规则— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and correct minor grammar mistakes. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give two specific rules with brief reasons. Avoid repetition ("all all") and wrong possessive use ("my phones").

範例: Yes. There are several rules at my school. For example, students cannot leave the campus during school hours for safety and to make sure everyone attends classes. Also, mobile phones are banned in lessons to prevent distractions.

建議: Avoid fillers and improve cohesion. Give a clear opinion first, then two brief reasons using linking words like 'because' and 'so'. Correct grammar (plural/singular) and choose precise vocabulary ('benefit' not 'get advantage').

範例: No, I don't think more rules would help. Because too many rules limit students' freedom, they may feel restricted and become resentful, so their motivation and focus could decline.

建議: Organize the answer chronologically and remove hesitations. State the situation, describe what the teacher did with specific details and the result. Use past tense accurately and avoid repetition.

範例: Yes. When I was at university, I had a very dedicated supervisor who helped me with my master's dissertation. My progress was slow, so he often stayed with me until midnight to review drafts and give feedback, which helped me finish on time.

建議: Use precise vocabulary ('rules' not 'laws') and give one clear reason with a linking word. Avoid repeating phrases and informal contractions like 'wanna' in the test.

範例: I prefer fewer rules at school because they give students a greater sense of freedom, which helps them stay motivated and confident in making decisions.

建議: Be concise and correct tense/word forms ('homework' not 'homeworks', 'junior high school student' -> 'in junior high'). Explain one or two strict behaviours and their effect, using past tense and fewer hesitations.

範例: Yes. When I was in junior high, I had a very strict teacher who always insisted on submitting homework on time and punished late work. Because of her rules, I learned to manage my time and complete tasks promptly.

建議: Give a direct answer, then two clear reasons with examples. Fix grammar and remove hesitations. Use modal verbs correctly (would/could) and avoid vague phrases ('or something').

範例: No, I would not want to teach in a rule-free school. Without rules, students might behave unpredictably and I could struggle to maintain order, which could lead to safety issues or disruptions in learning.

× we are not allowed to leave the school premises during school hours because it is for our safety and to ensure that we all all attend classes.

✓ we are not allowed to leave the school premises during school hours because it is for our safety and to ensure that we all attend classes.

Duplicate word 'all all' is a typographical error causing redundancy. Remove the extra 'all' so the plural subject 'we' and verb 'attend' agree correctly. Suggestion: proofread to remove accidental repeated words.

× Another rule is that my phones are prohibited in lessons to avoid distractions.

✓ Another rule is that mobile phones are prohibited in lessons to avoid distractions.

The pronoun/possessive 'my' is incorrect because the rule applies to students in general, not the speaker's personal phone. Use 'mobile phones' or 'phones' without 'my' to express a general rule.

× I don't think our student would uh, get advantage from more rules to be honest.

✓ I don't think our students would, uh, gain any advantage from more rules, to be honest.

'Our student' is singular but context requires plural 'our students'. Also 'get advantage' is not idiomatic; use 'gain any advantage'. Ensure subject number matches the intended group.

× Umm, for example, uh, the more rules are there, uh, the less they are free.

✓ For example, the more rules there are, the less free they are.

Word order is incorrect: in comparisons like 'the more... the less...' the construction should be 'the more rules there are' not 'the more rules are there'. Move 'there' after 'are' and place 'free' after 'they are' for natural word order.

× Therefore they will start to feel like they are, umm, they have limited capabilities, so they will start to complain about that and will not focus.

✓ Therefore they will start to feel like they have limited capabilities, so they will begin to complain about that and will not be able to focus.

The original repeats subject 'they are, they have' awkwardly. Remove redundant 'they are' and correct 'will not focus' to 'will not be able to focus' for grammaticality and clarity.

× Yes, I had a really dedicated teacher when I was a university student.

✓ Yes, I had a really dedicated teacher when I was a university student.

Sentence is grammatically correct; no change needed. (Included for completeness.)

× At that time I had to write my umm, master dissertation and uh, as I was, I did, my progress was was not good.

✓ At that time I had to write my master's dissertation and my progress was not good.

Use the possessive form 'master's dissertation' and remove repeated words 'was was' and redundant filler phrases. Simplify the clause to maintain past-tense consistency.

× He took some time and uh, took took time till midnight to in order to finish my master.

✓ He spent time, even until midnight, helping me finish my master's dissertation.

The phrase 'took took time' is repetitive and 'to in order to finish my master' is ungrammatical. Use 'spent time' and 'helping me finish my master's dissertation' to express that the teacher assisted until late. Also use 'master's dissertation'.

× I would rather have fewer laws at school, to be honest.

✓ I would rather have fewer rules at school, to be honest.

'Laws' is inappropriate in a school context; 'rules' is the correct plural noun. Article usage is fine but word choice was wrong.

× That's because I wanna have a sense of freedom, and the more I I have, the more frustrating I might feel.

✓ That's because I want to have a sense of freedom, and the more rules I have, the more frustrated I might feel.

Replace informal 'wanna' with 'want to'. The original repeats 'I I' and lacks the noun 'rules' after 'more'. Also use adjective 'frustrated' (feeling) rather than adverb 'frustrating' to describe the speaker's feelings.

× Uh, yes, I had when I was, uh, on junior high school student, He often told, uh, he often told me to, umm, do my homeworks and never let me, uh, be late for the, uh, due the deadlines.

✓ Yes, I had one when I was a junior high school student. He often told me to do my homework and never allowed me to be late for deadlines.

Use 'a junior high school student' or 'when I was in junior high school' for correct noun phrase. 'Homeworks' is incorrect plural; 'homework' is uncountable. 'Never let me be late for the due the deadlines' is ungrammatical—use 'never allowed me to be late for deadlines'.

× And if I, if, if it's overdue, I will have to, uh, do it too. I can complete, I could.

✓ If it was overdue, I would have to do it. I could complete it.

Reported past context requires past tense or conditional: 'if it was overdue' with 'would have to' or in past narration 'if it was overdue, I had to do it.' 'I can complete, I could' is unclear; 'I could complete it' fits past narration.

× I actually don't want to work as a teacher in the role play school because I will not be able to take care of the children.

✓ I actually don't want to work as a teacher in a role-play school because I would not be able to take care of the children.

Use 'role-play school' (hyphenated noun) and switch tense/modality to 'would not' to express hypothetical preference. 'The role play school' implies a specific school; use indefinite article if meaning any such school.

× They because they might act as they want and I will not control.

✓ They might act as they want and I would not be able to control them.

Remove misplaced 'because' and rephrase. 'I will not control' is ungrammatical; use 'I would not be able to control them' to express inability in a hypothetical situation. Include object pronoun 'them'.

× I will lose the control of the student.

✓ I would lose control of the students.

Use plural 'students' to match general meaning and omit 'the' unless referring to a specific student. Use 'would' for hypothetical. 'Lose control' is the correct expression.

× Will that will potentially result in the accidents or something?

✓ That could potentially result in accidents or something.

Original has redundant 'Will that will' and wrong question form. Rephrase as a declarative or use 'Would that potentially result in accidents?' for a question. Use 'accidents' without 'the' for general reference.