爱好— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific details (what channels or types of videos you watch, how often) and use a linking word to connect ideas. Also correct small grammar errors ("a hobby", avoid repeating the same phrase).

範例: I do have a hobby: I often watch YouTube in my free time because I find short comedy sketches and travel vlogs entertaining. For example, I usually watch 2–3 videos a day, mainly from comedy creators and travel channels, which helps me relax after studying.

建議: Give a clear topic sentence about the childhood hobby, then explain specifically how you did it and why it was special. Use linking words (e.g., "for example", "because") and correct small phrasing issues ("paint with a tube", "stick it on my window").

範例: Yes, I enjoyed drawing and painting as a child, but I mainly used tube paints to create window art. For example, I would squeeze paint from a tube onto transparent paper and stick it on my window, which made colorful designs when sunlight shone through.

建議: Start with a direct topic sentence, then give specific reasons and a brief detail about your routine. Use linking words such as "because" and "so" correctly and avoid awkward phrasing ("since I was in primary school"). Mention how long or what type of stretches to add concreteness.

範例: Yes, stretching is a hobby I've kept since childhood and I do it every morning. I began stretching in primary school because I believed it could help me grow taller, so now I spend 10–15 minutes each day doing basic leg and back stretches.

建議: Give a clear opening line and then add one or two specific details about the shared hobby, such as how often you walk together, where, or what you enjoy about it. Use linking words like "because" or "so" to connect ideas and correct small phrasing ("after dinner").

範例: Yes, I share a hobby with my mother: we like to walk after dinner for health reasons. For instance, we usually walk for 20–30 minutes around our neighborhood three times a week, which helps us relax and talk about our day.

× Yes, I have an hobby.

✓ Yes, I have a hobby.

Use 'a' before consonant sounds and 'an' before vowel sounds. 'Hobby' begins with a consonant sound /h/, so the correct article is 'a'. Change 'an hobby' to 'a hobby'. Suggestion: Remember to choose 'a' or 'an' based on the initial sound of the following word.

× I like to watch YouTube in my free time because I find it entertaining and fun.

✓ I like to watch YouTube in my free time because I find it entertaining and fun.

This sentence is grammatically acceptable; no change needed. However, for natural collocation, you can say 'I like watching YouTube videos in my free time' to emphasize the activity and specify 'videos'. Suggestion: Use 'watching YouTube videos' for natural phrasing.

× So I like to watch YouTube in my free time.

✓ I like to watch YouTube in my free time.

Beginning with 'So' is unnecessary and makes the sentence redundant because the idea was already expressed. Removing 'So' makes the sentence clearer and avoids repetition. Suggestion: Avoid repetitive sentences; combine ideas when possible.

× I had a hobby of drawing, but it's not just a normal drawing.

✓ I had a hobby of drawing, but it wasn't just a normal drawing.

When referring to a past situation, maintain past tense consistently. 'It's' (it is) is present tense; change to 'it wasn't' to match past context. Suggestion: Keep verb tenses consistent within the same time frame.

× It's like I can paint with with a tube, then I can stick it on my window.

✓ I could paint with a tube and then stick it on my window.

Use consistent past tense when describing a childhood habit ('I had a hobby...'). 'Can' implies present ability; 'could' fits past ability. Also remove the duplicated word 'with'. Combine clauses with 'and' instead of 'then' for smoother flow. Suggestion: Match modality with the time reference and avoid repeated words.

× It's a special item.

✓ It was a special item.

Maintain past tense when describing a past hobby. Using 'was' keeps tense consistent with previous sentences about childhood. Suggestion: Keep tenses aligned when describing past events.

× I have a hobby and it's also my daily routine.

✓ I have a hobby that is also my daily routine.

The original sentence is understandable but slightly awkward. Replacing 'and' with 'that is' creates a clearer relative clause linking the hobby and routine. Suggestion: Use relative clauses to link defining information smoothly.

× It's stretching.

✓ It's stretching.

The sentence 'It's stretching.' is awkward because 'stretching' as a noun (gerund) would be 'stretching' without 'it is'. Better forms are provided below. No grammatical error category from the list strictly requires change, but a clearer correction is suggested. Suggestion: Say 'My hobby is stretching.' or 'I do stretching.' for clarity.

× I heard stretching can make me grow taller so I've started it since I was just a primary school student and I'm still doing stretches every day.

✓ I heard stretching could make me grow taller, so I started it when I was in primary school and I'm still doing stretches every day.

Several issues: modal and tense consistency ('heard' suggests reported speech so 'could' is preferable), incorrect use of 'I've started it since' — 'since' with a point in time requires present perfect, but the sequence here needs simple past 'I started' with 'when' to indicate time. 'Just a primary school student' is informal; 'when I was in primary school' is clearer. Use commas to separate clauses. Suggestion: Use 'could' for reported ability, use 'started' for a past action, and 'when' or 'since' correctly: 'since' with present perfect, 'when' with simple past.

× My mom likes to walk after the dinner for her healthy diet routine and I sometimes go out with her for walking.

✓ My mom likes to walk after dinner for her health routine, and I sometimes go out walking with her.

Use 'after dinner' not 'after the dinner' for general routine. 'For her healthy diet routine' is awkward; 'for her health routine' or 'as part of her healthy routine' is better. 'Go out with her for walking' is unnatural; 'go out walking with her' is the correct collocation. Suggestion: Use natural prepositions and collocations: 'after dinner', 'as part of her healthy routine', 'go out walking with her'.

× We both like walking.

✓ We both like walking.

This sentence is correct as written; 'walking' as a gerund is fine following 'like'. No change needed. Suggestion: No changes necessary; the sentence is grammatically correct.