爱好— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Mejora la gramática y la fluidez: usa oraciones completas y evita repeticiones. Añade un enunciado temático claro, un detalle específico y una frase final breve. Por ejemplo, corrige tiempos verbales (comenzé cuando tenía 15 → I started when I was 15) y elimina muletillas como 'or'. También usa conectores simples para enlazar ideas (for example, since then).

範例: I enjoy several hobbies, but my main one is playing the electric guitar. I started when I was 15, so I have been playing for five years and I mostly play rock music. Playing the guitar helps me relax and improve my concentration. For example, I practice two hours every evening to learn new songs.

建議: Clarifica y simplifica las frases: evita repeticiones y errores de aspecto verbal. Comienza con un tema claro, añade un detalle específico (cuánto tiempo o por qué dejó de practicar) y una oración que conecte con el presente si es relevante. Usa conectores como 'but' o 'however' correctamente.

範例: Yes, when I was a child I used to play the violin; it was the first instrument I learned. I practiced for a few years but I didn't keep it up because I was busy with school. However, learning the violin gave me a basic understanding of music that helped when I later learned the guitar.

建議: Haz la respuesta más natural y específica: usa una frase temático y añade detalles concretos (qué exactamente dibuja, con qué frecuencia, desde cuándo). Evita muletillas al final y mejora la precisión léxica ('not in an artistic way' → 'not professionally').

範例: Yes, I have liked drawing since I was a child, although I don't draw professionally. I usually copy cartoon characters like Scooby-Doo and Snoopy, and I practice about once a week to improve my lines and shading. Drawing is a relaxing hobby that complements my music practice.

建議: Corrige errores gramaticales y de pronombres, y organiza la respuesta: comienza con la idea principal, añade detalles específicos (how he taught you, examples of songs) y concluye con una idea que muestre relación o diferencia. Evita muletillas ('uh') y usa pronombres correctos ('he').

範例: Yes, I share playing the guitar with my father. He lent me his first acoustic guitar, and I learned many songs from him, especially folk and classic rock pieces. Later I switched to an electric guitar because I preferred the sound, but we still play together on weekends.

× Electric guitar I started when I was 15 years old, so now I have five years playing it and I really enjoy playing rock or.

✓ I started playing the electric guitar when I was 15 years old, so now I have been playing it for five years and I really enjoy playing rock.

The sentence has incorrect word order and verb forms. 'Electric guitar I started' should be 'I started playing the electric guitar' (correct subject-verb-object order and verb + -ing). 'Now I have five years playing it' needs the present perfect continuous/ perfect structure: 'I have been playing it for five years' or 'I have played it for five years.' Use 'playing rock' to complete the idea. Suggestion: place the subject before the verb, use 'start' + gerund for beginning an activity, and use 'have been' + -ing or 'have' + past participle with 'for' to indicate duration.

× When I was a child, I used to play the violin. It was my first, the first instrument that I played, that I that I've learned among the years, but I didn't practice as I wanted to.

✓ When I was a child, I used to play the violin. It was the first instrument that I learned over the years, but I didn't practice as much as I wanted to.

Mixed and redundant phrasing: 'It was my first, the first instrument that I played' is repetitive; use 'It was the first instrument that I learned.' 'I've learned among the years' is incorrect tense and phrasing; use simple past 'learned' for completed actions in the past. 'I didn't practice as I wanted to' needs 'as much as I wanted to' to compare degree. Suggestion: simplify redundant clauses and keep past tense consistent for past habits and completed actions.

× I also love to draw but not in an artistic way. I just try to copy some characters from cartoons such as scooby-doo or Snoopy or.

✓ I also love to draw, but not in an artistic way. I just try to copy some characters from cartoons such as Scooby-Doo or Snoopy.

Main issues: capitalization and unnecessary trailing 'or'. Use comma before 'but' linking contrasting clauses. Proper nouns like 'Scooby-Doo' and 'Snoopy' must be capitalized. Remove the extra 'or' at the end. Suggestion: capitalize names and avoid leaving conjunctions hanging; end list cleanly.

× I share the hobby with my father of playing guitar. She actually, uh, borrowed me his first, uh, acoustic guitar where I learned a lot of songs. And after that I wanted to try electric guitar and I loved it more.

✓ I share the hobby of playing guitar with my father. He actually lent me his first acoustic guitar, where I learned a lot of songs. After that I wanted to try the electric guitar and I liked it more.

Pronoun errors: 'She' is incorrect for 'my father' (should be 'He'). Verb usage: 'borrowed me' is wrong; the correct verb is 'lent me' (the owner lends, the receiver borrows). 'I loved it more' is past tense but 'liked it more' is more natural here; keep past tense consistent. Also add 'the' before 'electric guitar' for specificity. Suggestion: match pronouns to antecedents, use correct lend/borrow verbs, and maintain consistent past tense.