爱好— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be concise and grammatical: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and incorrect forms (e.g. “a certain hobbies”, “crickets”).

範例: I enjoy reading books and playing cricket. Reading helps me learn new things and broaden my perspective, while cricket keeps me fit and improves my teamwork skills.

建議: Organize your response: give a clear topic sentence about childhood hobbies, then add specific details and linkers (e.g. “also”, “because”, “which”). Correct tense and word choice (e.g. skating, swimming, good for fitness/memory) and avoid vague phrases like “making”.

範例: As a child, I enjoyed skating and swimming. I skated regularly with friends, which improved my balance, and I sometimes swam on weekends because it was fun and kept me healthy. Those activities remain some of my fondest memories.

建議: Answer directly and simply: state whether you have a lifelong hobby, then explain briefly using clear grammar and linking words. Avoid confusing phrases (e.g. “laterally”, repeated words). Use correct verb forms and punctuation.

範例: No, I don't have a hobby I've kept since childhood. My interests changed over time: I used to skate and swim, but now I prefer reading books and playing cricket because they suit my current schedule and interests.

建議: Give a direct answer and explain with clear reasons. Use correct subject-verb agreement and clearer vocabulary (e.g. “relaxes the mind”, “brings peace”, “adopted”). Avoid contradictory phrases like “it's a bad thing”.

範例: Yes, my parents also enjoy reading. They read regularly to learn new things and to relax, and I adopted this habit from them because I appreciate the calm and knowledge it brings.

× Yes, I have a certain hobbies like reading books and playing cricket as reading books give me more knowledge and playing crickets develops my physical strength.

✓ Yes, I have certain hobbies like reading books and playing cricket, as reading books give me more knowledge and playing cricket develops my physical strength.

The noun 'hobbies' is plural so 'a certain' is incorrect; use 'certain hobbies' (remove 'a'). Also 'playing crickets' is wrong because 'cricket' is an uncountable or sport name; use 'playing cricket'. Ensure parallelism: 'reading books give' is acceptable colloquially but better as 'reading books gives me more knowledge' if treating 'reading' as singular activity; however, since 'books' is plural, keep 'reading books gives me more knowledge' would be preferable. Suggested correction keeps original meaning and fixes plural mistakes.

× When I was a child I had a hobby of skating and I like the skating most and I also sometimes do swimming on weekends and they both are very good for making and it was a very memorable experience for me.

✓ When I was a child, I had a hobby of skating and I liked skating the most; I also sometimes went swimming on weekends, and both were very good for me. It was a very memorable experience.

Mixed tenses: main time frame is past ('was', 'had'), so verbs should be past ('liked', 'went', 'were'). 'Do swimming' is incorrect for past; use 'went swimming'. 'I also sometimes do swimming' mixes present with past. 'Very good for making' is unclear and ungrammatical; revised to 'very good for me'. Splitting into two sentences improves clarity.

× Typically I don't have a hobby since my childhood as my hobbies are now developed and laterally I have a hobby of skating or swimming but now it's replaced by the reading books more and also playing cricket and give give me.

✓ Typically I did not have a hobby in my childhood because my hobbies developed later; I used to enjoy skating and swimming, but now they have been replaced by reading books and playing cricket, which benefit me more.

The phrase 'I don't have a hobby since my childhood' incorrectly mixes present tense with 'since' referring to past; use past tense 'did not have' or 'I have not had since'. Also 'laterally' is incorrect word choice; use 'later' or 'later on'. 'It's replaced by the reading books more' is ungrammatical: use 'they have been replaced by reading books'. Repeated 'give give me' is a mistake; replace with 'which benefit me'. Ensure tense consistency and correct verb forms.

× Of course my father and mother is also reads books and get up some knowledge and it also relax mind and making peaceful and it's a bad thing and I also adapt that hobby from my parents and.

✓ Of course my father and mother also read books and gain knowledge; it also relaxes the mind and brings peace, and I adopted this hobby from my parents.

Pronoun and subject-verb agreement: 'father and mother is' should be 'father and mother are' but better phrased as 'my parents'. 'Is also reads' mixes verb forms; use 'also read'. 'Get up some knowledge' is incorrect phrasing; use 'gain knowledge'. 'It also relax mind and making peaceful' is ungrammatical; use 'it relaxes the mind and brings peace'. 'It's a bad thing' contradicts context; likely intended 'it's a good thing' — corrected to omit contradictory phrase. 'I also adapt that hobby' should be past tense 'I adopted this hobby' for consistency with past adoption.