规则— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and incorrect verb forms. For example, say there are a few key rules and list them clearly, and explain briefly how they are enforced.

範例: Yes, there are several rules at my school. For instance, students must wear an ID and a proper uniform, and maintain neat grooming. In addition, teachers and security staff check compliance every morning when we enter the classroom.

建議: Give a direct opinion and support it with clear reasons using linking words. Correct grammar (plural/singular and word choice) and avoid vague phrases like 'beyond time productive'. Be specific about how rules help.

範例: Yes, I believe some rules can be beneficial because they promote discipline and good habits. For example, attendance and punctuality rules help students manage their time better, and grooming rules encourage a respectful learning environment.

建議: Provide a clear topic sentence and then give specific examples of what made the teacher dedicated. Use correct tense and word forms and connect ideas with linking words to show cause and effect.

範例: Yes, I had a very dedicated teacher in college who always encouraged us to be confident. For example, she taught us techniques for answering questions calmly and gave regular mock exams, so as a result I felt prepared and passed the board exam.

建議: Give a clear preference and explain with concise, logical reasons. Avoid incomplete sentences and repetition. Use linking words (because, however) to compare more vs fewer rules and provide specific examples of useful rules.

範例: I prefer a few clear, reasonable rules rather than many strict ones because too many rules can be confusing. For instance, rules about attendance and respect are useful, but excessive restrictions on small details may limit students' independence.

建議: Describe the experience more clearly and coherently. Start with a topic sentence, then give specific examples of the teacher's strictness and how it affected you, using correct tenses. Avoid unclear phrases like 'row Rd. to rage.'

範例: Yes, I had a very strict teacher in senior high school. For example, she would scold the class loudly for minor mistakes, and because of that I often felt nervous and could not concentrate during lessons.

建議: State your opinion clearly and explain reasons with specific consequences. Fix grammar (double negatives) and choose precise vocabulary. Use linking words to connect opinion and reasons.

範例: No, I would not want to work in a rule-free school because students would likely lack structure and discipline. Consequently, teaching would be difficult since lessons could be frequently interrupted and learning outcomes would suffer.

× Yeah, there's a lot of rules for students.

✓ Yeah, there are a lot of rules for students.

The subject 'a lot of rules' is plural, so the verb should be 'are' not the singular contraction 'there's' (there is). Use 'there are' for plural nouns.

× Example for this is always wearing the ID, proper uniform, proper grooming.

✓ For example, these are always required: wearing the ID, proper uniform, and proper grooming.

The original sentence lacks a clear subject and connector. Starting with 'For example' and using 'these are required' clarifies the list. Also add 'and' before the last item in a list for correct structure.

× Every day we enter the classroom and every school it we it will be monitored by our teachers and guard.

✓ Every day when we enter the classroom and the school, we are monitored by our teachers and guards.

The original has misplaced words and incorrect word order. Use the passive present 'are monitored' to express ongoing monitoring and correct nouns ('guards') and punctuation for clarity.

× Yeah, rules could help student to be disciplined at all times and it helps student to beyond time productive and politely groomed.

✓ Yeah, rules could help students be disciplined at all times, help them be productive on time, and keep them politely groomed.

Use plural 'students' and plural pronouns 'them' when referring to multiple students. Also rephrase awkward parts: 'be productive on time' and 'keep them politely groomed' for clarity and parallel structure.

× Yes, I had a really dedicated teacher when I was on college.

✓ Yes, I had a really dedicated teacher when I was in college.

The correct preposition with 'college' is 'in', not 'on'.

× She taught me how to answer the question bravely, confidently and focused, and I did that during our examination and it really helped to pass the board exam.

✓ She taught me how to answer questions bravely, confidently, and with focus, and I used those skills during our examination; they really helped me pass the board exam.

Use plural 'questions' or omit article, maintain parallel adjective/adverb forms ('bravely, confidently, and with focus'). Also correct pronoun use ('they' or 'those skills') and verb form 'helped me pass' for clarity.

× I prepare a few rules but a good rules per student to discipline to help them in future rather rather than to have many rules to to follow since it could.

✓ I would prefer a few good rules per student to help discipline them for the future, rather than having many rules to follow.

The original has article and number errors ('a good rules' should be 'a few good rules' or 'a few rules'), repetition and unclear phrasing. Use conditional 'would prefer' to match the question and simplify the sentence.

× Yes, we really had a strict teacher before and I think that was on in my Senior High School.

✓ Yes, we had a strict teacher before, and I think that was in my senior high school.

Use 'in' with 'my senior high school' not 'on', and remove redundant words 'really' and 'was' for clarity.

× She was angry whenever she entered our classroom row Rd. to rage and I can't focus.

✓ She would get angry whenever she entered our classroom and start to rage, and I couldn't focus.

The original mixes tenses and includes unclear fragments ('row Rd.'). Use past habitual 'would get angry' and past inability 'couldn't focus' to match context; remove unclear abbreviations.

× Absolutely not. I won't be able to work in rural free school because the student would wouldn't be able to follow and there's no discipline at all.

✓ Absolutely not. I wouldn't be able to work in a rule-free school because the students wouldn't be able to behave and there would be no discipline at all.

Correct the adjective phrase to 'rule-free school', use 'students' plural, fix double negative 'would wouldn't', and use 'would be' for hypothetical lack of discipline. Also 'behave' is clearer than 'follow' here.