规则— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence that directly answers the question, then give one specific example and brief reason. Avoid unnecessary articles and awkward word order.

範例: Yes. At my school in Japan students were not allowed to bring smartphones into classrooms. For example, phones had to be left in lockers to prevent distractions during lessons.

建議: Give a direct opinion first and support it with a clear reason and a concise example. Use correct grammar (e.g., "most rules create regulations on students' activities") and avoid repeating the same idea.

範例: No, I don't. More rules often restrict students' independence and creativity. For example, strict bans on phones or study methods can prevent students from learning how to manage their time responsibly.

建議: Improve clarity and coherence. Give one clear example of what made the teacher dedicated and connect it with a reason using linking words. Fix sentence fragments and punctuation.

範例: Yes, I had a very dedicated teacher in elementary school. For instance, she spent extra time after class teaching students how to use educational apps on school tablets so everyone could join classroom activities.

建議: Provide a clear topic sentence stating your preference, then give one specific reason and a short consequence. Avoid fragments and ensure verbs and articles are correct.

範例: I prefer fewer rules at school because excessive regulations limit students' autonomy. With fewer rules, students would have more opportunities to take responsibility for their learning.

建議: Clarify vocabulary ("selective" is incorrect here) and give a concrete example of strictness with cause and effect. Use linking words to show why the teacher was strict and how it affected you.

範例: Yes, I had a very strict teacher in high school. For example, he enforced short study sessions during breaks and gave detailed homework checks, which helped improve my discipline and exam scores.

建議: Answer directly and give one or two specific benefits with clear phrasing. Correct word choice ("rural" if you meant countryside) and smooth linking will help.

範例: Yes, I would. Working in a largely rule-free school would allow me to build strong personal relationships with students and adapt teaching methods to their needs, which could boost their motivation and engagement.

× Yes, in my country, Japan, a rule for students at the school exists, for instance.

✓ Yes, in my country, Japan, a rule for students at the school exists, for instance.

Although awkward, this sentence does not contain a clear article error; leave as is. Suggestion: rewrite to 'For instance, there is a rule for students at school in my country, Japan.' to sound natural.'

× Usually a student at schools cannot bring their smartphones on classrooms.

✓ Usually students at school cannot bring their smartphones into classrooms.

Mismatch between singular 'a student' and plural 'their smartphones' creates agreement error. Use plural 'students' to match 'their'. Also preposition and article corrected: use 'into classrooms' rather than 'on classrooms'. Suggestion: 'Usually students at school cannot bring their smartphones into classrooms.'

× I don't think students would benefit more from more rules at schools.

✓ I don't think students would benefit from more rules at school.

Use 'from more rules' without redundant 'more' after 'benefit' and use singular 'school' as institution. Also avoid 'at schools' plural here for general statement. Suggestion: 'I don't think students would benefit from more rules at school.'

× That's because most of rules make a regulations on students activities.

✓ That's because most rules create regulations on students' activities.

Incorrect articles: 'most of rules' should be 'most rules' or 'most of the rules'. 'a regulations' is wrong number and article; use plural 'regulations'. Also possessive needed: 'students' activities' becomes 'students' activities'. Suggestion: 'That's because most rules create regulations on students' activities.'

× For instance, students cannot bring their smartphones.

✓ For instance, students cannot bring their smartphones.

Sentence is correct; no change needed. It matches plural subject and plural object. Suggestion: none.'

× Yes, I had really dedicated teacher at elementary school.

✓ Yes, I had a really dedicated teacher at elementary school.

Missing article before 'really dedicated teacher' — use 'a'. Past tense 'had' is appropriate for a past experience. Suggestion: 'I had a really dedicated teacher in elementary school.'

× For instance, the teacher showed the students. How to use their phones?

✓ For instance, the teacher showed the students how to use their phones.

The original splits the clause incorrectly and punctuates as a question. Combine into one declarative sentence: 'showed the students how to use their phones.' Ensure correct clause order. Suggestion: 'The teacher showed the students how to use their phones.'

× I think school should reduce a number of rules at schools the scores most of rules make a regulation on the student.

✓ I think schools should reduce the number of rules because most rules regulate students' behavior.

Multiple article and noun number errors: use 'the number of rules' (definite article), 'schools' or 'school' consistently, 'most of rules' should be 'most rules', and 'make a regulation on the student' is incorrect—use 'regulate students' behavior'. Suggestion: 'I think schools should reduce the number of rules because most rules regulate students' behavior.'

× As the rules declined, students can.

✓ As the number of rules decreases, students can behave more freely.

Fragment 'students can.' lacks an object/verb complement. Tense and word choice: 'declined' is past; better present/future 'decrease'. Provide completed idea: 'students can behave more freely.' Suggestion: 'As the number of rules decreases, students can behave more freely.'

× Yes, I have had a really selective teacher at high school.

✓ Yes, I have had a really strict teacher in high school.

'Selective' is incorrect adjective for 'strict'; use 'strict'. Also preposition 'in high school' is more natural. Tense 'have had' is acceptable for life experience. Suggestion: 'I have had a really strict teacher in high school.'

× For instance, the teacher let students study at the rest time for about 5 minutes.

✓ For instance, the teacher let students study during the break for about five minutes.

Phrase 'rest time' is unnatural; use 'break'. Preposition 'during' is correct. Write numbers in words in formal speech: 'five minutes'. Suggestion: 'The teacher let students study during the break for about five minutes.'

× This is very dedicated.

✓ This is very helpful.

'Dedicated' describes people, not situations. Here the intended meaning is that the practice was helpful or considerate. Use 'helpful' or 'considerate'. Suggestion: 'This was very helpful.'

× Yes, I would like to work as a teacher in a rural free school.

✓ Yes, I would like to work as a teacher in a rule-free school.

Original uses 'rural free' which is incorrect and likely a mistranscription. The intended idea from the question is 'rule-free school.' Replace 'rural free' with 'rule-free'. Suggestion: 'I would like to work as a teacher in a rule-free school.'

× That's because I can interact with students as a free teacher so we can connect as person to person.

✓ That's because I can interact with students as a free teacher so we can connect person to person.

Use expression 'person to person' without 'as' before it; also could be 'person-to-person'. Preposition use and article 'a free teacher' is acceptable but 'free' may be unclear; consider 'in a less restrictive environment'. Suggestion: 'I can interact with students more freely so we can connect person to person.'