规则— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 你的回答中存在语法错误和表达不清晰的问题，建议简化句子结构，避免重复，并且注意时态和单复数的正确使用。可以先直接回答问题，然后用具体例子支持，保持句子简洁自然。

範例: Yes, there are many rules at my school. For example, students are not allowed to bring backpacks, they must tie up their hair, and the rubber bands they use should only be black or blue.

建議: 回答中表达不够流畅，语法和用词有误。建议先明确表达观点，然后用具体原因支持，使用连接词使句子更连贯。

範例: Yes, I believe more rules can be beneficial because they teach us discipline. Moreover, following rules at school helps us understand the importance of rules in society.

建議: 回答缺乏条理，句子重复且不完整。建议先给出明确的观点，然后用具体例子支持，避免重复，保持句子简洁且连贯。

範例: I think all my teachers do their jobs well, but my Chinese teacher stands out. She helped me a lot during my high school years, especially when I prepared for the DSE exam, and I am very grateful to her.

× I remember I was a student there are many rules at my school like I can't bring my back to school and I need to tie up my hair and the rubber must be black or blue that are not allowed any different color.

✓ I remember when I was a student, there were many rules at my school, like I couldn't bring my backpack to school, I needed to tie up my hair, and the rubber bands had to be black or blue; other colors were not allowed.

句子中缺少连接词，且“there are many rules”时态不对，应为过去时“there were many rules”。此外，“can't bring my back”应为“couldn't bring my backpack”，语法和拼写错误。需要使用过去时态和正确的表达方式。

× I remember I was a student there are many rules at my school like I can't bring my back to school and I need to tie up my hair and the rubber must be black or blue that are not allowed any different color.

✓ I remember when I was a student, there were many rules at my school, like I couldn't bring my backpack to school, I needed to tie up my hair, and the rubber bands had to be black or blue; other colors were not allowed.

“can't”在描述过去的规则时应使用过去式“couldn't”，同理“need to”应改为过去式“needed to”，而“must”在过去时态中应使用“had to”。

× I remember I was a student there are many rules at my school like I can't bring my back to school and I need to tie up my hair and the rubber must be black or blue that are not allowed any different color.

✓ I remember when I was a student, there were many rules at my school, like I couldn't bring my backpack to school, I needed to tie up my hair, and the rubber bands had to be black or blue; other colors were not allowed.

“the rubber”应为复数形式“the rubber bands”，因为指的是多条橡皮筋。

× Yes, I think that is some benefits from more rules because we must follow the rule not just in the school and we must follow the rules outside the society.

✓ Yes, I think there are some benefits from more rules because we must follow the rules not just in school but also outside in society.

“must”用法正确，但“rule”应为复数“rules”，且“in the school”应简化为“in school”，“outside the society”应为“outside in society”。

× Yes, I think that is some benefits from more rules because we must follow the rule not just in the school and we must follow the rules outside the society.

✓ Yes, I think there are some benefits from more rules because we must follow the rules not just in school but also outside in society.

“some benefits”是复数，谓语应使用“are”而非“is”；“rule”应为复数“rules”。

× Yes, I think that is some benefits from more rules because we must follow the rule not just in the school and we must follow the rules outside the society.

✓ Yes, I think there are some benefits from more rules because we must follow the rules not just in school but also outside in society.

“in the school”中的定冠词“the”不必要，通常说“in school”；“outside the society”中“the”也不需要，应该说“outside in society”。

× I think all the teachers have done their job very well, not especially one or two.

✓ I think all the teachers have done their jobs very well, not just one or two in particular.

“their job”应为复数“their jobs”，因为指多个老师各自的工作。

× I remember, for example, I remember my Chinese teacher at my high school because of her.

✓ For example, I remember my Chinese teacher at my high school because of her.

句子中重复使用“I remember”造成结构混乱，应去掉重复部分。

× I have a high school during my DSE.

✓ I had a high school teacher during my DSE.

句子结构不完整且表达不清，“have a high school”不合适，应为“had a high school teacher”。

× So I really think I really thankful because of of her.

✓ So I am really thankful because of her.

缺少系动词“am”，且“because of of”重复，应改为“because of”。