have a lot of patients to deal with.

Original repeats 'morning' twice and misuses 'time' and 'patience'. Use possessive 'their mornings and afternoons' and 'be on duty in the evenings'. 'so much patience' is wrong meaning; intended word is 'patients' (people), not 'patience' (tolerance). Suggestion: correct repetition, use plural 'patients', and arrange time expressions naturally.