规则— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is a bit unclear and contains some repetition and grammatical errors. Try to give a clear topic sentence and then add specific examples using linking words. For example, you can say, "Yes, there are several rules at my school. For instance, students must wear uniforms, maintain discipline, and keep themselves neat and clean."

範例: Yes, there are several rules at my school. For instance, students must wear uniforms, maintain discipline, and keep themselves neat and clean. These rules help create a positive learning environment.

建議: Your answer lacks clarity and has some grammatical mistakes. Try to structure your answer with a clear opinion and supporting reasons using linking words. For example, "Yes, I believe more rules can benefit students because they help students become more disciplined and learn good habits."

範例: Yes, I believe more rules can benefit students because they help students become more disciplined and learn good habits. For example, rules about punctuality encourage students to be on time, which is important for their future.

建議: Your answer has good content but needs better sentence structure and linking words to improve clarity. Try to give a clear topic sentence and then add specific details. For example, "Yes, my science teacher Susmita does her job very well. She explains complex topics clearly and is both intelligent and polite."

範例: Yes, my science teacher Susmita does her job very well. She explains complex topics clearly and is both intelligent and polite. I enjoy learning from her because she makes science interesting and easy to understand.

× Yes, of course there are so, so, so many rules that that we have to follow up.

✓ Yes, of course there are so many rules that we have to follow.

The phrase 'follow up' is incorrectly used here; 'follow' is the correct verb to indicate obeying rules. Also, the repetition of 'that' is unnecessary. 'There are' is correctly used for plural 'rules'.

× But there is a same legacy like we have to follow our discipline, we have to wear a uniform, we have to make a 21 of here and which we have to be neat and clean and well communicate like this.

✓ But there is the same legacy that we have to follow our discipline, we have to wear a uniform, we have to make a 21 of here, and we have to be neat, clean, and communicate well like this.

The phrase 'a same legacy' should be 'the same legacy' (article error). 'Like' should be 'that' to introduce a clause. 'Make a 21 of here' is unclear and likely incorrect; it is left as is due to lack of context. 'Well communicate' should be 'communicate well' (adverb placement). Also, commas are needed to separate items in a list.

× Of course, students get more benefit, more advantages from the rules they started following up.

✓ Of course, students get more benefits and advantages from the rules they start following.

'Started following up' is incorrect; 'start following' is the correct present tense form. 'Benefit' should be plural 'benefits' to match 'advantages'. 'Following up' is incorrect here; 'following' is appropriate.

× Like they become more. Away they become more disciplined and they started learning the good things from the rules and regulation that show up a good path.

✓ Like they become more aware, they become more disciplined, and they start learning good things from the rules and regulations that show a good path.

'Away' should be 'aware' (word choice). 'Started learning' should be 'start learning' to maintain present tense. 'Rules and regulation' should be plural 'rules and regulations'. 'Show up a good path' should be 'show a good path' (incorrect phrasal verb).

× Yes, I have one teacher her name is Susmita, she is my science teacher.

✓ Yes, I have one teacher; her name is Susmita, and she is my science teacher.

The sentence is a run-on; it needs proper punctuation or conjunctions. Adding a semicolon and 'and' improves clarity.

× I really liked her the way she talked and she taught us how the biochemicals work in a chemical lab and I literally find her so intelligent as well as well manner at the same time.

✓ I really like the way she talks and teaches us how biochemicals work in a chemical lab, and I find her very intelligent as well as well-mannered at the same time.

Tense inconsistency: 'liked' should be 'like' to match present context. 'She talked' and 'she taught' should be 'she talks' and 'teaches'. 'Literally' is unnecessary and informal here. 'Well manner' should be 'well-mannered' (adjective form).

× So I just love to talk with her her intelligent label how she.

✓ So I just love to talk with her about her intelligence and how she teaches.

The original sentence is incomplete and unclear. It needs restructuring to convey the intended meaning clearly.