规则— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is generally clear and relevant, but it can be more concise and natural. Avoid redundancy like "I do remember about the rules that I had in my school"; instead, say "I remember the rules at my school." Also, the phrase "which is primarily important for discipline at that" is awkward; you can say "which was important for maintaining discipline." Try to keep your answer within 4-5 sentences and use linking words to improve coherence.

範例: I remember that at my school, students had to keep their nails short. Growing or painting nails was not allowed, as it was important for maintaining discipline among students.

建議: Your answer addresses the question well and includes supporting details. To improve, use linking words like "however" or "for instance" to connect ideas smoothly. Also, avoid repeating similar phrases like "I believe" twice; instead, combine your ideas for better flow. Adding a specific example would make your answer more vivid and convincing.

範例: I think more rules are not always beneficial; however, enforcing some rules is necessary to maintain school decorum. For instance, students could be allowed to bend certain rules if they have genuine reasons, such as medical needs.

建議: Your answer is detailed and relevant, showing good structure. To improve, avoid minor grammatical errors like "there was some pupils" (should be "there were some pupils"). Also, use linking words such as "because" or "so" to connect ideas more naturally. Try to vary your vocabulary a bit more to enhance your answer.

範例: Certainly, I remember a professor from my college named Miss Bhavana. She taught very well because she was passionate about her subject. She always ensured that students understood the material, and even when some pupils asked questions repeatedly, she responded patiently and calmly.

× Currently I'm a working professional, but I do remember about the rules that I had in my school.

✓ Currently I'm a working professional, but I do remember the rules that I had in my school.

The preposition 'about' is incorrectly used after 'remember'. In English, 'remember' is directly followed by the object without 'about'. So, 'remember the rules' is correct, not 'remember about the rules'.

× It was forbidden to grow, paint, or do any kind of nail art, which is primarily important for discipline at that.

✓ It was forbidden to grow, paint, or do any kind of nail art, which is primarily important for discipline at that school.

The phrase 'at that' is incomplete and unclear. The definite article 'the' should be used with a noun to specify the place, so 'at that school' is correct. Omitting the noun after 'that' causes confusion.

× I believe some rules should be flexible, for example, they should be allowed to bend rules when the reason is genuine or quite acceptable.

✓ I believe some rules should be flexible; for example, students should be allowed to bend rules when the reason is genuine or quite acceptable.

The pronoun 'they' is ambiguous here. It is unclear who 'they' refers to. Replacing 'they' with 'students' clarifies the subject who is allowed to bend the rules.

× Even if there was some pupils who used to ask her questions repeatedly, she made sure that her responses were always calm.

✓ Even if there were some pupils who used to ask her questions repeatedly, she made sure that her responses were always calm.

The subject 'pupils' is plural, so the verb should be 'were' instead of 'was' to agree in number. 'Some pupils' requires plural verb form.