爱好— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be careful with grammar (verb forms and subject-verb agreement) and avoid small redundancy. Use one clear topic sentence, then add 1–2 supporting details with linking words. For example, change “learning new poses improve” to “learning new poses improves,” and consider shortening the reason phrases to be more concise.

範例: Yes, I practice aerial yoga in my free time. It challenges me and improves my strength and flexibility, which helps me relax after a busy day. For instance, mastering an inverted pose made my core stronger and reduced my back tension.

建議: Use correct tense consistency (past tense for childhood), and tighten sentences to avoid repetition. Start with a clear past-tense topic sentence, then add specific supporting details using linking words like “for example” or “for instance.”

範例: Yes, I enjoyed drawing when I was a child because it helped me relax after studying and boosted my imagination. For example, I used to sketch cartoons and animals for hours, which improved my creativity and attention to detail.

建議: Maintain tense consistency and correct verb forms for clarity. Use one concise topic sentence in present perfect (have had) or past simple, then add linked details. Correct errors like “I start” → “I started” or “I have been drawing since I was a child.”

範例: Yes, I have been drawing since I was a child. I started with cartoons and animals and often spent hours in my room practicing, which increased my creativity and patience over time.

建議: Use consistent past tense for childhood events and avoid repeating the same reasons. Keep the answer concise: one direct statement about shared hobby, then a linked example of how you interact (use, for example, linking words like “also” or “for instance”).

範例: Yes, my younger sister and I both enjoy drawing. We began drawing as children to relax and spark our imagination; for example, we regularly share feedback and experiment with watercolors and sketching styles.

× I find it challenging but very rewarding because learning new poses improve my strength and flexibility and helps me relax after a busy day.

✓ I find it challenging but very rewarding because learning new poses improves my strength and flexibility and helps me relax after a busy day.

Subject-verb agreement with 'learning' (singular gerund) requires 'improves' not 'improve'. Use 'improves' to agree with singular subject; 'helps' is correct for 'learning' as well. Suggestion: Treat 'learning new poses' as a singular noun phrase and use singular verbs (improves, helps).

× I like drawing when I was a child because it helped me relax after studying and boost my imagination.

✓ I liked drawing when I was a child because it helped me relax after studying and boosted my imagination.

The clause refers to a past time ('when I was a child'), so verbs should be in the past tense. 'Like' should be 'liked' and parallel verb 'boost' should be 'boosted'. Suggestion: Use past tense consistently for actions that occurred in childhood.

× I start drawing since I was a child because it helped me relax after studying and boost my imagination.

✓ I started drawing when I was a child because it helped me relax after studying and boosted my imagination.

The original mixes present 'start' with 'since' and past time reference. For a past starting point use past simple 'started' and use 'when' instead of 'since' for a one-time past event. Also maintain past tense 'boosted' for parallelism. Suggestion: Use 'started' and 'when' for actions that began at a specific time in the past; keep verbs consistent in past tense.

× I especially enjoy sketching cartoons and animals, and I would often spend hours drawing in my room, which improve my creativity and patience.

✓ I especially enjoy sketching cartoons and animals, and I would often spend hours drawing in my room, which improved my creativity and patience.

The relative clause refers to past habitual action 'would often spend', so the verb in the clause should be past 'improved' rather than present 'improve'. Ensure tense consistency between main clause and relative clause. Suggestion: Match the tense of the relative clause to the time frame established by the main clause.

× Yes, my young sister and I both enjoy drawing. We start drawing when we were children because it helped us relax after studying and stimulate our imagination, and we often share feedback on each other's work and try different styles like watercolors and sketching.

✓ Yes, my younger sister and I both enjoy drawing. We started drawing when we were children because it helped us relax after studying and stimulated our imagination, and we often shared feedback on each other's work and tried different styles like watercolors and sketching.

Multiple tense and word choice issues: 'start' should be past 'started' to match 'when we were children'; 'stimulate' should be past 'stimulated'; later actions described as past should use past tense 'shared' and 'tried' if referring to childhood times. Also 'young sister' is more natural as 'younger sister' when comparing siblings. Suggestion: Use 'younger sister' and keep past tense for activities that occurred during childhood; use present tense only for current habits (e.g., 'we both enjoy drawing').