爱好— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be clear and concise: start with a direct topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct grammar (tenses, articles, prepositions) and avoid repetition. For example, say you are currently too busy, mention which hobby you plan to take up, and give a simple timing detail.

範例: I don't have any hobbies at the moment because I'm very busy with study and work. However, I plan to take drawing classes in the near future; they will probably be evening classes once or twice a week, so I hope to learn for a few hours each week.

建議: Answer directly with past tense and one clear detail. Use linking words (but, however) and avoid long, unclear time phrases. Mention what you did, for how long, and whether you liked it.

範例: I didn't have a regular hobby as a child, but my parents enrolled me in art classes for short periods. I attended those classes for two to four weeks at a time, and I enjoyed drawing pictures for my family.

建議: Be concise and avoid hesitation. Use present perfect to talk about a hobby continuing since childhood, or past simple if not. Clearly state whether you have a continuous hobby and provide specific timeframe if relevant.

範例: No, I don't have a hobby that I've continued since childhood. I did try short courses in drawing when I was young, usually lasting one or two weeks, but I never kept a hobby consistently.

建議: Answer directly, then compare briefly using linking words (for example, whereas, while). Be specific about family members' hobbies and your own, and correct grammar (plural/singular, articles).

範例: No, my hobbies are different from my family's. While several members enjoy reading novels at home, others go to the gym; I usually prefer exercising at the gym when I have free time rather than reading.

× Actually, I don't have any hobbies there nowadays because I am always busy with my study and work.

✓ Actually, I don't have any hobbies nowadays because I am always busy with my studies and work.

Use of 'there' is unnecessary and incorrect here (preposition error) and 'study' should be plural 'studies' to refer to general academic work. Suggest removing 'there' and use 'studies'. Grammar problem type ID: 6

× Therefore I don't have any time for the hobbies.

✓ Therefore, I don't have any time for hobbies.

The definite article 'the' before 'hobbies' is incorrect because we speak generally about hobbies; drop 'the'. Also add a comma after 'Therefore'. Grammar problem type ID: 22

× But in the future I want to be entered to classes.

✓ But in the future I want to enroll in classes.

'Be entered to' is an incorrect passive construction and word choice. Use the verb 'enroll' plus preposition 'in' for taking classes. This fixes verb and preposition errors. Grammar problem type ID: 26

× Art to be a drawing as the sometimes from 1:00 to 1:00 or from week to week.

✓ I want to take art drawing classes, sometimes for one hour or weekly.

Original sentence is ungrammatical and unclear. Reword to state intention: 'take art drawing classes', specify duration 'for one hour' and frequency 'weekly'. This corrects word form and structure. Grammar problem type ID: 13

× Actually I don't have any hobbies when when I am a child, but my father and parents sent me to a classes of art and I'll stay for two week or from two weeks to the month to try that I am in the future maybe I will be answered again to this class and I am drawing for my family and said.

✓ Actually, I didn't have any hobbies when I was a child, but my parents sent me to art classes and I stayed for two weeks or maybe up to a month. In the future I might take that class again and I used to draw for my family.

Mixes present and past tenses and has pronoun duplication. Use simple past 'didn't have' and 'was' for childhood. 'Parents' already includes 'father', so use 'parents'. Use plural 'classes' and plural 'weeks'. Replace 'I'll be answered again to this class' with 'I might take that class again'. Also use 'used to draw' to indicate past habit. Grammar problem type ID: 5

× Actually I don't have any hobbies when when I am a child, but my father and parents sent me to a classes of art and I'll stay for two week or from two weeks to the month to try that I am in the future maybe I will be answered again to this class and I am drawing for my family and said.

✓ (Split into two sentences as corrected above)

The original is a run-on with wrong tense and structure; see previous correction for clear sentence separation and tense consistency. Grammar problem type ID: 26

× Actually, I don't have any, any hobby when I, when, when I am a child, uh, Toledo Hood, but I don't, but I, but my, my parents sent me to, uh, toys and a glass drawing.

✓ Actually, I didn't have any hobbies when I was a child, but my parents sent me to drawing classes.

Use simple past 'didn't have' and 'was' for past time reference. Remove repetitions and filler words. 'Toys and a glass drawing' is incorrect; intended 'drawing classes'. Grammar problem type ID: 6

× I will, I will stay in that, uh, maybe between the, from, at week or two week to the month.

✓ I stayed in those classes for maybe one or two weeks up to a month.

For past duration use 'for' plus time period and correct 'one or two weeks' (plural). Replace 'stay in that' with 'stayed in those classes'. Grammar problem type ID: 11

× No, I don't have the same hobbies at my family members.

✓ No, I don't have the same hobbies as my family members.

Use 'as' to compare similarity between people, not 'at'. Grammar problem type ID: 11

× Some of my my my family are reading books as the as the the hobby and at home and other go to the gym or reading stories and novels and anything else but me.

✓ Some of my family enjoy reading books as a hobby at home, others go to the gym or read stories and novels, but not me.

Remove repetitions, correct verb forms ('enjoy'), use 'a hobby' for singular hobby concept, and parallel structure for contrasting activities. Fix 'other' to 'others'. Grammar problem type ID: 26

× I am always when I have a time more time I am going to the gym or going.

✓ When I have more free time, I usually go to the gym.

Original mixes awkward adverb placement and verb forms. Use conditional time clause 'When I have more free time' and simple present 'I usually go' to indicate habitual action. Grammar problem type ID: 6}]} (end)