爱好— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid filler words (umm) and repetition.

範例: Yes, I have several hobbies. I enjoy drawing and cooking, especially experimenting with new ingredients and recipes. For example, last month I combined different spices to create a popular pasta sauce, which my friends enjoyed.

建議: Use a clear past-to-present structure and correct tense. Give one specific example of what you learned and link it to how it affected you now.

範例: Yes, I did. As a child I loved drawing and I learned many techniques from YouTube tutorials, such as shading and perspective. Because of those lessons, drawing remains my favourite hobby today and I still practice weekly.

建議: Clarify which hobby you mean and correct vocabulary (e.g., 'rowing' vs 'drawing'). Keep sentences short and logical, use linking words to explain why it continues to appeal to you, and avoid mixed metaphors.

範例: Yes. As I mentioned, drawing has been my hobby since childhood. It relaxes me and helps me unwind after a stressful day, so I still practise it regularly to relieve negative emotions.

建議: Answer directly and use clear comparisons. Correct vocabulary and remove fillers. Say whether you share hobbies, then explain with a brief reason and an example.

範例: No, not really. My family members enjoy activities like playing the guitar, which I do not. I prefer drawing and cooking because I find them more mentally engaging and satisfying.

× Without a doubt, I have a lot of hobbies umm when I have some free time to spare, umm namely such as drawing and cooking and melee cooking.

✓ Without a doubt, I have a lot of hobbies when I have some free time, namely drawing and cooking, including meal cooking.

The original sentence uses redundant and incorrect conjunctions and phrases ('umm', 'namely such as') and an incorrect word 'melee'. Replace redundant fillers, use either 'namely' or 'such as' but not both, and correct 'melee cooking' to 'meal cooking' or 'cooking meals'. Also remove unnecessary clause 'to spare' for clarity and adjust punctuation. Suggested improvement: pause to plan your sentence, remove filler words, and choose one clarifying expression ('namely' or 'such as').

× I usually interested in finding ingredients and the recipe to make a good food for people.

✓ I am usually interested in finding ingredients and recipes to make good food for people.

Missing copula 'am' (verb 'to be') and incorrect use of 'the recipe' and 'a good food'. Use plural 'recipes' for general meaning and uncountable 'food' without 'a'. Suggestion: include the appropriate form of 'be' and match countability of nouns. (Grammar problem type ID:14)

× I learned a lot of skills from YouTube videos to improve my drawing skill.

✓ I learned a lot of skills from YouTube videos to improve my drawing skills.

The noun 'skill' should be plural 'skills' to agree with 'a lot of skills'. Using plural shows multiple abilities were learned. Suggestion: keep noun number consistent with quantifier. (Grammar problem type ID:5)

× So now isn't has become my most favorite of hobbies since then.

✓ So now it has become my favorite hobby.

The original sentence mixes negative contraction 'isn't' with 'has become', causing ungrammatical structure. 'Most favorite of hobbies' is redundant; 'favorite hobby' suffices. Suggestion: avoid combining contractions with auxiliary verbs and simplify comparative expressions. (Grammar problem type ID:26)

× Yes as I mentioned a rowing is my hobby when I was a tried and now I still want to do it more.

✓ Yes, as I mentioned, rowing has been my hobby since I was a child, and I still want to do it more now.

Problems: unnecessary article 'a' before 'rowing'; 'when I was a tried' is unintelligible - likely intended 'when I was a child'; tense and time expressions incorrect. Use present perfect 'has been' for a hobby continuing from childhood. Suggestion: use correct noun forms and clear time expressions. (Grammar problem type ID:12)

× Oh it my cup of tea and I find really relaxing and let my hair down when drawing.

✓ Oh, it's my cup of tea, and I find drawing really relaxing and a way to let my hair down.

Missing contraction 'it's' (it is), missing subject for 'find', and awkward structure 'let my hair down when drawing'. Reorder to make 'drawing' the subject of 'find... relaxing' and state 'a way to let my hair down'. Suggestion: include required verbs and make the gerund the subject where appropriate. (Grammar problem type ID:12)

× It helps me release my negative feelings.

✓ It helps me release negative feelings.

Original is mostly acceptable but 'my negative feelings' is slightly redundant; removing 'my' produces more natural English. Tense 'helps' is correct present simple for habitual action. Suggestion: omit unnecessary possessive for natural phrasing. (Grammar problem type ID:6)

× I don't think it's so 'cause my family mostly like umm doing other hobbies like playing guitar which is not my cobalt, so I find during as much engaging, much more engaging and stimulated to me than other hobbies.

✓ I don't think so, because my family mostly likes other hobbies like playing the guitar, which is not my cup of tea, so I find drawing much more engaging and stimulating than their hobbies.

Multiple issues: 'it's so' incorrect collocation; 'my family mostly like' needs singular 'likes' for collective noun or 'family members mostly like'; 'which is not my cobalt' is nonsense — correct idiom 'not my cup of tea'; 'I find during as much engaging' likely intended 'I find drawing much more engaging'; 'stimulated to me' should be 'stimulating'. Suggested improvements: choose correct idioms, ensure subject-verb agreement, and reorder clauses for clarity. (Grammar problem type ID:12)