爱好— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be clear and grammatical: begin with a direct topic sentence, avoid filler words, correct tense and agreement, and keep it concise (max 4–5 sentences). Add one specific example of what you read and use linking words (for example, 'for example' or 'such as') to connect ideas.

範例: My hobby is reading. I find it relaxing and it helps me learn about history, society and culture. For example, I recently read a book about modern Chinese history that explained everyday life in the 20th century. Because of this, reading both calms me and increases my knowledge.

建議: Start with a direct answer and remove unclear phrases. Use past tense consistently when talking about childhood, give a concise reason, and add a specific detail (what you read or age). Use linking words like 'because' and 'so' to connect cause and result.

範例: Yes, I did. When I was a child I started reading because I felt a lot of pressure from homework and my parents. Reading helped me relax, so I often read storybooks and history comics to unwind and learn new things.

建議: Answer directly and eliminate fillers ('uh', 'um'). Use the present perfect or present simple appropriately to show continuity (e.g., 'I have liked reading since I was a child'). Provide one clear supporting detail about how friends showed support, using correct grammar and linking words.

範例: Yes — I have liked reading since I was a child. Because it has been important to me for many years, my close friends often give me books as birthday presents, which I really appreciate.

建議: Give a clear comparative answer: say whether you share hobbies, use correct grammar, and provide a specific contrast (what they like to do and how it differs). Avoid repetition and filler sounds. Use linking words such as 'but' and 'however' properly.

範例: No, not really. I enjoy reading, while my parents prefer cooking. For example, they like experimenting with new recipes and often try different cuisines, so our interests are quite different.

× Reading can helps me feels relaxing and can give me some knowledge about history, society and the culture.

✓ Reading can help me feel relaxed and can give me some knowledge about history, society and culture.

After modal verb 'can' use base verb form (help), not helps. 'Feel' should be base form after 'helps' correction; 'feels relaxing' is incorrect because 'feel' takes adjective 'relaxed' to describe state. Also 'the culture' is unnecessary; use 'culture' without the definite article when speaking generally.

× Yes, why was our child? I began like to reading because I remember when I was young my I felt pressures from my homework and especially from parents.

✓ Yes, when I was a child, I began to like reading because I remember when I was young I felt pressure from my homework and especially from my parents.

Replace incorrect phrase 'why was our child?' with 'when I was a child' to match meaning. 'Began like to reading' should be 'began to like reading' (verb + to infinitive). 'Felt pressures' should be singular 'felt pressure' (uncountable in this context). Add 'my' before 'parents' is wrong; use 'my parents'. Maintain past tense 'began' and 'felt' consistently.

× But when I was reading I feel relaxed and I can get the knowledge.

✓ But when I was reading I felt relaxed and I could gain knowledge.

The sentence mixes past and present tense: 'when I was reading' is past, so follow with past tense 'felt' and 'could' for ability in the past. 'Get the knowledge' is awkward; 'gain knowledge' is more natural and omits 'the' when speaking generally.

× Success mixed.

✓ I experienced success and satisfaction.

'Success mixed' is not a grammatical sentence and is unclear. Provide a complete noun phrase and verb to convey meaning; 'I experienced success and satisfaction' clarifies the intended idea.

× It just begins when I when I was a child.

✓ It just began when I was a child.

'Begins' is present tense but context refers to the past ('when I was a child'), so use past tense 'began'. Remove duplicated 'when I'.

× So my close friend always remember my hobby and when I was birthday they were all choice.

✓ So my close friends always remembered my hobby and when it was my birthday they would all choose gifts for me.

'Close friend' should be plural 'close friends' if 'they' is used. 'Remember' should be past 'remembered' to match past context. 'When I was birthday' is incorrect; use 'when it was my birthday'. 'They were all choice' is ungrammatical; 'they would all choose gifts for me' expresses the intended meaning.

× Works as a gift for me.

✓ They worked as gifts for me.

Fragment 'Works as a gift for me' lacks subject agreement and tense. Make it a full sentence matching plural 'they' and past tense: 'They worked as gifts for me.' Alternatively combine with previous sentence.

× I feel, I feel not uh, my hobby was uh, my hobby was reading, but my parents prefer like her like, like, like cooking.

✓ I don't think so. My hobby was reading, but my parents preferred cooking.

'I feel, I feel not' is awkward; use 'I don't think so' to express disagreement. Maintain past tense 'was' and 'preferred' to match context. Remove filler 'like her like, like, like' and simplify to 'preferred cooking'.

× Yeah, they always, uh, try to make a different food from.

✓ Yeah, they always tried to make different dishes.

'Try to make a different food from' is ungrammatical. Use 'tried to make different dishes' to express variety. Also match past tense 'tried' with earlier past descriptions.