爱好— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Make your answer more natural and coherent: start with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar (use gerunds and proper tense), avoid irrelevant child references, and limit to max 4–5 sentences. Add a linking word when giving details and a specific example of what you practice. For instance, say how long you have played each instrument, why you practice daily, and one specific piece or technique you work on.

範例: Yes — I have several musical hobbies, mainly playing the piano and the guitar. I have played the piano since childhood and now practice guitar for about three hours a day to improve my fingerpicking technique. Because I find the guitar challenging, I focus on short, focused practice sessions and learning one song at a time. This routine helps me progress steadily.

建議: Give a direct, grammatically correct answer with one or two specific supporting details. Avoid unclear phrases like “mother's role” and comparisons that lack clarity. Use linking words (for example, 'however' or 'and') to connect ideas. Mention an example or memory to make it more vivid.

範例: Yes, I did. As a child I often played both the piano and the guitar. However, my mother was better at the guitar, so she taught me a few songs and we often played together on weekends.

建議: Respond with a clear topic sentence, correct tense usage, and a brief explanation of how your feelings changed over time. Use linking words (for example, 'although' or 'but') and provide a specific detail about what you enjoy now or how it relaxes you.

範例: Yes — I have played the piano for seven years. Although it was difficult to learn at first, I now enjoy practicing because it helps me relax after a busy day and improves my concentration. For example, I like playing Chopin nocturnes when I want to unwind.

建議: Make the answer clearer and correct grammar. Use a topic sentence, then add a specific example of how you share the hobby, and replace unclear phrases like 'trial' and 'play them.' Keep it concise and use linking words (e.g., 'we often' or 'for example').

範例: Yes, we share the same interest in piano — both my parents and I play. For example, we often practice together on Sunday afternoons and sometimes perform duets at family gatherings, which is a fun way to spend time together.

× I have many hobbies such as play the piano and play the guitar when I was a child.

✓ I have many hobbies such as playing the piano and playing the guitar. I played them when I was a child.

After expressions like 'such as' use the -ing form (gerund) for verbs. Also the clause 'when I was a child' refers to past time, so use past tense 'played' not 'play'. Suggestion: use parallel gerunds for the list and a separate past-tense sentence for the childhood time.

× I play the guitar every day for about 3 hours.

✓ I play the guitar every day for about three hours.

The present simple 'I play' is correct for a habitual action, but write numbers under ten as words in formal speech 'three hours'. No tense change needed. Keep duration with 'for'.

× It is difficult for me to learn it.

✓ It was difficult for me to learn.

Context refers to learning as a past process (earlier sentences mention childhood), so past tense 'was' fits. Also 'learn it' is awkward; 'learn' without object or 'learn to play it' is better. Suggestion: say 'It was difficult for me to learn to play.'

× When I was a child, I usually played piano and played the guitar, but my mother's role played the guitar is better than play the piano.

✓ When I was a child, I usually played the piano and the guitar, but my mother's guitar playing was better than her piano playing.

Use past tense 'played' for childhood habits (already used). 'Played piano' should include the article 'the piano' in this context. The original comparative phrase is ungrammatical; rephrase using noun forms 'guitar playing' and 'piano playing' and match past tense 'was'. Use possessive 'her' for clarity.

× I have played the piano for seven years.

✓ I have played the piano for seven years.

This sentence is grammatically correct as present perfect to describe a duration up to now. No change needed. Ensure consistency: if referring to difficulty in childhood, separate that idea in past tense in another clause.

× It is difficult for me to learn it when I was a child, but now I think it is very interesting and it made me relaxed.

✓ It was difficult for me to learn when I was a child, but now I think it is very interesting and it makes me feel relaxed.

Mixing present and past tenses caused confusion. Use past tense 'was' for childhood difficulty. For current feelings use present 'think' and 'makes me feel relaxed'. 'Made me relaxed' is awkward; use 'makes me feel relaxed' for present effect.

× My parents and I both can play the piano.

✓ My parents and I can both play the piano.

Placement of 'both' is more natural after the auxiliary 'can' or after the subject. Move 'both' to 'can both play' to improve word order.

× When there was a trial they usually played piano too and we spent many time to play them.

✓ When there was a rehearsal, they usually played the piano too, and we spent a lot of time playing together.

'Trial' is likely a mistranslation; 'rehearsal' fits. 'Played piano' should include 'the piano'. 'Many time' is ungrammatical; use 'a lot of time'. Use 'playing together' (gerund) instead of 'to play them'. Also clarify who 'they' and 'we' refer to. Use commas to separate clauses.